首先,在此說聲感謝。
【第6期創作挑戰】歷時1年才將其完成評比。
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原先應該在今年初完成最終結語。
但在這期間,我遇到了職場上必須離開台灣本島一段很長的時間。
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身邊除了沒有電腦用,又外加大寶處於一歲難照顧的時期,同時間又懷了二寶。
生活的考驗不斷地消彌我對於創作的熱誠,與占據了大多數的空閒。
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我必須說。
很遺憾的有些人在一年後已經離開了蕉園。
他(她)們沒能等待到這一次的落幕。
也很可惜。
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最後,我將再次感謝你們願意耐心等待這場落幕儀式。
-----Lonely Fish 2024.11.06
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恭喜第六期的創作挑戰榮獲2023創作挑戰第二名的殊榮

這次的費時長達一年的時間來完成評比。
這裡我可以大膽的跟各位報告,每一篇作品少說都讀過兩次以上,並且全部都留下語評。
240篇文筆不一的文章,我必須老實說「讀起來,真的燒腦的一蹋糊塗。」
但創作理念熱誠還在,這些都不是問題。
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以上廢話結束。
接著,我們準備公布這次的成績,並在後面留下一點這個創作挑戰的心得。
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由於篇幅眾多。(小說類190篇,新詩類44篇,其他6篇。)
我採取小說正取前20篇,以我個人主觀挑選在故事劇情、用字、人物刻劃都能拿上檯面。
並且讓人願意反覆閱讀的好作品。
我會「盡量」挑選字數符合在1500字的作品。
另外,在新詩的部分,由於主題應當以新詩作為框架。
但考量到部分樂府詩、古詩這類的作品,故此一併用單純「詩」的角度去作為出發點,進行評選。
另外,額外兩個獨力拉出來的獎項,分別是【最佳電腦繪畫獎】及【最佳創作金曲獎】,後續會多作說明。
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小說類
【1】凶讀 $5000
▶#20 #21 夏日湖畔(上+下) #104 夏日湖畔(番外)香氣
▶已連續三篇故事銜接的方式,引領讀者深入,不管在用字上,人物刻劃都非常的好。
▶語評
「剪不斷,理還亂,是離愁。別是一般滋味在心頭。」李煜一句思念妻子的思緒,在第一章的開局,讓人無限醞釀著,那多麼曾經的美好。944Please respect copyright.PENANAMZrnluCY7o
接續則是父親與孩兒間,多年來已未溫存的親情。
畫面是那麼地美不勝收---944Please respect copyright.PENANAZmRFEMphdq
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又一刻,轉折接踵而來。944Please respect copyright.PENANAIEzWwmPU6o
一陣猛咳,替換的是埋下了這段故事另一處伏筆。944Please respect copyright.PENANAQl89ojSbbR
一個故事之內容精采萬分,之所以讓人看了血脈噴張,捨不得放下,就是因為其中的不平凡。944Please respect copyright.PENANA0UCpgMstR3
而這篇在下章就是如此。944Please respect copyright.PENANAfUkg5PpYBq
944Please respect copyright.PENANAlCSLwb8rwH
林佑堂的變故,是突來的喪屍系列。944Please respect copyright.PENANAcKaFnFrwiQ
估計讀者心到此處,仍處在數度混亂之中,這便也是作者凶讀所達成的目的。944Please respect copyright.PENANAK6FX5Sc6an
耐人尋味的親情,卻轉折為末日的延續,更讓人有敲碗再看下去續篇的打算。944Please respect copyright.PENANAZgbz7qnDUS
而在那新聞快訊後,簡潔地收尾結束,更把這篇有力的畫下句點。944Please respect copyright.PENANA4pFEcvfxzn
是否疫情將緩和停滯,這我們無從得知。944Please respect copyright.PENANAr4clEs4z5v
但唯一明白的卻是,那份恐懼感已然存於你內心深處,餘音繞梁三日不絕。944Please respect copyright.PENANAUqPNphdZgh
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在104章的番外篇延續了,讀者再次想要的畫面,凶讀更是樂善好施地將畫面全數帶給讀者,簡直令人幸福得太過不要。944Please respect copyright.PENANAFvKTNrMEUr
「我知道你們還想看對吧?那我就接續再寫下去。」那份激昂感,卻給了我們內心違和的感動。944Please respect copyright.PENANAfWehTW31l6
還記得去年在Netflix看過殭屍校園,雖故事的起點不同,卻有類似的風格,而在中部開始傳染開來的病毒,又是否會使政府展開鎖國政策呢?944Please respect copyright.PENANAJ3ACjTnBDT
這又將會是另外的話題,我們便不多做討論。
944Please respect copyright.PENANAPOrzwtXXjA
眼下,有的只剩讀者的幻想空間。
944Please respect copyright.PENANAnbtymAiUnd
【2】 Devor 白棘 $4000
▶#123 終末的煙火 #138 終末的海洋 #147 終末的冰箱
▶這三篇故事,可以分開閱讀獨立的章節,也可以連貫再一起成為一篇長篇。
▶語評
非常罕見的倒述寫法。944Please respect copyright.PENANAnfiML1mI0P
在第三篇中我們才知道歐林944Please respect copyright.PENANAAVn2I05uZo
這故是關鍵的人物944Please respect copyright.PENANA0AEABs3Xvd
自此才明白,原來他不僅僅是想要復活944Please respect copyright.PENANAPIFFevHCwm
最強吸血鬼兼任戀人的芙蕾兒並且同時想延續那個諾言944Please respect copyright.PENANA7d4MlItptb
944Please respect copyright.PENANAqrf5cQnJvK
「我們的孩子」944Please respect copyright.PENANANncIuFXnaH
