首先,在此說聲感謝。
【第6期創作挑戰】歷時1年才將其完成評比。
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原先應該在今年初完成最終結語。
但在這期間,我遇到了職場上必須離開台灣本島一段很長的時間。
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身邊除了沒有電腦用,又外加大寶處於一歲難照顧的時期,同時間又懷了二寶。
生活的考驗不斷地消彌我對於創作的熱誠,與占據了大多數的空閒。
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我必須說。
很遺憾的有些人在一年後已經離開了蕉園。
他(她)們沒能等待到這一次的落幕。
也很可惜。
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最後,我將再次感謝你們願意耐心等待這場落幕儀式。
-----Lonely Fish 2024.11.06
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恭喜第六期的創作挑戰榮獲2023創作挑戰第二名的殊榮

這次的費時長達一年的時間來完成評比。
這裡我可以大膽的跟各位報告,每一篇作品少說都讀過兩次以上,並且全部都留下語評。
240篇文筆不一的文章,我必須老實說「讀起來,真的燒腦的一蹋糊塗。」
但創作理念熱誠還在,這些都不是問題。
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以上廢話結束。
接著,我們準備公布這次的成績,並在後面留下一點這個創作挑戰的心得。
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由於篇幅眾多。(小說類190篇,新詩類44篇,其他6篇。)
我採取小說正取前20篇,以我個人主觀挑選在故事劇情、用字、人物刻劃都能拿上檯面。
並且讓人願意反覆閱讀的好作品。
我會「盡量」挑選字數符合在1500字的作品。
另外,在新詩的部分,由於主題應當以新詩作為框架。
但考量到部分樂府詩、古詩這類的作品,故此一併用單純「詩」的角度去作為出發點,進行評選。
另外,額外兩個獨力拉出來的獎項,分別是【最佳電腦繪畫獎】及【最佳創作金曲獎】,後續會多作說明。
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小說類
【1】凶讀 $5000
▶#20 #21 夏日湖畔(上+下) #104 夏日湖畔(番外)香氣
▶已連續三篇故事銜接的方式,引領讀者深入,不管在用字上,人物刻劃都非常的好。
▶語評
「剪不斷,理還亂,是離愁。別是一般滋味在心頭。」李煜一句思念妻子的思緒,在第一章的開局,讓人無限醞釀著,那多麼曾經的美好。945Please respect copyright.PENANADX3FTiLb3w
接續則是父親與孩兒間,多年來已未溫存的親情。
畫面是那麼地美不勝收---945Please respect copyright.PENANATcIi50yULX
945Please respect copyright.PENANARQMwaH0yMP
又一刻,轉折接踵而來。945Please respect copyright.PENANAChGtwuuL5K
一陣猛咳,替換的是埋下了這段故事另一處伏筆。945Please respect copyright.PENANAzw2LxUchzz
一個故事之內容精采萬分,之所以讓人看了血脈噴張,捨不得放下,就是因為其中的不平凡。945Please respect copyright.PENANAGgJDuJZDIM
而這篇在下章就是如此。945Please respect copyright.PENANASfUhKcE9dW
945Please respect copyright.PENANApnlsUEcgkK
林佑堂的變故,是突來的喪屍系列。945Please respect copyright.PENANA5Mx6V0UtRc
估計讀者心到此處,仍處在數度混亂之中,這便也是作者凶讀所達成的目的。945Please respect copyright.PENANAuW8zuFQ1dL
耐人尋味的親情,卻轉折為末日的延續,更讓人有敲碗再看下去續篇的打算。945Please respect copyright.PENANANHmcPifzKH
而在那新聞快訊後,簡潔地收尾結束,更把這篇有力的畫下句點。945Please respect copyright.PENANA3hHu7NbefF
是否疫情將緩和停滯,這我們無從得知。945Please respect copyright.PENANAq2zdi1UgoL
但唯一明白的卻是,那份恐懼感已然存於你內心深處,餘音繞梁三日不絕。945Please respect copyright.PENANA3rnOcxEGbA
945Please respect copyright.PENANAyPi8A9D0BT
在104章的番外篇延續了,讀者再次想要的畫面,凶讀更是樂善好施地將畫面全數帶給讀者,簡直令人幸福得太過不要。945Please respect copyright.PENANAdaD48FSZZ6
「我知道你們還想看對吧?那我就接續再寫下去。」那份激昂感,卻給了我們內心違和的感動。945Please respect copyright.PENANAqSXvbQaDgq
還記得去年在Netflix看過殭屍校園,雖故事的起點不同,卻有類似的風格,而在中部開始傳染開來的病毒,又是否會使政府展開鎖國政策呢?945Please respect copyright.PENANAEw67FJuxOD
這又將會是另外的話題,我們便不多做討論。
945Please respect copyright.PENANAmGaNoLYqGy
眼下,有的只剩讀者的幻想空間。
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【2】 Devor 白棘 $4000
▶#123 終末的煙火 #138 終末的海洋 #147 終末的冰箱
▶這三篇故事,可以分開閱讀獨立的章節,也可以連貫再一起成為一篇長篇。
▶語評
非常罕見的倒述寫法。945Please respect copyright.PENANARI08vcDadS
在第三篇中我們才知道歐林945Please respect copyright.PENANAU6GgI8en1p
這故是關鍵的人物945Please respect copyright.PENANAFSXgXEAUx0
自此才明白,原來他不僅僅是想要復活945Please respect copyright.PENANAncwCEfXTLg
最強吸血鬼兼任戀人的芙蕾兒並且同時想延續那個諾言945Please respect copyright.PENANAY0QtBSzts0
945Please respect copyright.PENANAkcUnrMdv8y
「我們的孩子」945Please respect copyright.PENANABK7e5EGLjL
