首先,在此說聲感謝。
【第6期創作挑戰】歷時1年才將其完成評比。
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原先應該在今年初完成最終結語。
但在這期間,我遇到了職場上必須離開台灣本島一段很長的時間。
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身邊除了沒有電腦用,又外加大寶處於一歲難照顧的時期,同時間又懷了二寶。
生活的考驗不斷地消彌我對於創作的熱誠,與占據了大多數的空閒。
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我必須說。
很遺憾的有些人在一年後已經離開了蕉園。
他(她)們沒能等待到這一次的落幕。
也很可惜。
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最後,我將再次感謝你們願意耐心等待這場落幕儀式。
-----Lonely Fish 2024.11.06
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恭喜第六期的創作挑戰榮獲2023創作挑戰第二名的殊榮
這次的費時長達一年的時間來完成評比。
這裡我可以大膽的跟各位報告,每一篇作品少說都讀過兩次以上,並且全部都留下語評。
240篇文筆不一的文章,我必須老實說「讀起來,真的燒腦的一蹋糊塗。」
但創作理念熱誠還在,這些都不是問題。
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以上廢話結束。
接著,我們準備公布這次的成績,並在後面留下一點這個創作挑戰的心得。
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由於篇幅眾多。(小說類190篇,新詩類44篇,其他6篇。)
我採取小說正取前20篇,以我個人主觀挑選在故事劇情、用字、人物刻劃都能拿上檯面。
並且讓人願意反覆閱讀的好作品。
我會「盡量」挑選字數符合在1500字的作品。
另外,在新詩的部分,由於主題應當以新詩作為框架。
但考量到部分樂府詩、古詩這類的作品,故此一併用單純「詩」的角度去作為出發點,進行評選。
另外,額外兩個獨力拉出來的獎項,分別是【最佳電腦繪畫獎】及【最佳創作金曲獎】,後續會多作說明。
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小說類
【1】凶讀 $5000
▶#20 #21 夏日湖畔(上+下) #104 夏日湖畔(番外)香氣
▶已連續三篇故事銜接的方式,引領讀者深入,不管在用字上,人物刻劃都非常的好。
▶語評
「剪不斷,理還亂,是離愁。別是一般滋味在心頭。」李煜一句思念妻子的思緒,在第一章的開局,讓人無限醞釀著,那多麼曾經的美好。448Please respect copyright.PENANAVIS2btMo0p
接續則是父親與孩兒間,多年來已未溫存的親情。
畫面是那麼地美不勝收---448Please respect copyright.PENANANCUlw5UfVF
448Please respect copyright.PENANAiIkejOAezb
又一刻,轉折接踵而來。448Please respect copyright.PENANAHXhAlTXZdL
一陣猛咳,替換的是埋下了這段故事另一處伏筆。448Please respect copyright.PENANAuGDVLid01F
一個故事之內容精采萬分,之所以讓人看了血脈噴張,捨不得放下,就是因為其中的不平凡。448Please respect copyright.PENANA4Uk6T0maQA
而這篇在下章就是如此。448Please respect copyright.PENANApz0AZ7j2Rr
448Please respect copyright.PENANAOvy9QE48qN
林佑堂的變故,是突來的喪屍系列。448Please respect copyright.PENANAf3VbkMLmrH
估計讀者心到此處,仍處在數度混亂之中,這便也是作者凶讀所達成的目的。448Please respect copyright.PENANA1ZOuJdeYTE
耐人尋味的親情,卻轉折為末日的延續,更讓人有敲碗再看下去續篇的打算。448Please respect copyright.PENANAoEtTsnUKrg
而在那新聞快訊後,簡潔地收尾結束,更把這篇有力的畫下句點。448Please respect copyright.PENANAjgheWSvaPt
是否疫情將緩和停滯,這我們無從得知。448Please respect copyright.PENANAREP7Wbm8a7