這連續性的故事寫法特殊、故事完整944Please respect copyright.PENANAAbrjUUu4fZ
實為本次【第六期創挑】中非常少見的用詞精簡,劇情完整的好文。944Please respect copyright.PENANAhPtpDzhb50
而相信自芙蕾兒離開前往新的星球後944Please respect copyright.PENANApdX1Tnle2p
也肯定還會有新的故事起點944Please respect copyright.PENANAqc0Vxjs4l4
然而天下無不散的宴席944Please respect copyright.PENANAkLtmKA3svR
我們本次故事便到此結束944Please respect copyright.PENANAmIXsBtpMO1
希望下次還能再次相遇
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【3】東加豆 $3000
▶#57 在雅典46度的邂逅
▶在眾多篇幅中,脫穎而出的是,故事僅只是讀過一次,卻能留下一種強烈的遺憾感,即便是第一次語評後,過了一年仍舊記得這篇故事。
▶語評
從引頸期盼到衝動遠行再到心灰意冷,全都只在一念轉瞬之間。944Please respect copyright.PENANA2fCTvDgFrB
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時而濕冷刺骨,時而溫暖潤人。只有那若隱若現的鹽澀味。翻越了半個地球曲面的海風,再次又為女孩捎來了,希臘赤道的浪漫。944Please respect copyright.PENANAcoEdVjDLj1
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然而,言語中就是躲藏不了的宿命。爭執,同時是不可避免的毒藥。944Please respect copyright.PENANA0gKwyFhR2M
雖然亞歷山大沉默寡言,卻又可能內心同樣掀起幾絲驚滔駭浪,過猶那地中海的濱海陸風。944Please respect copyright.PENANA28pnuDqBSr
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十日的短暫浪漫,在最後無言的結局中就畫下了浪漫的破碎。璇姑娘,那女孩。在22歲的希臘,不帶走任何一片雲彩。
944Please respect copyright.PENANA2LW3x6RHDX
【4】嚮往國度 $2000
▶#122 回不去的夏天
▶語評
或許,女孩在男孩的心目中,尚未離開世間,只是去了一趟旅行。944Please respect copyright.PENANAPVTapZETSH
然而,她早已成為了徘徊在兩人過去記憶的地縛靈,只是男孩至今仍未知情。944Please respect copyright.PENANArMtVBakPLJ
從首段讓讀者猜測,或許是與女孩的某項約定,卻未料想竟是場人鬼情未了。944Please respect copyright.PENANAZMzzzDXh5p
直當夏季,在眾人眼底,我仍舊是個念舊的傻瓜。944Please respect copyright.PENANA8lYnI9PY6e
----我也會赴約前往只有我倆的地方。944Please respect copyright.PENANAfNRiogc7Tp
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我嘗試幻想,如果女孩不是同學,而是男孩的親妹妹呢?944Please respect copyright.PENANAHnrqHgvmiH
會不會是父母親對他倆默許的戀兄情節呢?944Please respect copyright.PENANA5GrKXZGxPS
最後的一栗核桃果,放進的並非只是男孩的口袋,反而是讀者的腦海深處的下丘帶,是令人抑鬱不住的交感情緒。944Please respect copyright.PENANAYvsg1rEexn
房內的擺設習慣仍舊未變,然而變得是男孩儼然未知心態變化。944Please respect copyright.PENANAdEQHEpCr81
直當年齡越大,約定束縛卻也越輕。只是他仍未發現而已。944Please respect copyright.PENANApckwhdTlLb
「我還會再來此地嗎?」內心的他,或許有一天終會發現。944Please respect copyright.PENANAhL0AmHYOYV
而從「想見你。」,直至餘生再也不見,那又會是怎麼樣子的感概呢?944Please respect copyright.PENANAt1mtMb9JnH
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「體貼不該在離別,你會讓該死心的的人還有留戀。」而妳最後的溫柔,也讓那個總是跌跌撞撞的男孩,終究打破了直男的心房,如此的明示,最終他也肯定發現了這些蛛絲馬跡了吧。944Please respect copyright.PENANABeMQQMehau
我,還會再來嗎?每年盛夏,妳還會再此處嗎?944Please respect copyright.PENANASctY9n5Mp4
陡然間,男孩的一抹淚痕伴隨著成長悄然滑下。
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男孩離開後山後,她對著空無一人無助地嘶喊著:「你,明年別再來了。」944Please respect copyright.PENANAxsdbhbq2z2
儘管未來,女孩不知道是否成為了男孩心中最熟悉的陌生人。但那奈河橋上,望穿著黃泉;凝視著他仍未走完人生的女孩,直至走過彼岸花叢,喝完了孟婆湯,她仍相信來生幾世,倆人肯定還能再相見。
944Please respect copyright.PENANAxPzyAcupEP
【5】大三明治 $2000
▶#86 拉普拉斯的白兔
▶語評
一個無限循環的惡夢(應該算是)944Please respect copyright.PENANAiuo6xpDCYu
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原先還在思索拉普拉斯的兔子的我,直到看完了故事才知道,我根本無需糾結這個地方。944Please respect copyright.PENANAzsmD9FeS6D
因為故事已經告訴我了。
文章開篇以學長為起點。944Please respect copyright.PENANAYm6KAzhHc4
而故事線轉回到了從前。944Please respect copyright.PENANAAzol7jNZUA
自己也成了那個月曦口中的學長,令人感覺到不自覺的寒顫,而這份帶入感的恐懼,正是結尾伏筆所醞釀而出的感覺。
944Please respect copyright.PENANAm8Cb5ln59K
【6】九指三爺 $1500
▶#23 爸爸,還要去哪裡玩?