這連續性的故事寫法特殊、故事完整945Please respect copyright.PENANAJ84PZGgJ5l
實為本次【第六期創挑】中非常少見的用詞精簡,劇情完整的好文。945Please respect copyright.PENANAdKWjm2Q44Q
而相信自芙蕾兒離開前往新的星球後945Please respect copyright.PENANAL1cAak5phO
也肯定還會有新的故事起點945Please respect copyright.PENANA60ncJYsyXN
然而天下無不散的宴席945Please respect copyright.PENANAvzCIDDtZcS
我們本次故事便到此結束945Please respect copyright.PENANAL8l8LtGfQX
希望下次還能再次相遇
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【3】東加豆 $3000
▶#57 在雅典46度的邂逅
▶在眾多篇幅中,脫穎而出的是,故事僅只是讀過一次,卻能留下一種強烈的遺憾感,即便是第一次語評後,過了一年仍舊記得這篇故事。
▶語評
從引頸期盼到衝動遠行再到心灰意冷,全都只在一念轉瞬之間。945Please respect copyright.PENANAKrneG32oLy
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時而濕冷刺骨,時而溫暖潤人。只有那若隱若現的鹽澀味。翻越了半個地球曲面的海風,再次又為女孩捎來了,希臘赤道的浪漫。945Please respect copyright.PENANAyl4LoGv4wY
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然而,言語中就是躲藏不了的宿命。爭執,同時是不可避免的毒藥。945Please respect copyright.PENANAOJis6yLh2c
雖然亞歷山大沉默寡言,卻又可能內心同樣掀起幾絲驚滔駭浪,過猶那地中海的濱海陸風。945Please respect copyright.PENANA4pcSci1cAH
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十日的短暫浪漫,在最後無言的結局中就畫下了浪漫的破碎。璇姑娘,那女孩。在22歲的希臘,不帶走任何一片雲彩。
945Please respect copyright.PENANAFC6UTfq17p
【4】嚮往國度 $2000
▶#122 回不去的夏天
▶語評
或許,女孩在男孩的心目中,尚未離開世間,只是去了一趟旅行。945Please respect copyright.PENANAx4lg8lBG7u
然而,她早已成為了徘徊在兩人過去記憶的地縛靈,只是男孩至今仍未知情。945Please respect copyright.PENANARjwi3blSqu
從首段讓讀者猜測,或許是與女孩的某項約定,卻未料想竟是場人鬼情未了。945Please respect copyright.PENANA5Y20bhwhRP
直當夏季,在眾人眼底,我仍舊是個念舊的傻瓜。945Please respect copyright.PENANAJ66ren2xvH
----我也會赴約前往只有我倆的地方。945Please respect copyright.PENANAZ0EsxCLtwb
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我嘗試幻想,如果女孩不是同學,而是男孩的親妹妹呢?945Please respect copyright.PENANAmCDvtpLEqa
會不會是父母親對他倆默許的戀兄情節呢?945Please respect copyright.PENANAx1Iic6cLZV
最後的一栗核桃果,放進的並非只是男孩的口袋,反而是讀者的腦海深處的下丘帶,是令人抑鬱不住的交感情緒。945Please respect copyright.PENANAtL1zY9IVxx
房內的擺設習慣仍舊未變,然而變得是男孩儼然未知心態變化。945Please respect copyright.PENANAoxSUSO5ajD
直當年齡越大,約定束縛卻也越輕。只是他仍未發現而已。945Please respect copyright.PENANAlr24KbTOLP
「我還會再來此地嗎?」內心的他,或許有一天終會發現。945Please respect copyright.PENANA6k5YEak32b
而從「想見你。」,直至餘生再也不見,那又會是怎麼樣子的感概呢?945Please respect copyright.PENANA1nkFobgMIz
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「體貼不該在離別,你會讓該死心的的人還有留戀。」而妳最後的溫柔,也讓那個總是跌跌撞撞的男孩,終究打破了直男的心房,如此的明示,最終他也肯定發現了這些蛛絲馬跡了吧。945Please respect copyright.PENANA1FbUzPvBFq
我,還會再來嗎?每年盛夏,妳還會再此處嗎?945Please respect copyright.PENANAawljgXgb4X
陡然間,男孩的一抹淚痕伴隨著成長悄然滑下。
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男孩離開後山後,她對著空無一人無助地嘶喊著:「你,明年別再來了。」945Please respect copyright.PENANAgkkT8PfoEA
儘管未來,女孩不知道是否成為了男孩心中最熟悉的陌生人。但那奈河橋上,望穿著黃泉;凝視著他仍未走完人生的女孩,直至走過彼岸花叢,喝完了孟婆湯,她仍相信來生幾世,倆人肯定還能再相見。
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【5】大三明治 $2000
▶#86 拉普拉斯的白兔
▶語評
一個無限循環的惡夢(應該算是)945Please respect copyright.PENANAgEaNuauuHU
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原先還在思索拉普拉斯的兔子的我,直到看完了故事才知道,我根本無需糾結這個地方。945Please respect copyright.PENANADKzGM53gLC
因為故事已經告訴我了。
文章開篇以學長為起點。945Please respect copyright.PENANAKEAXxruLfE
而故事線轉回到了從前。945Please respect copyright.PENANAlgSF1bJsfC
自己也成了那個月曦口中的學長,令人感覺到不自覺的寒顫,而這份帶入感的恐懼,正是結尾伏筆所醞釀而出的感覺。
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【6】九指三爺 $1500
▶#23 爸爸,還要去哪裡玩?