但唯一明白的卻是,那份恐懼感已然存於你內心深處,餘音繞梁三日不絕。448Please respect copyright.PENANAnJb3kQ3yi6
448Please respect copyright.PENANAYE4DZxLHxo
在104章的番外篇延續了,讀者再次想要的畫面,凶讀更是樂善好施地將畫面全數帶給讀者,簡直令人幸福得太過不要。448Please respect copyright.PENANAbQIwADghBm
「我知道你們還想看對吧?那我就接續再寫下去。」那份激昂感,卻給了我們內心違和的感動。448Please respect copyright.PENANA6KXOtzeLZW
還記得去年在Netflix看過殭屍校園,雖故事的起點不同,卻有類似的風格,而在中部開始傳染開來的病毒,又是否會使政府展開鎖國政策呢?448Please respect copyright.PENANAsuZN7oIQiu
這又將會是另外的話題,我們便不多做討論。
448Please respect copyright.PENANA5FpMGMR2SF
眼下,有的只剩讀者的幻想空間。
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【2】 Devor 白棘 $4000
▶#123 終末的煙火 #138 終末的海洋 #147 終末的冰箱
▶這三篇故事,可以分開閱讀獨立的章節,也可以連貫再一起成為一篇長篇。
▶語評
非常罕見的倒述寫法。448Please respect copyright.PENANAUyYmDtxcyW
在第三篇中我們才知道歐林448Please respect copyright.PENANAyCuq2RxBz6
這故是關鍵的人物448Please respect copyright.PENANAJY8wYRNjAW
自此才明白,原來他不僅僅是想要復活448Please respect copyright.PENANACug1DHjoJY
最強吸血鬼兼任戀人的芙蕾兒並且同時想延續那個諾言448Please respect copyright.PENANAoIctjot2Go
448Please respect copyright.PENANAj1Qo7CjzEI
「我們的孩子」448Please respect copyright.PENANAyE1l47buBO
這連續性的故事寫法特殊、故事完整448Please respect copyright.PENANAdbZrSiiK9x
實為本次【第六期創挑】中非常少見的用詞精簡,劇情完整的好文。448Please respect copyright.PENANA3mcZecB7Po
而相信自芙蕾兒離開前往新的星球後448Please respect copyright.PENANA9p1sDAsi7e
也肯定還會有新的故事起點448Please respect copyright.PENANA9SjoDGuJKJ
然而天下無不散的宴席448Please respect copyright.PENANAwlMxJ9hFQx
我們本次故事便到此結束448Please respect copyright.PENANArrs7QsGJuw
希望下次還能再次相遇
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【3】東加豆 $3000
▶#57 在雅典46度的邂逅
▶在眾多篇幅中,脫穎而出的是,故事僅只是讀過一次,卻能留下一種強烈的遺憾感,即便是第一次語評後,過了一年仍舊記得這篇故事。
▶語評
從引頸期盼到衝動遠行再到心灰意冷,全都只在一念轉瞬之間。448Please respect copyright.PENANAZgJlD5Ty2j
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時而濕冷刺骨,時而溫暖潤人。只有那若隱若現的鹽澀味。翻越了半個地球曲面的海風,再次又為女孩捎來了,希臘赤道的浪漫。448Please respect copyright.PENANA6npKJu6Z7C
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然而,言語中就是躲藏不了的宿命。爭執,同時是不可避免的毒藥。448Please respect copyright.PENANAwHqcrjEzoH
雖然亞歷山大沉默寡言,卻又可能內心同樣掀起幾絲驚滔駭浪,過猶那地中海的濱海陸風。448Please respect copyright.PENANAs4f9kYT3RP
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十日的短暫浪漫,在最後無言的結局中就畫下了浪漫的破碎。璇姑娘,那女孩。在22歲的希臘,不帶走任何一片雲彩。