▶語評
第一段尚未讀完,一道與父親訣別的感傷便先湧上心頭。944Please respect copyright.PENANA10VlEgai9v
父親未竟的誓言,是兩人心中永遠的隔閡。944Please respect copyright.PENANAoKLwIdSKK9
為何情感總道別離時才會讓人醞釀開來?944Please respect copyright.PENANANGAtnH64Y4
又為何說別讓遺憾留下,卻滿地皆為遺憾?944Please respect copyright.PENANAmf1niqTkSc
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告別式中,可以想見的到,父親再娶的家庭該是與自己有著違和的場面;畢竟,自己本已就不屬於另個家庭的一份子。944Please respect copyright.PENANAAWaQTfQaZm
然而,雙方彼此嘗試性的接納,早已打破很多舊時代時候的情緒。944Please respect copyright.PENANAnYSMcX7M7v
這點相信生活上只要遭遇過這種際遇的人,心底怕是比起你、我都更加了解。944Please respect copyright.PENANA2oqkLH94rj
由愛轉恨、恨轉怨,再到冷淡。944Please respect copyright.PENANAxJu9KUlT6U
這才是常態。
944Please respect copyright.PENANAbbtqCtjazd
父親厚繭的雙手,在威利心中是永成長時永遠的心魔。944Please respect copyright.PENANA3FP11K5k0r
直到最後一刻,得知了父親原是愛著自己的時候,淚水又該如何能止住潸落。944Please respect copyright.PENANAlhcBqueuVj
一代親情,未竟的諾言,終究還是謊言。944Please respect copyright.PENANAPhlq5s3GUJ
即便,在告別式中聽到了這些真實話語,可父親仍舊一次都回來見過自己一面,又何如?944Please respect copyright.PENANALX99Lwp4KI
一句「父親,接著去哪玩......?」沉重般的自喃,更多的卻是解放開對自己的束縛,並非是對父親救贖。
944Please respect copyright.PENANAUOQh70BRgs
告別式後,這些人或許餘生不見。944Please respect copyright.PENANAbhhJGc3ldg
然而,此等心情又豈是說忘就忘。944Please respect copyright.PENANAkZyQhLSpnl
原來,痛便是忘了怎麼把過去給忘掉。
944Please respect copyright.PENANA4Y0NtKxUbK
這個盛夏,剩下遺憾。
944Please respect copyright.PENANA7aSEzboB0S
【7】思凡 $1500
▶#94 贈我予年
▶語評
故事的結尾是有著強烈的後勁的。944Please respect copyright.PENANA6AE9NUG4De
整篇閱讀後,在開頭以宋予年在百忙之中,突然發覺了「她」的名字,突然之間再次走入了自己的人生。944Please respect copyright.PENANAbnJysGaAUw
至此,幾年前分別以後。944Please respect copyright.PENANAJaSUNYrRZF
情感又悄悄地、毫無預警的映入了生命之中。944Please respect copyright.PENANArJmT5HjetE
944Please respect copyright.PENANAG2L5nTRvTW
「贈我,予年。」或許標題應當可以分開兩字來讀。944Please respect copyright.PENANA6BGaj74YJL
文中沒有提及到女孩當初為何離開了,然而,接續著故事推敲,讓我們得知。944Please respect copyright.PENANAUWxEyBYtcE
也是是疾病纏身。944Please respect copyright.PENANAsX4NgIjj6M
也迫不得已,離開了他。944Please respect copyright.PENANA9YwX3qb2ZF
944Please respect copyright.PENANAOh5qb8NhJO
贈我,是一個約定。944Please respect copyright.PENANAAd8IASAxLu
一個約定券的約定。 944Please respect copyright.PENANAVhTdsRRN4o
而再見之時,人事已非。944Please respect copyright.PENANAsyhI44uCHU
那個我已經不再是原本的那個我,但你還會深愛著我嗎?944Please respect copyright.PENANAb3oBeJ707Z
944Please respect copyright.PENANANQrS219IVU
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此刻,盛夏煙花燦爛,卻不如妳。944Please respect copyright.PENANA5N3IZ1NKA5
或許,再見不遠。 944Please respect copyright.PENANAgH4u9frh4i
讓就那緣起三生起,三生滅吧。
944Please respect copyright.PENANA6n9GxjgWFW
【8】青蒼 Cyanblue $1500
▶#47 青夏,十七歲
▶語評
如同青澀地稚嫩十八未滿。那愛戀都如此單純與小心翼翼。
944Please respect copyright.PENANAjjusGlWIno
女方刻意放緩的進度向前,歷經長達三年感情滋養,在學年畢業的最後一刻,差點翻船的心情更是令人跟隨帶入那份苦澀。944Please respect copyright.PENANAcQeRY3hZzh
就像青春微酸甜那般。944Please respect copyright.PENANAdYCMkogZzR
忌妒、單戀,都是青春代表物。944Please respect copyright.PENANAsnaxwMaui8
林夏芮不按照牌理出牌的外向性格,羅青澤在最後眼淚落下那刻才敲響了內心的鐘鳴,迴盪在內心心頭。944Please respect copyright.PENANADVgzI1e8tL
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「原來這就是喜歡的心思。」我們不能怪男生呆如愚木,畢竟又有多少人能在高中時期對於未來、對於愛情掌握的滿分修行呢?944Please respect copyright.PENANAVJC4VvUS2K
夏天的故事,炙熱卻又充滿了愛戀的渲染。比擬冬日,我們更加容易觸動是主動的熱情。944Please respect copyright.PENANAsKlDxKeHfe
劉子傑的主動,或許在我們眼底,更像是跳樑小丑那般故作醜態。944Please respect copyright.PENANALZO85GbKfZ
但就現實面來說,如果今天劉子傑與羅青澤兩人都具備同等的帥氣,同等的條件,那麼主動宣示的那方勝率還是會更高。944Please respect copyright.PENANADPFh0RUMYy
或許,歷經過這次的告白失敗,在未來能成為他愛情的一個學分也猶未可知。944Please respect copyright.PENANAvuD7JQlJOB
反而寫成了另一個故事的主角。944Please respect copyright.PENANA5fOrhxcbzj
944Please respect copyright.PENANAR2rgVmtwbD
944Please respect copyright.PENANA8vUr92EEoO
「人間的確荒謬,可我們還是能在這個人間拾溫柔。」故事曖昧的兩小無猜終成一對眷侶,而畢業後、就業後,又是否能續緣,我們無法猜測最後結局。944Please respect copyright.PENANARtBjbe420Q
心動往往只是一剎那,喜歡卻是一輩子的記憶。944Please respect copyright.PENANAIbLMmQitdo
如果有一天,我們也面臨那份剎那的怦然心動,你/妳又是否敢勇於這份悸動,邁向這份回應呢?944Please respect copyright.PENANAqFPFOevql0
944Please respect copyright.PENANA6TKJm3sYby