▶語評
第一段尚未讀完,一道與父親訣別的感傷便先湧上心頭。945Please respect copyright.PENANAWJGtChffPN
父親未竟的誓言,是兩人心中永遠的隔閡。945Please respect copyright.PENANARYNQLWrgKa
為何情感總道別離時才會讓人醞釀開來?945Please respect copyright.PENANAz8IwOLWxh6
又為何說別讓遺憾留下,卻滿地皆為遺憾?945Please respect copyright.PENANAfTEfjkyjav
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告別式中,可以想見的到,父親再娶的家庭該是與自己有著違和的場面;畢竟,自己本已就不屬於另個家庭的一份子。945Please respect copyright.PENANA5aNaOX5JBZ
然而,雙方彼此嘗試性的接納,早已打破很多舊時代時候的情緒。945Please respect copyright.PENANAOqTiUaJz5F
這點相信生活上只要遭遇過這種際遇的人,心底怕是比起你、我都更加了解。945Please respect copyright.PENANAOMCekpZpj8
由愛轉恨、恨轉怨,再到冷淡。945Please respect copyright.PENANAmOdQvJhOo9
這才是常態。
945Please respect copyright.PENANAZIomft7S2H
父親厚繭的雙手,在威利心中是永成長時永遠的心魔。945Please respect copyright.PENANAJY4kQMNYtO
直到最後一刻,得知了父親原是愛著自己的時候,淚水又該如何能止住潸落。945Please respect copyright.PENANAz2mLdZURc8
一代親情,未竟的諾言,終究還是謊言。945Please respect copyright.PENANALtM65IE5z4
即便,在告別式中聽到了這些真實話語,可父親仍舊一次都回來見過自己一面,又何如?945Please respect copyright.PENANAYPMwQ2MA6E
一句「父親,接著去哪玩......?」沉重般的自喃,更多的卻是解放開對自己的束縛,並非是對父親救贖。
945Please respect copyright.PENANA6esqvLnV1I
告別式後,這些人或許餘生不見。945Please respect copyright.PENANAxXeoobm3aN
然而,此等心情又豈是說忘就忘。945Please respect copyright.PENANAVPUjpYqd1h
原來,痛便是忘了怎麼把過去給忘掉。
945Please respect copyright.PENANAGbr4l0FsD4
這個盛夏,剩下遺憾。
945Please respect copyright.PENANAdQF8CLrvcN
【7】思凡 $1500
▶#94 贈我予年
▶語評
故事的結尾是有著強烈的後勁的。945Please respect copyright.PENANA9zmPiLbOmk
整篇閱讀後,在開頭以宋予年在百忙之中,突然發覺了「她」的名字,突然之間再次走入了自己的人生。945Please respect copyright.PENANAiy7n6XUjsR
至此,幾年前分別以後。945Please respect copyright.PENANALTi6PUfuvC
情感又悄悄地、毫無預警的映入了生命之中。945Please respect copyright.PENANANP48ZyTiIR
945Please respect copyright.PENANAbZKP34Ia02
「贈我,予年。」或許標題應當可以分開兩字來讀。945Please respect copyright.PENANAuSEJEx4uhG
文中沒有提及到女孩當初為何離開了,然而,接續著故事推敲,讓我們得知。945Please respect copyright.PENANAlAVVJgUvRi
也是是疾病纏身。945Please respect copyright.PENANAjAq2P9gotc
也迫不得已,離開了他。945Please respect copyright.PENANA4nckkzslm0
945Please respect copyright.PENANAslohg951KU
贈我,是一個約定。945Please respect copyright.PENANA5T0pNeMm1p
一個約定券的約定。 945Please respect copyright.PENANAN4sPGeudld
而再見之時,人事已非。945Please respect copyright.PENANASCSCEhJOV1
那個我已經不再是原本的那個我,但你還會深愛著我嗎?945Please respect copyright.PENANAe6JmkK177j
945Please respect copyright.PENANAr9m41sLMlF
945Please respect copyright.PENANAsXbrPNG51z
此刻,盛夏煙花燦爛,卻不如妳。945Please respect copyright.PENANAjGmEpTZ1jr
或許,再見不遠。 945Please respect copyright.PENANALj4jLiiLG6
讓就那緣起三生起,三生滅吧。
945Please respect copyright.PENANAXj3cCXI46E
【8】青蒼 Cyanblue $1500
▶#47 青夏,十七歲
▶語評
如同青澀地稚嫩十八未滿。那愛戀都如此單純與小心翼翼。
945Please respect copyright.PENANAZriQb974s8
女方刻意放緩的進度向前,歷經長達三年感情滋養,在學年畢業的最後一刻,差點翻船的心情更是令人跟隨帶入那份苦澀。945Please respect copyright.PENANAmga2EIRSwy
就像青春微酸甜那般。945Please respect copyright.PENANAC3PUxcSJBL
忌妒、單戀,都是青春代表物。945Please respect copyright.PENANASyFWnQuiqG
林夏芮不按照牌理出牌的外向性格,羅青澤在最後眼淚落下那刻才敲響了內心的鐘鳴,迴盪在內心心頭。945Please respect copyright.PENANAZpWfegOY5D
945Please respect copyright.PENANAAn17W870Xp
「原來這就是喜歡的心思。」我們不能怪男生呆如愚木,畢竟又有多少人能在高中時期對於未來、對於愛情掌握的滿分修行呢?945Please respect copyright.PENANAllZIbJ5zOC
夏天的故事,炙熱卻又充滿了愛戀的渲染。比擬冬日,我們更加容易觸動是主動的熱情。945Please respect copyright.PENANA4nOol9AB0C
劉子傑的主動,或許在我們眼底,更像是跳樑小丑那般故作醜態。945Please respect copyright.PENANA5vyhKSA7gn
但就現實面來說,如果今天劉子傑與羅青澤兩人都具備同等的帥氣,同等的條件,那麼主動宣示的那方勝率還是會更高。945Please respect copyright.PENANArTzrg4ZKph
或許,歷經過這次的告白失敗,在未來能成為他愛情的一個學分也猶未可知。945Please respect copyright.PENANAMVk1e9lpXV
反而寫成了另一個故事的主角。945Please respect copyright.PENANAFnGsctvosm
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945Please respect copyright.PENANAxvSmaZsm9H
「人間的確荒謬,可我們還是能在這個人間拾溫柔。」故事曖昧的兩小無猜終成一對眷侶,而畢業後、就業後,又是否能續緣,我們無法猜測最後結局。945Please respect copyright.PENANApiNMjL7iq1
心動往往只是一剎那,喜歡卻是一輩子的記憶。945Please respect copyright.PENANAiLyGhdsUhD
如果有一天,我們也面臨那份剎那的怦然心動,你/妳又是否敢勇於這份悸動,邁向這份回應呢?945Please respect copyright.PENANASUh7lMnKa7
945Please respect copyright.PENANAX9JuQOg3s4
夏天,依舊是夏天。但不一樣是我們的內心。
945Please respect copyright.PENANAHJAwQAx7ZO
【9】墨云 $1500
▶#28 盛夏與魔女
▶語評
這是我見過最鮮蝦的奇幻劇情了。945Please respect copyright.PENANArOxMJMV6Q3
尤其這男人,絕對是個狠人,全部的純情只為了鋪敘結尾的那慾望。
945Please respect copyright.PENANAMs32aa2Vu7
開門見山的斗大魔女標題,早已告訴了這不能用平常的校園看待故事。945Please respect copyright.PENANALh5MSHwgK0
而更為新奇的是簡單的一個小手段就處理好了,蟬靈的糾結,這同時打破了我對魔女的刻板印象。945Please respect copyright.PENANAhgTcaRKjD8