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【4】嚮往國度 $2000
▶#122 回不去的夏天
▶語評
或許,女孩在男孩的心目中,尚未離開世間,只是去了一趟旅行。448Please respect copyright.PENANAB9swrxh9IS
然而,她早已成為了徘徊在兩人過去記憶的地縛靈,只是男孩至今仍未知情。448Please respect copyright.PENANAYrP4YObByU
從首段讓讀者猜測,或許是與女孩的某項約定,卻未料想竟是場人鬼情未了。448Please respect copyright.PENANAC8ah6v3HOM
直當夏季,在眾人眼底,我仍舊是個念舊的傻瓜。448Please respect copyright.PENANA2Dv1j8KKgN
----我也會赴約前往只有我倆的地方。448Please respect copyright.PENANAiNRjuUJsQw
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我嘗試幻想,如果女孩不是同學,而是男孩的親妹妹呢?448Please respect copyright.PENANAiYz0FX4VO8
會不會是父母親對他倆默許的戀兄情節呢?448Please respect copyright.PENANApJRUjhMuBO
最後的一栗核桃果,放進的並非只是男孩的口袋,反而是讀者的腦海深處的下丘帶,是令人抑鬱不住的交感情緒。448Please respect copyright.PENANAWziT4WX79R
房內的擺設習慣仍舊未變,然而變得是男孩儼然未知心態變化。448Please respect copyright.PENANAZZcrSwgwZP
直當年齡越大,約定束縛卻也越輕。只是他仍未發現而已。448Please respect copyright.PENANApJ6ok7cEOW
「我還會再來此地嗎?」內心的他,或許有一天終會發現。448Please respect copyright.PENANAv6489rvXY5
而從「想見你。」,直至餘生再也不見,那又會是怎麼樣子的感概呢?448Please respect copyright.PENANA2CAC3RAr5u
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「體貼不該在離別,你會讓該死心的的人還有留戀。」而妳最後的溫柔,也讓那個總是跌跌撞撞的男孩,終究打破了直男的心房,如此的明示,最終他也肯定發現了這些蛛絲馬跡了吧。448Please respect copyright.PENANA1uc96YJz9L
我,還會再來嗎?每年盛夏,妳還會再此處嗎?448Please respect copyright.PENANAqshmP5Cuv0
陡然間,男孩的一抹淚痕伴隨著成長悄然滑下。
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男孩離開後山後,她對著空無一人無助地嘶喊著:「你,明年別再來了。」448Please respect copyright.PENANAT5ptjhmOja
儘管未來,女孩不知道是否成為了男孩心中最熟悉的陌生人。但那奈河橋上,望穿著黃泉;凝視著他仍未走完人生的女孩,直至走過彼岸花叢,喝完了孟婆湯,她仍相信來生幾世,倆人肯定還能再相見。
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【5】大三明治 $2000
▶#86 拉普拉斯的白兔
▶語評
一個無限循環的惡夢(應該算是)448Please respect copyright.PENANAYy6sjZGgSO
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原先還在思索拉普拉斯的兔子的我,直到看完了故事才知道,我根本無需糾結這個地方。448Please respect copyright.PENANADCAquZEfpL
因為故事已經告訴我了。
文章開篇以學長為起點。448Please respect copyright.PENANAq0sMHjGNlc
而故事線轉回到了從前。448Please respect copyright.PENANAyiS9dgtgX7
自己也成了那個月曦口中的學長,令人感覺到不自覺的寒顫,而這份帶入感的恐懼,正是結尾伏筆所醞釀而出的感覺。
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【6】九指三爺 $1500
▶#23 爸爸,還要去哪裡玩?