夏天,依舊是夏天。但不一樣是我們的內心。
944Please respect copyright.PENANAMhFB4TAO2E
【9】墨云 $1500
▶#28 盛夏與魔女
▶語評
這是我見過最鮮蝦的奇幻劇情了。944Please respect copyright.PENANAxb10ONvnXG
尤其這男人,絕對是個狠人,全部的純情只為了鋪敘結尾的那慾望。
944Please respect copyright.PENANAviwxsGmlLL
開門見山的斗大魔女標題,早已告訴了這不能用平常的校園看待故事。944Please respect copyright.PENANAWyEYb9sdKJ
而更為新奇的是簡單的一個小手段就處理好了,蟬靈的糾結,這同時打破了我對魔女的刻板印象。944Please respect copyright.PENANAtzVURxezyr
魔女的天然呆更是突如其來一筆。944Please respect copyright.PENANAVRXYxb4SXa
944Please respect copyright.PENANARo77W9kTFE
最後,故事的結尾再次迎來一次,天外飛來兩筆的性慾交易,這確實打破了讀者對於故事原先的美好幻想。944Please respect copyright.PENANAA90hlWfvKB
只得獲得一次白眼與冰冷感。
944Please respect copyright.PENANAIrc1NDzD9w
【10】罪夜 $1500
▶#169 戀愛炸彈
▶語評
藉由肉體爆炸的引爆點劃開了對於戀愛的追求,是那樣獨特卻又邪門。944Please respect copyright.PENANAjPJtQmBKKz
944Please respect copyright.PENANAbUyZg5NNaW
百鬼夜行獨見妳。千里迷離卻是妳。944Please respect copyright.PENANAuVPrupqBqq
我喜愛著,這般怪異卻令人心動的瞬間。944Please respect copyright.PENANACQPUNwzN0l
因那悸動。944Please respect copyright.PENANAh1L6ikxf0r
往往竟是那瞬間。
944Please respect copyright.PENANAbCu66AH7cv
即便長大後再交往的女排球隊長,仍舊不行。944Please respect copyright.PENANAlc7fBMUo7c
式風透過了那次的爆炸,早已在尋響內心埋下了一顆揮之不去的種子。944Please respect copyright.PENANASyyVelRBMd
真愛,不僅是人與人之間的感情,更是當你真心喜愛某事、某物,而願意竭盡心力的付出,使他變得更好、更幸福。944Please respect copyright.PENANAWTcc1sHAkN
那麼讓自己爆炸,也算是一種真愛嗎?944Please respect copyright.PENANAKDx2w24DJg
944Please respect copyright.PENANAXzffoNgNwj
語畢,尋響的爆炸是否讓兩人在另一個百鬼的世界相守相繫,這個猶未可知。944Please respect copyright.PENANANmJjzouLkK
但至少可以確定的是,他卻早已觸動了內心最深處的那個戀愛因子了。944Please respect copyright.PENANA3luKdHEISc
「我感到心滿意足。」然而他滿意的就是真的是自己也喜愛著對方,又抑或是對方仍舊七年來愛著自己呢?
944Please respect copyright.PENANAF0Cw0LJVsf
【11】 舉一千從 $1000
▶#182 〈澐寨舞〉
▶語評(詳留言)
944Please respect copyright.PENANAxsXaKanwcb
【12】 莫軒 $1000
▶#239 末世終結之後,我在破曉的晨曦窺見夏日的生機,但故人不再
▶語評(詳留言)
944Please respect copyright.PENANAPbxLjWEDSM
【13】 逆流而上 $1000
▶#185+189+192 蘇拉與山竹
▶語評(詳留言)
944Please respect copyright.PENANA8G0TKeU1Z9
【14】指尖之間 $1000
▶#119 回憶剩夏,不增減的約定
▶語評(詳留言)
944Please respect copyright.PENANAUhueDI529v
【15】Mag Kan $1000
▶#231 那年盛夏,我們沒有約定
▶語評(詳留言)
944Please respect copyright.PENANAsGH7uT3iAK
【16】沙發王的故事 $1000
▶#24 我們約定好了喔?
▶語評(詳留言)
944Please respect copyright.PENANANedx50YFXw
【17】八十公里路 $1000
▶#10 我的心裡,還有夏天嗎
▶語評(詳留言)
944Please respect copyright.PENANA2T05XyxJwQ
【18】 不寫文的紜啊 $1000
▶#43 《失約》
▶語評(詳留言)
944Please respect copyright.PENANAsEYmxQ9Sv9
【19】 夜臨 $1000
▶#49 天使大人的玻璃傘
▶語評(詳留言)
944Please respect copyright.PENANAmp3AUYAhce
【20】笑耶 $1000
▶#214+216+218 故地重遊(上+中+下)
▶語評(詳留言)
944Please respect copyright.PENANA6EvET2LWCn
【佳作1】莫軒 $500
▶#77 我如何把你比作夏天?
【佳作2】But $500
▶#150 夏天!當然是暑假到處玩啦
【佳作3】供過佛的多多綠 $500
▶#67 那年盛夏
【佳作4】旭音愁渺 $500
▶#198 一起做餅乾
【佳作5】癲客道人 $500
▶#136 日間顯影
944Please respect copyright.PENANAT7iDosFYJG
【複評未上榜】
▶#6 盛夏之夢 ▶#50 滿天星 ▶#146 夏戀 ▶#238 夏雨滂沱
944Please respect copyright.PENANAd0eG5us83y
新詩類
944Please respect copyright.PENANA6CscKpx9Zx
【1】西帆 $4000
▶#203 夏•冬眠
▶語評
本作於擬人、擬物手法上十分精巧944Please respect copyright.PENANA4GjTfZBe1D
重複運用卻又沒有多餘的氛圍944Please respect copyright.PENANAlPZkJPoWJg
而藉由水果方式提升(味覺)944Please respect copyright.PENANAGRzvvQm69d
我想更是使閱讀來能有另一種味道,而不止是品詩這麼簡單944Please respect copyright.PENANAFsDq1lslXy
而是是人在食用時能入口即化944Please respect copyright.PENANABeGvgJsZHY
944Please respect copyright.PENANA8Tm4scW7Fg
944Please respect copyright.PENANAJdVSJxPqGb
「嘗試把心臟調慢」944Please respect copyright.PENANAJH8hvGnj8o
我尤以喜歡這句,心臟當然不會跳動變慢,但內心(精神)的感覺卻可以,慢而持久944Please respect copyright.PENANAo6WylulFQ5
使人不會因為時間的洪流944Please respect copyright.PENANAelGEFqojjG
失去了炙熱944Please respect copyright.PENANAWf2fZ9nN6c
944Please respect copyright.PENANAHuDtSqceGb
944Please respect copyright.PENANArxqa0dzVlt
詩名為《夏,冬眠》944Please respect copyright.PENANAWABK97wjch
但夏季怎麼會有雪944Please respect copyright.PENANAW6rwOdKU37
令人加以反思944Please respect copyright.PENANA5ISp3jtvAo
雪季不該有的畫面944Please respect copyright.PENANAyXXvWantB0
卻如那噠噠的馬蹄聲,走過歲月的容顏944Please respect copyright.PENANAuv09WCaBfV