魔女的天然呆更是突如其來一筆。945Please respect copyright.PENANAw21E7cfLf2
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最後,故事的結尾再次迎來一次,天外飛來兩筆的性慾交易,這確實打破了讀者對於故事原先的美好幻想。945Please respect copyright.PENANAgNqQXX2vYb
只得獲得一次白眼與冰冷感。
945Please respect copyright.PENANAqRGlE9mHKO
【10】罪夜 $1500
▶#169 戀愛炸彈
▶語評
藉由肉體爆炸的引爆點劃開了對於戀愛的追求,是那樣獨特卻又邪門。945Please respect copyright.PENANAkAiQI1h4b7
945Please respect copyright.PENANA8nho6d9It7
百鬼夜行獨見妳。千里迷離卻是妳。945Please respect copyright.PENANAecL90xK3RK
我喜愛著,這般怪異卻令人心動的瞬間。945Please respect copyright.PENANAT3iVmRpbJx
因那悸動。945Please respect copyright.PENANAzBLmASGIlo
往往竟是那瞬間。
945Please respect copyright.PENANAQshVRk5GQM
即便長大後再交往的女排球隊長,仍舊不行。945Please respect copyright.PENANAobNrPEqtpv
式風透過了那次的爆炸,早已在尋響內心埋下了一顆揮之不去的種子。945Please respect copyright.PENANAiY1owZcdOo
真愛,不僅是人與人之間的感情,更是當你真心喜愛某事、某物,而願意竭盡心力的付出,使他變得更好、更幸福。945Please respect copyright.PENANAj0bH9KOEFa
那麼讓自己爆炸,也算是一種真愛嗎?945Please respect copyright.PENANAFtj09V5CwY
945Please respect copyright.PENANAP46uMdEDji
語畢,尋響的爆炸是否讓兩人在另一個百鬼的世界相守相繫,這個猶未可知。945Please respect copyright.PENANAx1DVJyDmzO
但至少可以確定的是,他卻早已觸動了內心最深處的那個戀愛因子了。945Please respect copyright.PENANAw8tplce2sI
「我感到心滿意足。」然而他滿意的就是真的是自己也喜愛著對方,又抑或是對方仍舊七年來愛著自己呢?
945Please respect copyright.PENANAKpInrzJwqF
【11】 舉一千從 $1000
▶#182 〈澐寨舞〉
▶語評(詳留言)
945Please respect copyright.PENANAnowVthoqdr
【12】 莫軒 $1000
▶#239 末世終結之後,我在破曉的晨曦窺見夏日的生機,但故人不再
▶語評(詳留言)
945Please respect copyright.PENANAYuYH5R8ktu
【13】 逆流而上 $1000
▶#185+189+192 蘇拉與山竹
▶語評(詳留言)
945Please respect copyright.PENANABDtZatRWQP
【14】指尖之間 $1000
▶#119 回憶剩夏,不增減的約定
▶語評(詳留言)
945Please respect copyright.PENANAW2QKgY0UU0
【15】Mag Kan $1000
▶#231 那年盛夏,我們沒有約定
▶語評(詳留言)
945Please respect copyright.PENANAuLx9pfXblR
【16】沙發王的故事 $1000
▶#24 我們約定好了喔?
▶語評(詳留言)
945Please respect copyright.PENANA9tDQqf8Z1h
【17】八十公里路 $1000
▶#10 我的心裡,還有夏天嗎
▶語評(詳留言)
945Please respect copyright.PENANASHAUpw8wAD
【18】 不寫文的紜啊 $1000
▶#43 《失約》
▶語評(詳留言)
945Please respect copyright.PENANAXbUlfC0hn8
【19】 夜臨 $1000
▶#49 天使大人的玻璃傘
▶語評(詳留言)
945Please respect copyright.PENANATfJuRVXXaz
【20】笑耶 $1000
▶#214+216+218 故地重遊(上+中+下)
▶語評(詳留言)
945Please respect copyright.PENANASORzhr5BCy
【佳作1】莫軒 $500
▶#77 我如何把你比作夏天?
【佳作2】But $500
▶#150 夏天!當然是暑假到處玩啦
【佳作3】供過佛的多多綠 $500
▶#67 那年盛夏
【佳作4】旭音愁渺 $500
▶#198 一起做餅乾
【佳作5】癲客道人 $500
▶#136 日間顯影
945Please respect copyright.PENANAfy34tTzj3E
【複評未上榜】
▶#6 盛夏之夢 ▶#50 滿天星 ▶#146 夏戀 ▶#238 夏雨滂沱
945Please respect copyright.PENANA9yJmdBrz6W
新詩類
945Please respect copyright.PENANAtqDQ6Cg4eV
【1】西帆 $4000
▶#203 夏•冬眠
▶語評
本作於擬人、擬物手法上十分精巧945Please respect copyright.PENANALWi9Dbe33V
重複運用卻又沒有多餘的氛圍945Please respect copyright.PENANAhdLs2Cxein
而藉由水果方式提升(味覺)945Please respect copyright.PENANAfACZc4goPp
我想更是使閱讀來能有另一種味道,而不止是品詩這麼簡單945Please respect copyright.PENANAemOf9BpeWq
而是是人在食用時能入口即化945Please respect copyright.PENANAZpF39E1iK0
945Please respect copyright.PENANADd5NDxi0cW
945Please respect copyright.PENANAeobuw9oSKe
「嘗試把心臟調慢」945Please respect copyright.PENANAK1scCxug6c
我尤以喜歡這句,心臟當然不會跳動變慢,但內心(精神)的感覺卻可以,慢而持久945Please respect copyright.PENANAxP5Mld4rfZ
使人不會因為時間的洪流945Please respect copyright.PENANA71iveGwlmq
失去了炙熱945Please respect copyright.PENANA7W4zEWGhbW
945Please respect copyright.PENANAGBFBst2Tag
945Please respect copyright.PENANAMeAHr59OW8
詩名為《夏,冬眠》945Please respect copyright.PENANA0um77kxsXl
但夏季怎麼會有雪945Please respect copyright.PENANAgpfrIGT8db
令人加以反思945Please respect copyright.PENANAxWmemxCgy5
雪季不該有的畫面945Please respect copyright.PENANAOjuP0UYGBM
卻如那噠噠的馬蹄聲,走過歲月的容顏945Please respect copyright.PENANAI21eZIZEtv
945Please respect copyright.PENANAgpDFi2i7ji
或許945Please respect copyright.PENANAy6rVrRhJzE
不只這個夏季呼吸充滿著冰凍的雪氣945Please respect copyright.PENANAZBBqP0qCFI
即便是來年945Please respect copyright.PENANAf9PV64Gcgq
之後的每一年都依然如此
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【2】 Nølav 挪拉夫 $3000
▶#102 戀夏
▶語評
情有幾分、愛有幾分,情愛一生只不過是貪戀癡嗔。945Please respect copyright.PENANA1sbj0I4iPM
如那鄭少秋歌詞裡的悲傷優柔,我仍沐浴在這片刻的悸夏蕩漾之間,正如首段那句夜星彌留著如你的容顏,這會令人更加拌佐孤寂的味道,與憶起漸行漸遠的那伊人。945Please respect copyright.PENANAhBp4L2WZqz
945Please respect copyright.PENANAsVeYyyVg3V
我打江南走過,卻仍等候的是你季節裡的容顏如島國般夏風。945Please respect copyright.PENANAYBPjLcsjXB
猶如鹹濕海風,亦如她漆黑雙眸之間是否仍容下有你的一隅。945Please respect copyright.PENANANK1n44O2jH