▶語評
第一段尚未讀完,一道與父親訣別的感傷便先湧上心頭。448Please respect copyright.PENANAoV2d2g2r29
父親未竟的誓言,是兩人心中永遠的隔閡。448Please respect copyright.PENANA6iVeV7R9s7
為何情感總道別離時才會讓人醞釀開來?448Please respect copyright.PENANAVHHpTT0POO
又為何說別讓遺憾留下,卻滿地皆為遺憾?448Please respect copyright.PENANAyR6IZ9sxMN
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告別式中,可以想見的到,父親再娶的家庭該是與自己有著違和的場面;畢竟,自己本已就不屬於另個家庭的一份子。448Please respect copyright.PENANAUMfM9xlbhw
然而,雙方彼此嘗試性的接納,早已打破很多舊時代時候的情緒。448Please respect copyright.PENANASf3QeP2cd2
這點相信生活上只要遭遇過這種際遇的人,心底怕是比起你、我都更加了解。448Please respect copyright.PENANAVSbTtKefEf
由愛轉恨、恨轉怨,再到冷淡。448Please respect copyright.PENANAHTLU81JcXG
這才是常態。
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父親厚繭的雙手,在威利心中是永成長時永遠的心魔。448Please respect copyright.PENANAAJEAI22jmx
直到最後一刻,得知了父親原是愛著自己的時候,淚水又該如何能止住潸落。448Please respect copyright.PENANAy9lHnE1QOS
一代親情,未竟的諾言,終究還是謊言。448Please respect copyright.PENANAwGUYOi6f5x
即便,在告別式中聽到了這些真實話語,可父親仍舊一次都回來見過自己一面,又何如?448Please respect copyright.PENANAagx3U1jk0w
一句「父親,接著去哪玩......?」沉重般的自喃,更多的卻是解放開對自己的束縛,並非是對父親救贖。
448Please respect copyright.PENANAMRqbdD7cMN
告別式後,這些人或許餘生不見。448Please respect copyright.PENANAQDHBP7dUHI
然而,此等心情又豈是說忘就忘。448Please respect copyright.PENANASJDhOPgQFr
原來,痛便是忘了怎麼把過去給忘掉。
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這個盛夏,剩下遺憾。
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【7】思凡 $1500
▶#94 贈我予年
▶語評
故事的結尾是有著強烈的後勁的。448Please respect copyright.PENANAHKT1MZNjBM
整篇閱讀後,在開頭以宋予年在百忙之中,突然發覺了「她」的名字,突然之間再次走入了自己的人生。448Please respect copyright.PENANAEiV6IC3hkh
至此,幾年前分別以後。448Please respect copyright.PENANAj3q5RZR5aB
情感又悄悄地、毫無預警的映入了生命之中。448Please respect copyright.PENANA3ilB6aKsce
448Please respect copyright.PENANAd96pdUkKQH
「贈我,予年。」或許標題應當可以分開兩字來讀。448Please respect copyright.PENANAFWRTClZN2R
文中沒有提及到女孩當初為何離開了,然而,接續著故事推敲,讓我們得知。448Please respect copyright.PENANAuk0MMHSsae
也是是疾病纏身。448Please respect copyright.PENANAe9LlLxAuje
也迫不得已,離開了他。448Please respect copyright.PENANAsgTdfHbd7d
448Please respect copyright.PENANASydQlxxQtv
贈我,是一個約定。448Please respect copyright.PENANAdeGjlXE6xv
一個約定券的約定。 448Please respect copyright.PENANAODWEwBtbbP
而再見之時,人事已非。448Please respect copyright.PENANAfy5gbf7KKq
那個我已經不再是原本的那個我,但你還會深愛著我嗎?448Please respect copyright.PENANAL6Kf3RbD4g
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此刻,盛夏煙花燦爛,卻不如妳。448Please respect copyright.PENANABXEIGvYJxD
或許,再見不遠。 448Please respect copyright.PENANAtDrWU8HFzK
讓就那緣起三生起,三生滅吧。
448Please respect copyright.PENANAQTKvVRyT8u
【8】青蒼 Cyanblue $1500
▶#47 青夏,十七歲
▶語評
如同青澀地稚嫩十八未滿。那愛戀都如此單純與小心翼翼。
448Please respect copyright.PENANAJHWOHgBlvd
女方刻意放緩的進度向前,歷經長達三年感情滋養,在學年畢業的最後一刻,差點翻船的心情更是令人跟隨帶入那份苦澀。448Please respect copyright.PENANAp0TVaEkwxk