944Please respect copyright.PENANAKkYwP3mH5Q
或許944Please respect copyright.PENANAVVgnUaTFCz
不只這個夏季呼吸充滿著冰凍的雪氣944Please respect copyright.PENANACipgo5X3f5
即便是來年944Please respect copyright.PENANAdu4yvwCMqX
之後的每一年都依然如此
944Please respect copyright.PENANAtuogehq11j
【2】 Nølav 挪拉夫 $3000
▶#102 戀夏
▶語評
情有幾分、愛有幾分,情愛一生只不過是貪戀癡嗔。944Please respect copyright.PENANAmxRmMDw8II
如那鄭少秋歌詞裡的悲傷優柔,我仍沐浴在這片刻的悸夏蕩漾之間,正如首段那句夜星彌留著如你的容顏,這會令人更加拌佐孤寂的味道,與憶起漸行漸遠的那伊人。944Please respect copyright.PENANA4VkPTIEoXh
944Please respect copyright.PENANA8fJYFrhZjH
我打江南走過,卻仍等候的是你季節裡的容顏如島國般夏風。944Please respect copyright.PENANAP3kuSXERVW
猶如鹹濕海風,亦如她漆黑雙眸之間是否仍容下有你的一隅。944Please respect copyright.PENANASCM4Qyat2w
又如我吱吱的淺吻聲是美麗的衝動。944Please respect copyright.PENANAmFNF0MGLBz
我不是歸人,是個過客。夏季仍舊是夏季。944Please respect copyright.PENANAzmCogJSKSD
944Please respect copyright.PENANAjlVv2v7hnI
景物依然,妳卻不然。944Please respect copyright.PENANAlHgNhtDNfh
多年已逝,歲月靜好不在。944Please respect copyright.PENANA9F6cVmdOiC
更多的是此刻的情殤。944Please respect copyright.PENANAOB1aQJcFVZ
944Please respect copyright.PENANAbOfCx9nXWC
而長生殿上楊玉環,幽怨了千年至今仍迴盪那長恨歌。944Please respect copyright.PENANAMRjkSwNTII
又是否譬如我此時的心思呢?944Please respect copyright.PENANAO4N3TfZdOz
春霧與東嶺再臨我又是否安然平靜呢?944Please respect copyright.PENANABVQBzLDutG
944Please respect copyright.PENANA1wVD8Kqcow
944Please respect copyright.PENANA9t7Ti3ugv6
夏季,這絢麗。944Please respect copyright.PENANAHHNkhc54vu
如曇花一現的煙花。944Please respect copyright.PENANA33EJZ4jzee
就讓今夜重燃內心那苗火吧!
944Please respect copyright.PENANAup6lrAE5QJ
【3】霧散、秋殘 $2000
▶#12 夏
▶語評
詩詞中區分為序、插、終。944Please respect copyright.PENANAeQVP4zvTtn
同如起、轉、合三處意境。944Please respect copyright.PENANANAVdCA6PB1
944Please respect copyright.PENANAuq8Uc1Fypf
以古詩破題,新詩釋義自己情意。944Please respect copyright.PENANAJEiaWdI0GV
944Please respect copyright.PENANAu4KIaMZDLg
六月、七月的芒夏荷香四溢,令人心曠神怡流連忘返。944Please respect copyright.PENANARgyDso2qYn
944Please respect copyright.PENANAHxKCkBeIH0
卻不知這竟是否為大夢誰先覺,夢醒一場空呢?
944Please respect copyright.PENANATa7cZiBJcT
【4】宅米蟲子 $1500
▶#157 殘夏中秋(樂府詩)
▶語評
三生三世皆躲不過命運的輪迴944Please respect copyright.PENANAp2AxA7SIQl
夢裡百花卻也沒妳的笑顏盛開944Please respect copyright.PENANAtTVp8zMIrM
944Please respect copyright.PENANAZ8TZoNSUYL
細雨紛飛絕情綿綿944Please respect copyright.PENANAZXICvBmDYQ
句中江畔相隨944Please respect copyright.PENANA7ohG6dsCZH
卻又未知天意是何在944Please respect copyright.PENANA7hjqRiPsY2
944Please respect copyright.PENANAQBq8DJC5aP
即便是狂嘯 悲歌944Please respect copyright.PENANACbbQph3sfw
天上繁星 銀河944Please respect copyright.PENANA9iFZIMFRFI
也僅是萬千世界的一粟944Please respect copyright.PENANAhfvDUGBNfE
卻找不出能取掉你的其一944Please respect copyright.PENANA7fnssiOpI8
944Please respect copyright.PENANAEnDxBdSYGq
從回到閣樓944Please respect copyright.PENANAAc9bPGRleQ
又再次漫步獨醉944Please respect copyright.PENANAUZHluv1uhl
是心裡的牽掛令人陶醉944Please respect copyright.PENANAi3tCsQBXZL
還是物理的酒精使人沉醉944Please respect copyright.PENANAoMpsCwNBK5
早已在你染塵衣袖分不清了944Please respect copyright.PENANA9NvKCaj8S5
944Please respect copyright.PENANAd2Ee5Ot9QO
黃泉彼岸花開,所引出的火照之路944Please respect copyright.PENANA2Aoyg087il
也不過只是再次三世944Please respect copyright.PENANAeFvCvkIdGE
與妳再相逢的一場作戲罷了
944Please respect copyright.PENANAu3M0BDumCa
【5】 艾米莉 $1500
▶#3 仲夏夢華
▶語評
《仲夏夜之夢》A Midsummer Night's Dream源自於文藝復興文豪莎士比亞創作的浪漫喜劇。944Please respect copyright.PENANAAWQ9S0GimJ
「仲夏夜」指的是一年之中白晝最長的夏至前後,相傳這一天晚上是精靈活躍的時刻,會有許多不可思議的奇幻事情發生。944Please respect copyright.PENANAeLeTexotLy
在PENANA的賴群組中求教 #闇夜星河 #星秤 兩位,得知原是精靈的惡作劇進而造成了這場愛恨糾葛的多角關係。944Please respect copyright.PENANApKDcfTnfo3
(感謝科普。)944Please respect copyright.PENANABbkDLEuiJx
944Please respect copyright.PENANAnhzYZZnGfp
然而在十多年前求學階段,魚魚第一次聽到仲夏夜這個詞,並不在西洋古典所見到,反而是在《xxxholic》、《TSUBASA翼》這部早期神作中看到一詞;接續再次聽到是在我大學選修一堂《神話英語》的課程再次聽到。944Please respect copyright.PENANAiDht4iw8fT
在高中時期,熱愛小說、動漫、電玩的我,這些是我課後逐漸成為作家(廢人)的養分來源,這些過往我們就暫且不再說明。944Please respect copyright.PENANAOuMMqWPBti