又如我吱吱的淺吻聲是美麗的衝動。945Please respect copyright.PENANA63oX4Wb70P
我不是歸人,是個過客。夏季仍舊是夏季。945Please respect copyright.PENANAZLnf2sTXwe
945Please respect copyright.PENANArHOSspLMW4
景物依然,妳卻不然。945Please respect copyright.PENANAteJbtamRGw
多年已逝,歲月靜好不在。945Please respect copyright.PENANALnUc1kA6lT
更多的是此刻的情殤。945Please respect copyright.PENANA3jOq5JZzFk
945Please respect copyright.PENANACAuyXs23D5
而長生殿上楊玉環,幽怨了千年至今仍迴盪那長恨歌。945Please respect copyright.PENANA133tGmYWzC
又是否譬如我此時的心思呢?945Please respect copyright.PENANAAG8GFTbfLh
春霧與東嶺再臨我又是否安然平靜呢?945Please respect copyright.PENANAex7z1HrHBN
945Please respect copyright.PENANAkD1UWvRshX
945Please respect copyright.PENANAvdfeOJGcU6
夏季,這絢麗。945Please respect copyright.PENANAi64scVQsHj
如曇花一現的煙花。945Please respect copyright.PENANAoSccB0Uj9V
就讓今夜重燃內心那苗火吧!
945Please respect copyright.PENANAl8aNQ864QF
【3】霧散、秋殘 $2000
▶#12 夏
▶語評
詩詞中區分為序、插、終。945Please respect copyright.PENANAxr4xhR7zij
同如起、轉、合三處意境。945Please respect copyright.PENANALzFVyuqtT9
945Please respect copyright.PENANA7MV36SGKc3
以古詩破題,新詩釋義自己情意。945Please respect copyright.PENANAeaCRsWeDOx
945Please respect copyright.PENANAwNJkFIrHnV
六月、七月的芒夏荷香四溢,令人心曠神怡流連忘返。945Please respect copyright.PENANA06V1iyP0zz
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卻不知這竟是否為大夢誰先覺,夢醒一場空呢?
945Please respect copyright.PENANABqaSc2Rb2y
【4】宅米蟲子 $1500
▶#157 殘夏中秋(樂府詩)
▶語評
三生三世皆躲不過命運的輪迴945Please respect copyright.PENANAmfM9NTVuG1
夢裡百花卻也沒妳的笑顏盛開945Please respect copyright.PENANAMskyo5cvXO
945Please respect copyright.PENANAtB7b8VsdTC
細雨紛飛絕情綿綿945Please respect copyright.PENANA6zj7pU5ORe
句中江畔相隨945Please respect copyright.PENANAzWmifIln53
卻又未知天意是何在945Please respect copyright.PENANALXa1C7YtP9
945Please respect copyright.PENANAqyrdEYyuyc
即便是狂嘯 悲歌945Please respect copyright.PENANAvJjFWu6x3q
天上繁星 銀河945Please respect copyright.PENANAXXGQVvdTJv
也僅是萬千世界的一粟945Please respect copyright.PENANAIjre8sfIcz
卻找不出能取掉你的其一945Please respect copyright.PENANADfHXdeY3gN
945Please respect copyright.PENANAcNEqngHv51
從回到閣樓945Please respect copyright.PENANANB16ap00C8
又再次漫步獨醉945Please respect copyright.PENANA33HpDMMWSm
是心裡的牽掛令人陶醉945Please respect copyright.PENANAm93oS5kb59
還是物理的酒精使人沉醉945Please respect copyright.PENANAAUV8a45C3N
早已在你染塵衣袖分不清了945Please respect copyright.PENANABMOM2TQcfQ
945Please respect copyright.PENANAiAK67wyQVa
黃泉彼岸花開,所引出的火照之路945Please respect copyright.PENANAfkFvxFTNI9
也不過只是再次三世945Please respect copyright.PENANAlAYyFy50X2
與妳再相逢的一場作戲罷了
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【5】 艾米莉 $1500
▶#3 仲夏夢華
▶語評
《仲夏夜之夢》A Midsummer Night's Dream源自於文藝復興文豪莎士比亞創作的浪漫喜劇。945Please respect copyright.PENANA9EjazWnBVZ
「仲夏夜」指的是一年之中白晝最長的夏至前後,相傳這一天晚上是精靈活躍的時刻,會有許多不可思議的奇幻事情發生。945Please respect copyright.PENANAgWhBtzxXaC
在PENANA的賴群組中求教 #闇夜星河 #星秤 兩位,得知原是精靈的惡作劇進而造成了這場愛恨糾葛的多角關係。945Please respect copyright.PENANAkShIHtMIkt
(感謝科普。)945Please respect copyright.PENANAQg5fx0vKb7
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然而在十多年前求學階段,魚魚第一次聽到仲夏夜這個詞,並不在西洋古典所見到,反而是在《xxxholic》、《TSUBASA翼》這部早期神作中看到一詞;接續再次聽到是在我大學選修一堂《神話英語》的課程再次聽到。945Please respect copyright.PENANAsQgWMnvt7H
在高中時期,熱愛小說、動漫、電玩的我,這些是我課後逐漸成為作家(廢人)的養分來源,這些過往我們就暫且不再說明。945Please respect copyright.PENANAdp2eFrdRJN
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AMYS大的新詩中,可以從簡樸日常的景物,如枝頭樹影、街道行人、沙灘繁星再到湖滔漣漪等,想像的到,這對戀人從初視、打傘、相依直至心底的共鳴。945Please respect copyright.PENANAvH8UayVawM
簡單的美好,竟可以這般簡單。945Please respect copyright.PENANAzHoEqTcI96
如梁靜茹<為我好>專輯內,像剝橘子這般簡單的幸福,可以唾手可得的滿足,也或許對某些人來說非常的困難。這些取決在於人的內心想法。945Please respect copyright.PENANAD3dVNQRVYw
945Please respect copyright.PENANAl2qnMomxM2
仲夏之間少了點的是激情。945Please respect copyright.PENANAT5wrwyRV7N
仲夏之間多出些的是清淡。945Please respect copyright.PENANAZb97aHq6Ix
檯面下的暗流湧動,或許僅只是讀者所看不到的他們內心的洶湧。945Please respect copyright.PENANAX9ft94pYpJ
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而我只知,仲夏夢宴正演奏著一道清新的情愛。
945Please respect copyright.PENANAbmfuNt5Tsy
【6】紫小絢 $1000
▶#51 花夢之無聲
▶語評
無語的花瓣,自小嚮往著自由綻放的藍天白雲,夏蟬與飛鳥的佐伴。曾經多麼遙想著那份追逐的渴望。
945Please respect copyright.PENANAWExSn0NDG3
與其說是羨慕,倒是幾分憤世嫉俗的意味所在。945Please respect copyright.PENANALhC5IvgDoY
945Please respect copyright.PENANAIOfJfbSLj1
直至,雨過天青,才發覺原來自己仍舊擁有著雨滴的相擁。945Please respect copyright.PENANAEfrBIx0BNm
而我們又何必在意那天空藍呢?