就像青春微酸甜那般。448Please respect copyright.PENANAyWMxN12xkP
忌妒、單戀,都是青春代表物。448Please respect copyright.PENANAQENgIVkybP
林夏芮不按照牌理出牌的外向性格,羅青澤在最後眼淚落下那刻才敲響了內心的鐘鳴,迴盪在內心心頭。448Please respect copyright.PENANAOP3UNg6kMN
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「原來這就是喜歡的心思。」我們不能怪男生呆如愚木,畢竟又有多少人能在高中時期對於未來、對於愛情掌握的滿分修行呢?448Please respect copyright.PENANAyyZNs6lq7s
夏天的故事,炙熱卻又充滿了愛戀的渲染。比擬冬日,我們更加容易觸動是主動的熱情。448Please respect copyright.PENANA3DBmImqm5Y
劉子傑的主動,或許在我們眼底,更像是跳樑小丑那般故作醜態。448Please respect copyright.PENANAtShvJFmiyZ
但就現實面來說,如果今天劉子傑與羅青澤兩人都具備同等的帥氣,同等的條件,那麼主動宣示的那方勝率還是會更高。448Please respect copyright.PENANAa4AQVjU6qk
或許,歷經過這次的告白失敗,在未來能成為他愛情的一個學分也猶未可知。448Please respect copyright.PENANA6miaR8BYXy
反而寫成了另一個故事的主角。448Please respect copyright.PENANA2KiiKcZhPS
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「人間的確荒謬,可我們還是能在這個人間拾溫柔。」故事曖昧的兩小無猜終成一對眷侶,而畢業後、就業後,又是否能續緣,我們無法猜測最後結局。448Please respect copyright.PENANAPV5uykpoCc
心動往往只是一剎那,喜歡卻是一輩子的記憶。448Please respect copyright.PENANA91xgJGX4ot
如果有一天,我們也面臨那份剎那的怦然心動,你/妳又是否敢勇於這份悸動,邁向這份回應呢?448Please respect copyright.PENANAGdVqI8o8Pg
448Please respect copyright.PENANA5eLlKWrA3q
夏天,依舊是夏天。但不一樣是我們的內心。
448Please respect copyright.PENANA3HvAnVo7p0
【9】墨云 $1500
▶#28 盛夏與魔女
▶語評
這是我見過最鮮蝦的奇幻劇情了。448Please respect copyright.PENANAkxw288yoeD
尤其這男人,絕對是個狠人,全部的純情只為了鋪敘結尾的那慾望。
448Please respect copyright.PENANAH9yNVx6sgA
開門見山的斗大魔女標題,早已告訴了這不能用平常的校園看待故事。448Please respect copyright.PENANAWpdtvlJCQL
而更為新奇的是簡單的一個小手段就處理好了,蟬靈的糾結,這同時打破了我對魔女的刻板印象。448Please respect copyright.PENANA8PpWlMeHkQ
魔女的天然呆更是突如其來一筆。448Please respect copyright.PENANAOrvHIrTQJN
448Please respect copyright.PENANAVBeNHUegBm
最後,故事的結尾再次迎來一次,天外飛來兩筆的性慾交易,這確實打破了讀者對於故事原先的美好幻想。448Please respect copyright.PENANACpp1nJ4Wsp
只得獲得一次白眼與冰冷感。
448Please respect copyright.PENANAab7c0yNZpM
【10】罪夜 $1500
▶#169 戀愛炸彈
▶語評
藉由肉體爆炸的引爆點劃開了對於戀愛的追求,是那樣獨特卻又邪門。448Please respect copyright.PENANAaQsHXqIgrQ
448Please respect copyright.PENANAH3J1vFznfN
百鬼夜行獨見妳。千里迷離卻是妳。448Please respect copyright.PENANABa4AgQo6QS
我喜愛著,這般怪異卻令人心動的瞬間。448Please respect copyright.PENANASuEcAvE2QT
因那悸動。448Please respect copyright.PENANAOW0tKwhZYG
往往竟是那瞬間。
448Please respect copyright.PENANA4YLRZDrKx5
即便長大後再交往的女排球隊長,仍舊不行。448Please respect copyright.PENANAgV8VF59vcR
式風透過了那次的爆炸,早已在尋響內心埋下了一顆揮之不去的種子。448Please respect copyright.PENANAHiVUb2lKVg
真愛,不僅是人與人之間的感情,更是當你真心喜愛某事、某物,而願意竭盡心力的付出,使他變得更好、更幸福。448Please respect copyright.PENANAuhYBrP35r5
那麼讓自己爆炸,也算是一種真愛嗎?448Please respect copyright.PENANArY0pdP5EC6
448Please respect copyright.PENANAwbQRbYirCw
語畢,尋響的爆炸是否讓兩人在另一個百鬼的世界相守相繫,這個猶未可知。448Please respect copyright.PENANAyJEraZmuLk
但至少可以確定的是,他卻早已觸動了內心最深處的那個戀愛因子了。448Please respect copyright.PENANAsnvHhKAjv0
「我感到心滿意足。」然而他滿意的就是真的是自己也喜愛著對方,又抑或是對方仍舊七年來愛著自己呢?