944Please respect copyright.PENANAW5vRszqxRW
AMYS大的新詩中,可以從簡樸日常的景物,如枝頭樹影、街道行人、沙灘繁星再到湖滔漣漪等,想像的到,這對戀人從初視、打傘、相依直至心底的共鳴。944Please respect copyright.PENANA0w8aR8Waen
簡單的美好,竟可以這般簡單。944Please respect copyright.PENANAtvv5i7gMZY
如梁靜茹<為我好>專輯內,像剝橘子這般簡單的幸福,可以唾手可得的滿足,也或許對某些人來說非常的困難。這些取決在於人的內心想法。944Please respect copyright.PENANAIG8rNBC75m
944Please respect copyright.PENANA3CXWAk2CGC
仲夏之間少了點的是激情。944Please respect copyright.PENANA2nedVAnGi3
仲夏之間多出些的是清淡。944Please respect copyright.PENANAiFxhJlTkwc
檯面下的暗流湧動,或許僅只是讀者所看不到的他們內心的洶湧。944Please respect copyright.PENANAmHdiw3EUTd
944Please respect copyright.PENANAssdNArsZKi
而我只知,仲夏夢宴正演奏著一道清新的情愛。
944Please respect copyright.PENANA2B6Hn8Hipe
【6】紫小絢 $1000
▶#51 花夢之無聲
▶語評
無語的花瓣,自小嚮往著自由綻放的藍天白雲,夏蟬與飛鳥的佐伴。曾經多麼遙想著那份追逐的渴望。
944Please respect copyright.PENANAuU1GMzEjaq
與其說是羨慕,倒是幾分憤世嫉俗的意味所在。944Please respect copyright.PENANAjKMN0vjMvH
944Please respect copyright.PENANAzpBUZRn6VI
直至,雨過天青,才發覺原來自己仍舊擁有著雨滴的相擁。944Please respect copyright.PENANApKoVZRfvhN
而我們又何必在意那天空藍呢?
944Please respect copyright.PENANAji5MIkfHnW
【7】宅米蟲子 $1000
▶#78 兩世笙花
▶語評
五月成熟的梅樹,透過初夏將其青梅韻開酒香該是多麼令人陶醉的畫面,而再多上幾株該採下的花枝,豈不樂乎?944Please respect copyright.PENANAlk2vIv49PQ
944Please respect copyright.PENANAHkBpkn4llc
一抹玄龍劃破了淡薄的心防。944Please respect copyright.PENANANRfNdtEM1D
美景再好都無法平息,我倆的已然造成的誤解。944Please respect copyright.PENANAfuHPC7mCER
白華如是一道流星墜落,墜落於重生與你的羈絆。944Please respect copyright.PENANAs51Bpbfdpn
944Please respect copyright.PENANAGB4OwN1dyW
而在反覆讀完了宅米蟲子<兩世笙花>後,想起了兩世輪迴的仙履奇緣,其中經典的一段台詞:「曾經有一段真摯的愛情在我面前,但我沒有去珍惜,直到失去了以後才後悔莫及,塵世間最痛苦的莫過於此......」944Please respect copyright.PENANAHcqOaAQS8C
944Please respect copyright.PENANAGlxFr0LIyp
造物弄人,倆世為人而今生卻與你交杯喝上壺合丞酒,可為多少輩子所修來的福分。944Please respect copyright.PENANAVvkfENYnGo
944Please respect copyright.PENANA1R44MBUQqW
前世,已放下。944Please respect copyright.PENANAjCUvys8VK1
今來,是泛起了一水漣漪。944Please respect copyright.PENANAC48eIUlG49
944Please respect copyright.PENANA5BCT7Bmy6T
如不是身分所牽絆,我便放棄了所有與你共赴天崖海角。
944Please respect copyright.PENANABOVpb8zHFZ
【8】Nicolea $1000
▶#121 夏
▶語評
夏季田園的美好景色,映襯著一片祥和的欣欣向榮。944Please respect copyright.PENANAqlxVODNSBt
如同中學時期讀過了一首宋代曾做《頌》詩:944Please respect copyright.PENANAJOuO2xSGRW
「春有百花秋有月,夏有涼風冬有雪。若無閒事掛心頭,便是人間好時節。」944Please respect copyright.PENANAIglNMe4upN
944Please respect copyright.PENANAcADwwcduLd
而這份難得的清幽,確實隨著年齡的增長。944Please respect copyright.PENANAn9QRfkfHzQ
越是得來不易。944Please respect copyright.PENANAMen31SXMyn
944Please respect copyright.PENANANUmBKLy6gm
田中牧童的玉笛繚繞著蟬聲裊裊。944Please respect copyright.PENANA7muOJTF8YX
這該是人生如何的片刻煙花璀璨。944Please respect copyright.PENANAnpDCZU55nL
只得盼望,人生還能再得這般閒情逸致。
944Please respect copyright.PENANAhoQhMab3yE
【9】胡殷 $1000
▶#137 鳳凰花
▶語評
夏季雖為離別時節,卻也是人生成長的必經道路。944Please respect copyright.PENANAhKjXbR8Dnx
眼淚是曖昧的催化劑,也是愛情的火藥。944Please respect copyright.PENANA4uvpRJBWXg
人走茶未涼卻為下一次再相遇時而香。944Please respect copyright.PENANAmsQLCeupzM
如我們未盡的緣分這般。944Please respect copyright.PENANANcLtY6DoLI
944Please respect copyright.PENANADCaBecAJlt
944Please respect copyright.PENANAl8GNV16Zgl
相親相見知何日,此時此夜難為情。944Please respect copyright.PENANANzEM884PYp
而我卻因這片花落,這道蟬聲所困惑。944Please respect copyright.PENANAJ7tbjfqwkd
即便歷經了離別後夏風的迎撫,也無法抽離曾經的嬉戲。944Please respect copyright.PENANA7b5XqiKCUJ
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妳與我是否曾有探險過那道友誼塹壁後的道路。944Please respect copyright.PENANA1KnsEW1vUD
我並不知情。944Please respect copyright.PENANAbF4BY5C00p
也不再無從得知。944Please respect copyright.PENANAFDYjkQVX7X
944Please respect copyright.PENANAx8nggdcJSa
944Please respect copyright.PENANAtk0CI9teqH
「隻身回望太匆匆,此生多少情與仇。944Please respect copyright.PENANABTCskWwgWF
無邊絲雨細如愁,朝來寒雨幾回眸。」944Please respect copyright.PENANAxEWgH8sObx
只得對空一嘆,老天給予了我們太短的夢醒時分。944Please respect copyright.PENANAbsc1uM6KPP
此刻,我只擁著憶起最後鳳凰花下,妳牽起我的悸動,約定未忘的誓言罷了。944Please respect copyright.PENANApOQajcmbGJ
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未來,我們還會有機會再見嗎?來世,我們還會續緣嗎?還是,我只個過客?