945Please respect copyright.PENANANXg3HamkUA
【7】宅米蟲子 $1000
▶#78 兩世笙花
▶語評
五月成熟的梅樹,透過初夏將其青梅韻開酒香該是多麼令人陶醉的畫面,而再多上幾株該採下的花枝,豈不樂乎?945Please respect copyright.PENANAifZJhudw0o
945Please respect copyright.PENANAgzy5AOkbUJ
一抹玄龍劃破了淡薄的心防。945Please respect copyright.PENANAzugKQLLLe7
美景再好都無法平息,我倆的已然造成的誤解。945Please respect copyright.PENANAAWAEMLt6kM
白華如是一道流星墜落,墜落於重生與你的羈絆。945Please respect copyright.PENANAE9dKMA1iEX
945Please respect copyright.PENANASZves8w0dK
而在反覆讀完了宅米蟲子<兩世笙花>後,想起了兩世輪迴的仙履奇緣,其中經典的一段台詞:「曾經有一段真摯的愛情在我面前,但我沒有去珍惜,直到失去了以後才後悔莫及,塵世間最痛苦的莫過於此......」945Please respect copyright.PENANAjPMxuL1oQt
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造物弄人,倆世為人而今生卻與你交杯喝上壺合丞酒,可為多少輩子所修來的福分。945Please respect copyright.PENANAGU0HkFk6bc
945Please respect copyright.PENANAG9gdXGag58
前世,已放下。945Please respect copyright.PENANAzj6ih32MiJ
今來,是泛起了一水漣漪。945Please respect copyright.PENANA1H0EdoU5sy
945Please respect copyright.PENANArwa0vi6Pnj
如不是身分所牽絆,我便放棄了所有與你共赴天崖海角。
945Please respect copyright.PENANAwIGNTj4FHU
【8】Nicolea $1000
▶#121 夏
▶語評
夏季田園的美好景色,映襯著一片祥和的欣欣向榮。945Please respect copyright.PENANAUA2IAXqt9G
如同中學時期讀過了一首宋代曾做《頌》詩:945Please respect copyright.PENANAS87hvwZfj9
「春有百花秋有月,夏有涼風冬有雪。若無閒事掛心頭,便是人間好時節。」945Please respect copyright.PENANA3ZbQ6omX88
945Please respect copyright.PENANAWe4zGJBzA8
而這份難得的清幽,確實隨著年齡的增長。945Please respect copyright.PENANAFJhJiHIeGJ
越是得來不易。945Please respect copyright.PENANACAIa9EyU5c
945Please respect copyright.PENANA7JDCDJgsTm
田中牧童的玉笛繚繞著蟬聲裊裊。945Please respect copyright.PENANAcsoHsMw0Co
這該是人生如何的片刻煙花璀璨。945Please respect copyright.PENANAFGCqfKf7ht
只得盼望,人生還能再得這般閒情逸致。
945Please respect copyright.PENANAhEUyXwfS0L
【9】胡殷 $1000
▶#137 鳳凰花
▶語評
夏季雖為離別時節,卻也是人生成長的必經道路。945Please respect copyright.PENANAxZcPa8CuHC
眼淚是曖昧的催化劑,也是愛情的火藥。945Please respect copyright.PENANA8bf4WiBg7m
人走茶未涼卻為下一次再相遇時而香。945Please respect copyright.PENANAfLv09XJAMs
如我們未盡的緣分這般。945Please respect copyright.PENANAckiAeZOy3R
945Please respect copyright.PENANAvxmwpFmuhW
945Please respect copyright.PENANAHfG9j0sUI0
相親相見知何日,此時此夜難為情。945Please respect copyright.PENANAS3terh7Oid
而我卻因這片花落,這道蟬聲所困惑。945Please respect copyright.PENANAbBskk2c9J3
即便歷經了離別後夏風的迎撫,也無法抽離曾經的嬉戲。945Please respect copyright.PENANAqcIiziapDo
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妳與我是否曾有探險過那道友誼塹壁後的道路。945Please respect copyright.PENANAbVgoNGJnmG
我並不知情。945Please respect copyright.PENANAQg773YhI2q
也不再無從得知。945Please respect copyright.PENANAHu47vwNloq
945Please respect copyright.PENANAnwo6dNOpDJ
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「隻身回望太匆匆,此生多少情與仇。945Please respect copyright.PENANAvqzQA661Av
無邊絲雨細如愁,朝來寒雨幾回眸。」945Please respect copyright.PENANA88IhhCN3TX
只得對空一嘆,老天給予了我們太短的夢醒時分。945Please respect copyright.PENANAGK9Ev8pgit
此刻,我只擁著憶起最後鳳凰花下,妳牽起我的悸動,約定未忘的誓言罷了。945Please respect copyright.PENANAoKukUnwaBW
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未來,我們還會有機會再見嗎?來世,我們還會續緣嗎?還是,我只個過客?
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【10】林賾流 $1000
▶#83 烈陽之影
▶語評
開篇以豔陽不可直視945Please respect copyright.PENANAT0lcfxysxG
寫出了真實的太陽給予人的強盛945Please respect copyright.PENANAusIuiSmZLX
並以柔和手法,側寫隨著時間經過,很快又能再見到的期待945Please respect copyright.PENANAm7AT1XaZuQ
945Please respect copyright.PENANAb6xoKf2dIt
而在萬里無雲的日常945Please respect copyright.PENANAe0A2s8oEtV
大地照耀出了你的光芒945Please respect copyright.PENANARg2Pk0PTzO
只想著短暫沒有你的存在945Please respect copyright.PENANAQUYtHNMCe5
與緬懷影子的並行945Please respect copyright.PENANANNusu1r8Zp
945Please respect copyright.PENANALpZhASmZ9J
而東升初陽如一雙碩壯的大手945Please respect copyright.PENANAZEmQEVBner
敲響了人群一日的序幕945Please respect copyright.PENANAKgsFxG3jkx
島與海945Please respect copyright.PENANAULFz4Wk6QW
又為何區分你、我呢945Please respect copyright.PENANANwk2JB4TaF
如同我仰望著巍峨的山峰山鋒也正仰望著你945Please respect copyright.PENANAkaIo8c8VS3
945Please respect copyright.PENANAWSuzFOaqpO
隨著四季的變化945Please respect copyright.PENANAyv1iZfevbN
夏季卻是此刻我影跡糾纏最久時945Please respect copyright.PENANADPntnR0zpi
直至,我忘卻了
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那個我
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【佳作1】 宅米蟲子 $1000
▶#170 夏祈杳杳
▶語評
本篇相對於前兩篇樂府詩945Please respect copyright.PENANAKDFizFwPps
詩意要較為薄弱945Please respect copyright.PENANA3peB3uKvQP
但仍是一首很棒的古詩
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之所以我認為相對較弱的部分945Please respect copyright.PENANAj3gizjmT7B
是其意境 與用詞的閱讀感945Please respect copyright.PENANAOqgHz8DJ0n
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【兩世笙花】、【殘夏中秋】中皆有一個顯眼的主題,但在【夏祈杳杳】中以花鋪景,望卻天上星闕流露出了一絲孤寂與深沉的感受。945Please respect copyright.PENANA1wWnoB9O6G
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或許是【兩世笙花】的一抹玄龍劃破淡薄心防,思念太深。945Please respect copyright.PENANAxp0k9mpvuC
也許是【殘夏中秋】的細雨紛飛絕情綿綿,景色太美。945Please respect copyright.PENANAOSSAg7cgLI
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再嗑完了兩份深沉的憂愁後,重回到了【夏祈杳杳】,別有另外一種,希望來年梧桐花開,伊人會再來的期望。945Please respect copyright.PENANAnPVsoBmbFG
更多是抱持著,能夠等待,並且那人是可以等得到的感受。945Please respect copyright.PENANAy0TdT3crNC
故此,以其作為比較下,兩者意境高低立判。945Please respect copyright.PENANA1YT7vjXYsp
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當然,宅米的詩無庸置疑放在蕉園上都是罕有敵手,皆為佳作。945Please respect copyright.PENANAQA3uFmvf7Y
詩的優缺,僅憑讀者當下的心境去解讀。945Please respect copyright.PENANAPkGTsVuf8r
每個人的角度皆為不同。945Please respect copyright.PENANAUDG31jhTyZ
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有人感受深刻,945Please respect copyright.PENANAcUK4iqsNB7
有人無感,945Please respect copyright.PENANAHOTablGZGM
各有差異。945Please respect copyright.PENANAK2d7ogELc7
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而我僅是那茫茫人海中,945Please respect copyright.PENANA9iNC1kMxr7
因其而感受到詩中情摯所渲染一名騷客。
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【佳作2】柏木桐柊 $1000
▶#58 也許我還會夢見你
▶語評
或許,她的影跡已成過往。窗櫺映入柔情似水,而匯聚成今夜的輾轉難眠。945Please respect copyright.PENANAP8IsEEP2Bi
我望不及妳眼底的星空漫步,而夏季裡還仍猶存妳餘溫。妳說的那些在我的世界又算得是什麼,留下的不過是在保險櫃裡的一抹笑意。我早已分不清,夏日我倆是否曾約定過,而捧上手中代表著祝福的黃玫瑰。945Please respect copyright.PENANAHneER5XlAu
這不代表著我倆有過曾經。夏夜裡。獨自釀著夢中還偶然遇見的妳。945Please respect copyright.PENANADy5rpht1EU
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柏木桐柊文筆能力在短短數筆之下,運用了大量的暗喻及景色來比擬離情的傷感。醪、櫺兩字都是極其罕見的同義字,在詩句之間也靈活運用自己的特色
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【佳作3】 余軍 $1000
▶#139 七夕夜茫茫
▶語評
銀燭秋光冷畫屏,輕羅小扇撲流螢。945Please respect copyright.PENANANwP95d96EI
天階夜色涼如水,臥看牽牛織女星。945Please respect copyright.PENANAKWMzB6blk7
即便過了一千兩百年,我們仍可想見在宮中拿著圓扇揮舞著螢火蟲的宮女,是幾般哀愁著,在涼意襲人的季夏中,孤獨賞月。945Please respect copyright.PENANADyQ7eU5ljY
945Please respect copyright.PENANAeRJekT3Y3D
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每每七夕時分總是容易遭受羨煞旁人的眷侶炸眼球。945Please respect copyright.PENANAkoLHJaLfZF
而這對於此刻孤寂的人,將變得更加孤寂萬分。945Please respect copyright.PENANAw1EQPJ4knV
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也許,他仍等待著茫茫人中那個她。945Please respect copyright.PENANA43SIvIX1EH
也許,他只不過是她生命中的過客。945Please respect copyright.PENANAcXAZ5x6LPK
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偷偷遙望著,她的限時動態。945Please respect copyright.PENANAHqjztYPdPS
悄悄祝福著,她的喜訊分享。945Please respect copyright.PENANAadTcoYkMjl