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【10】林賾流 $1000
▶#83 烈陽之影
▶語評
開篇以豔陽不可直視944Please respect copyright.PENANAjU2xWaZqoH
寫出了真實的太陽給予人的強盛944Please respect copyright.PENANAeJlOutjNhC
並以柔和手法,側寫隨著時間經過,很快又能再見到的期待944Please respect copyright.PENANA3Qe38NMynu
944Please respect copyright.PENANAXrbINkuALq
而在萬里無雲的日常944Please respect copyright.PENANAsg6u7nVq0E
大地照耀出了你的光芒944Please respect copyright.PENANAq7j17s5fzG
只想著短暫沒有你的存在944Please respect copyright.PENANALOtLZKBKoO
與緬懷影子的並行944Please respect copyright.PENANAnrJ2iyZcWz
944Please respect copyright.PENANArI4yxe0YTx
而東升初陽如一雙碩壯的大手944Please respect copyright.PENANATzUNJq41nh
敲響了人群一日的序幕944Please respect copyright.PENANAPVS93ZbLUc
島與海944Please respect copyright.PENANAgAs7aIOZe3
又為何區分你、我呢944Please respect copyright.PENANAH6VoDQsVFE
如同我仰望著巍峨的山峰山鋒也正仰望著你944Please respect copyright.PENANAZ7CoZTYjPX
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隨著四季的變化944Please respect copyright.PENANAkYLkE1GZSD
夏季卻是此刻我影跡糾纏最久時944Please respect copyright.PENANAlYV48HMKuX
直至,我忘卻了
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那個我
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【佳作1】 宅米蟲子 $1000
▶#170 夏祈杳杳
▶語評
本篇相對於前兩篇樂府詩944Please respect copyright.PENANAiVPNjkPilq
詩意要較為薄弱944Please respect copyright.PENANAFyaIK3Jxbn
但仍是一首很棒的古詩
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之所以我認為相對較弱的部分944Please respect copyright.PENANAFX1PPvK0vV
是其意境 與用詞的閱讀感944Please respect copyright.PENANA4M1XBq5iDn
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【兩世笙花】、【殘夏中秋】中皆有一個顯眼的主題,但在【夏祈杳杳】中以花鋪景,望卻天上星闕流露出了一絲孤寂與深沉的感受。944Please respect copyright.PENANAoWq19fYS52
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或許是【兩世笙花】的一抹玄龍劃破淡薄心防,思念太深。944Please respect copyright.PENANAd3naXfkw5P
也許是【殘夏中秋】的細雨紛飛絕情綿綿,景色太美。944Please respect copyright.PENANA55sNFAPJpY
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再嗑完了兩份深沉的憂愁後,重回到了【夏祈杳杳】,別有另外一種,希望來年梧桐花開,伊人會再來的期望。944Please respect copyright.PENANA0wrlwlfkJ6
更多是抱持著,能夠等待,並且那人是可以等得到的感受。944Please respect copyright.PENANAPPqgWRrgPi
故此,以其作為比較下,兩者意境高低立判。944Please respect copyright.PENANAnkkcHv8p3n
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當然,宅米的詩無庸置疑放在蕉園上都是罕有敵手,皆為佳作。944Please respect copyright.PENANACOAcH2uHEg
詩的優缺,僅憑讀者當下的心境去解讀。944Please respect copyright.PENANAtC1ksirwbY
每個人的角度皆為不同。944Please respect copyright.PENANAPjlNPgZInU
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有人感受深刻,944Please respect copyright.PENANAeD9I99wSxx
有人無感,944Please respect copyright.PENANAc8llI56q0k
各有差異。944Please respect copyright.PENANA8Bx5mAGQkO
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而我僅是那茫茫人海中,944Please respect copyright.PENANAzG0zlOqTfC
因其而感受到詩中情摯所渲染一名騷客。
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【佳作2】柏木桐柊 $1000
▶#58 也許我還會夢見你
▶語評
或許,她的影跡已成過往。窗櫺映入柔情似水,而匯聚成今夜的輾轉難眠。944Please respect copyright.PENANAmeQOK8C4gc
我望不及妳眼底的星空漫步,而夏季裡還仍猶存妳餘溫。妳說的那些在我的世界又算得是什麼,留下的不過是在保險櫃裡的一抹笑意。我早已分不清,夏日我倆是否曾約定過,而捧上手中代表著祝福的黃玫瑰。944Please respect copyright.PENANAq2icISdQrX
這不代表著我倆有過曾經。夏夜裡。獨自釀著夢中還偶然遇見的妳。944Please respect copyright.PENANAeZgWZyDRDe
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柏木桐柊文筆能力在短短數筆之下,運用了大量的暗喻及景色來比擬離情的傷感。醪、櫺兩字都是極其罕見的同義字,在詩句之間也靈活運用自己的特色
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【佳作3】 余軍 $1000
▶#139 七夕夜茫茫
▶語評
銀燭秋光冷畫屏,輕羅小扇撲流螢。944Please respect copyright.PENANA6jOlkJoNXg
天階夜色涼如水,臥看牽牛織女星。944Please respect copyright.PENANAA5eNIj5KRa
即便過了一千兩百年,我們仍可想見在宮中拿著圓扇揮舞著螢火蟲的宮女,是幾般哀愁著,在涼意襲人的季夏中,孤獨賞月。944Please respect copyright.PENANA9Tu8irsJIx
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每每七夕時分總是容易遭受羨煞旁人的眷侶炸眼球。944Please respect copyright.PENANAMfxDWJzSp8
而這對於此刻孤寂的人,將變得更加孤寂萬分。944Please respect copyright.PENANAOy8gtTjN4B
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也許,他仍等待著茫茫人中那個她。944Please respect copyright.PENANAzovgPL6pzI
也許,他只不過是她生命中的過客。944Please respect copyright.PENANAqpGLGGui5f
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偷偷遙望著,她的限時動態。944Please respect copyright.PENANAJa7cDt2Dho
悄悄祝福著,她的喜訊分享。944Please respect copyright.PENANAJNy844jfTP
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七夕。944Please respect copyright.PENANAc3dP75zvcK
是個情感放大百倍的敏感時節。944Please respect copyright.PENANAkwKg2BiFPF
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在銀河伴隨著夜幕,總是能不經意地想起了某個她。944Please respect copyright.PENANAvZarx2owzi
或許,這才是那年盛夏,最難忘的約定了吧。
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【佳作4】虛冲 $1000
▶#228 仲夏夜之詩
▶語評
道長這首寫實敘事的打油詩944Please respect copyright.PENANA01rXLZ1xer
用道地口吻方式呈現944Please respect copyright.PENANAjj7KgvyTSf
別有一番令人感同身受的味道944Please respect copyright.PENANAVUOaOlsaKI
944Please respect copyright.PENANAeA1gFhy3p6
華麗的新詩固然有深沈944Please respect copyright.PENANAglkSNyegI9
反覆咀嚼的口感944Please respect copyright.PENANAKXnIsk6UJC
但相較於打油詩944Please respect copyright.PENANArEpARwH4Al
卻更能反映生活上的記趣944Please respect copyright.PENANAuNRTx8voaV
又或者應該說是上班藍領族的無奈吧!944Please respect copyright.PENANAdSB4XFp2RR
944Please respect copyright.PENANA7SCmNrRjex
夏季沉悶、炙熱944Please respect copyright.PENANAm1HW9zw8zp
而很難讓人能對於煩躁事情944Please respect copyright.PENANAOOHcf7uJrf
保持理性與忍耐944Please respect copyright.PENANAINJ9O30Pi0
故此,我們應該適時調整自己步伐
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抬起頭來944Please respect copyright.PENANAP23qVCIm77
深深吸一口氣944Please respect copyright.PENANAo568bWhQAM
靜下來看一下周遭的事物944Please respect copyright.PENANAUicSqE9uru
仍舊有著許多美好的細節
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【佳作5】胤宸 $1000
▶#53 那時風若來
▶語評
花自飄零水自流。944Please respect copyright.PENANAbk4ixkSgAY
一種相思,兩處閒愁。944Please respect copyright.PENANAO4x3hXZBMQ
此情無計可消除,才下眉頭,卻上心頭。944Please respect copyright.PENANAdnDg350ste
同如<<李清照>>的一剪梅,而這西湖庭院盈滿的荷風又與易安居士筆下那殘荷,抽象暨不易捉摸的思想感情相較,誰更勝一籌呢?944Please respect copyright.PENANAeRTtCNDn8o
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獨賞荷葉,飄蕩於塘邊,一抹光照滑過一池漣漪。944Please respect copyright.PENANAlg3Zyt5U1x
卻無心這番閒情逸致,內心仍未那尚未赴約的風而風,掛記了心頭,酒、荷、影皆為而動,卻因那三缺一的風美中不足。944Please respect copyright.PENANAj1PRZ7kahF
慧開禪師那經典一句「春有百花秋有月,夏有涼風冬有雪,若無閒事掛心頭,便是人間好時節。」 944Please respect copyright.PENANAfHTg8Fn74L
而其中「若無閒事在心頭」更是把心中沒有掛慮,便是好時節詮釋的淋漓盡致。944Please respect copyright.PENANA7MKYiU08Q6
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人生在世,總為數不清的事情苦惱、煩躁,如果可真心放下了這些東西,簡直美麗得太過不要了。944Please respect copyright.PENANA0ZCoEVNuDd
風,是否能在夏日再次吹拂。944Please respect copyright.PENANA1qEotsBS7c
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我們仍未可知。944Please respect copyright.PENANApojo9jF7OK
但卻明白另一事,眼前這番美酒,如果可以那便今朝有酒今朝醉吧。
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【複評未上榜】
▶#55 薰夏誓約,詩綺永存 ▶#176 逃夏 ▶#194 致逝去的夏
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特殊獎項
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【最佳電腦繪畫獎】LiCh 阿立 $3000
▶#195 Sunny Come Back
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【最佳創作金曲獎】W.H. $3000
▶#212 夏之熱力學
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感謝贊助本場創作挑戰的各路金主
Penana小熊 15500P!!!!!!
伍拾陸 5600P!!
月亮熊 5000P!!
夏坂Moonight 5000P!!
InDeeeer 4000P!!
容霜 3000P!
谷映塵(員外) 2000P!
W.H. 2000P!
笑具 1500P!
知閒言炎 1000P!
筆墨談兵 1000P!
Sandy 1000P!
悲艾 1000P!
月月 800P!
宅米蟲子 起源 Nicolea 葉月晉久HS 墨云 巫尚益 100-200P
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本期創挑心得
(1)是的,由於這個評比斷斷續續,歷經了接近一年的時間,在時效性上早已失去了觀眾的熱誠,途中發現有些人已經退出PENANA。
其中我感到最惋惜的是夏坂Moonight老師,他在本期的3篇作品都是上乘的好文,由於我的拖延症,讓大家失去了能讀上更好作品的機會。
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(2)排名評比,是我的閱讀程度與個人感觀去排序,或許,你會覺得為何他的作品比我好呢?
這邊,我歡迎大家都能提出討論。
不希望反而因為排名,引發筆戰,那就失去了開心創作本身的意義了。
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(3)本期在#195樓LiCh 阿立大大的「Sunny Come Back」,是我開始創作挑戰以來,收到最大得驚喜了,我萬萬想不到竟然會有這麼精彩的投稿,讓我當下受寵若驚,太幸福了吧。
各位,如果喜歡歡迎到LICH大的粉絲專頁,拜讀他的作品。
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(4)分數上,本次我並沒有參用到「閱讀數」或是「喜歡數」這個數據,因為我怕會對於文筆上的排名失準,不過我還是先將我初評、複評的經過都貼上來給各位看看。










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(5)好啦,廢話有點多。
這邊希望大家都能去我得其他幾個創作挑戰看看。
如果你們喜歡的話,都幫我書籤起來吧!
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另外
已經開始,各位準備磨拳擦掌吧!!!!!!!!
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如果可以幫我打賞本篇(會當作下期獎金)
為下期創挑添上一份心力XD
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謝謝~944Please respect copyright.PENANArXHkgzqPOe