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七夕。945Please respect copyright.PENANA4bG2Lb19si
是個情感放大百倍的敏感時節。945Please respect copyright.PENANAdZwOrmsxIx
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在銀河伴隨著夜幕,總是能不經意地想起了某個她。945Please respect copyright.PENANAoIEBkMBnrz
或許,這才是那年盛夏,最難忘的約定了吧。
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【佳作4】虛冲 $1000
▶#228 仲夏夜之詩
▶語評
道長這首寫實敘事的打油詩945Please respect copyright.PENANA3fY1KIxa8Z
用道地口吻方式呈現945Please respect copyright.PENANA6Zcwp06VFH
別有一番令人感同身受的味道945Please respect copyright.PENANAY5CGDfWp7z
945Please respect copyright.PENANAxgMBAYYWZp
華麗的新詩固然有深沈945Please respect copyright.PENANAfHu6IuPypL
反覆咀嚼的口感945Please respect copyright.PENANATqJN2p6B1v
但相較於打油詩945Please respect copyright.PENANAg8RXzTIF2X
卻更能反映生活上的記趣945Please respect copyright.PENANAf7liTKNTuy
又或者應該說是上班藍領族的無奈吧!945Please respect copyright.PENANA5I54f85wsd
945Please respect copyright.PENANAIKY0K0lNkx
夏季沉悶、炙熱945Please respect copyright.PENANABTDGl4gyMb
而很難讓人能對於煩躁事情945Please respect copyright.PENANAEyRUTC1P34
保持理性與忍耐945Please respect copyright.PENANAC4zZPVe7Si
故此,我們應該適時調整自己步伐
945Please respect copyright.PENANAY8LND7mng0
抬起頭來945Please respect copyright.PENANAkjPVeeIWZw
深深吸一口氣945Please respect copyright.PENANAuxca8t9ggb
靜下來看一下周遭的事物945Please respect copyright.PENANAhFOUzd1XFr
仍舊有著許多美好的細節
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【佳作5】胤宸 $1000
▶#53 那時風若來
▶語評
花自飄零水自流。945Please respect copyright.PENANAvzoANxSPjX
一種相思,兩處閒愁。945Please respect copyright.PENANAVwgNP5WNDG
此情無計可消除,才下眉頭,卻上心頭。945Please respect copyright.PENANAYuonm01ZVj
同如<<李清照>>的一剪梅,而這西湖庭院盈滿的荷風又與易安居士筆下那殘荷,抽象暨不易捉摸的思想感情相較,誰更勝一籌呢?945Please respect copyright.PENANAp9IHBQ7KUe
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獨賞荷葉,飄蕩於塘邊,一抹光照滑過一池漣漪。945Please respect copyright.PENANAk0SUWXGe9h
卻無心這番閒情逸致,內心仍未那尚未赴約的風而風,掛記了心頭,酒、荷、影皆為而動,卻因那三缺一的風美中不足。945Please respect copyright.PENANAW7kS5gPU9K
慧開禪師那經典一句「春有百花秋有月,夏有涼風冬有雪,若無閒事掛心頭,便是人間好時節。」 945Please respect copyright.PENANAShbQSjx4Cu
而其中「若無閒事在心頭」更是把心中沒有掛慮,便是好時節詮釋的淋漓盡致。945Please respect copyright.PENANAtXBoRFISCA
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人生在世,總為數不清的事情苦惱、煩躁,如果可真心放下了這些東西,簡直美麗得太過不要了。945Please respect copyright.PENANAuTUJjNKjmJ
風,是否能在夏日再次吹拂。945Please respect copyright.PENANAapzHzYvYiY
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我們仍未可知。945Please respect copyright.PENANAmqZucypkTM
但卻明白另一事,眼前這番美酒,如果可以那便今朝有酒今朝醉吧。
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【複評未上榜】
▶#55 薰夏誓約,詩綺永存 ▶#176 逃夏 ▶#194 致逝去的夏
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特殊獎項
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【最佳電腦繪畫獎】LiCh 阿立 $3000
▶#195 Sunny Come Back
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【最佳創作金曲獎】W.H. $3000
▶#212 夏之熱力學
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感謝贊助本場創作挑戰的各路金主
Penana小熊 15500P!!!!!!
伍拾陸 5600P!!
月亮熊 5000P!!
夏坂Moonight 5000P!!
InDeeeer 4000P!!
容霜 3000P!
谷映塵(員外) 2000P!
W.H. 2000P!
笑具 1500P!
知閒言炎 1000P!
筆墨談兵 1000P!
Sandy 1000P!
悲艾 1000P!
月月 800P!
宅米蟲子 起源 Nicolea 葉月晉久HS 墨云 巫尚益 100-200P
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本期創挑心得
(1)是的,由於這個評比斷斷續續,歷經了接近一年的時間,在時效性上早已失去了觀眾的熱誠,途中發現有些人已經退出PENANA。
其中我感到最惋惜的是夏坂Moonight老師,他在本期的3篇作品都是上乘的好文,由於我的拖延症,讓大家失去了能讀上更好作品的機會。
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(2)排名評比,是我的閱讀程度與個人感觀去排序,或許,你會覺得為何他的作品比我好呢?
這邊,我歡迎大家都能提出討論。
不希望反而因為排名,引發筆戰,那就失去了開心創作本身的意義了。
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(3)本期在#195樓LiCh 阿立大大的「Sunny Come Back」,是我開始創作挑戰以來,收到最大得驚喜了,我萬萬想不到竟然會有這麼精彩的投稿,讓我當下受寵若驚,太幸福了吧。
各位,如果喜歡歡迎到LICH大的粉絲專頁,拜讀他的作品。
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(4)分數上,本次我並沒有參用到「閱讀數」或是「喜歡數」這個數據,因為我怕會對於文筆上的排名失準,不過我還是先將我初評、複評的經過都貼上來給各位看看。










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(5)好啦,廢話有點多。
這邊希望大家都能去我得其他幾個創作挑戰看看。
如果你們喜歡的話,都幫我書籤起來吧!
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另外
已經開始,各位準備磨拳擦掌吧!!!!!!!!
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如果可以幫我打賞本篇(會當作下期獎金)
為下期創挑添上一份心力XD
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謝謝~945Please respect copyright.PENANAnftgF6HMCN