448Please respect copyright.PENANAWqXWhk8fzb
【11】 舉一千從 $1000
▶#182 〈澐寨舞〉
▶語評(詳留言)
448Please respect copyright.PENANArdon69VJh6
【12】 莫軒 $1000
▶#239 末世終結之後,我在破曉的晨曦窺見夏日的生機,但故人不再
▶語評(詳留言)
448Please respect copyright.PENANAzFKz8HJXqY
【13】 逆流而上 $1000
▶#185+189+192 蘇拉與山竹
▶語評(詳留言)
448Please respect copyright.PENANAukqB7r8i7f
【14】指尖之間 $1000
▶#119 回憶剩夏,不增減的約定
▶語評(詳留言)
448Please respect copyright.PENANAT6d9eQzyff
【15】Mag Kan $1000
▶#231 那年盛夏,我們沒有約定
▶語評(詳留言)
448Please respect copyright.PENANAwIfHpNk7Xc
【16】沙發王的故事 $1000
▶#24 我們約定好了喔?
▶語評(詳留言)
448Please respect copyright.PENANA227HxvgCZW
【17】八十公里路 $1000
▶#10 我的心裡,還有夏天嗎
▶語評(詳留言)
448Please respect copyright.PENANA3ccz3DsfhB
【18】 不寫文的紜啊 $1000
▶#43 《失約》
▶語評(詳留言)
448Please respect copyright.PENANAlSz87hkTKS
【19】 夜臨 $1000
▶#49 天使大人的玻璃傘
▶語評(詳留言)
448Please respect copyright.PENANAr7EuX7NCY8
【20】笑耶 $1000
▶#214+216+218 故地重遊(上+中+下)
▶語評(詳留言)
448Please respect copyright.PENANA692BvPpQ6r
【佳作1】莫軒 $500
▶#77 我如何把你比作夏天?
【佳作2】But $500
▶#150 夏天!當然是暑假到處玩啦
【佳作3】供過佛的多多綠 $500
▶#67 那年盛夏
【佳作4】旭音愁渺 $500
▶#198 一起做餅乾
【佳作5】癲客道人 $500
▶#136 日間顯影
448Please respect copyright.PENANAG8SUbgxxNj
【複評未上榜】
▶#6 盛夏之夢 ▶#50 滿天星 ▶#146 夏戀 ▶#238 夏雨滂沱
448Please respect copyright.PENANA2GQxNXK07t
新詩類
448Please respect copyright.PENANAseVSJI9Bzv
【1】西帆 $4000
▶#203 夏•冬眠
▶語評
本作於擬人、擬物手法上十分精巧448Please respect copyright.PENANACEb2yQk9JX
重複運用卻又沒有多餘的氛圍448Please respect copyright.PENANAevhKbXMw2H
而藉由水果方式提升(味覺)448Please respect copyright.PENANA3w5R8OE0lu
我想更是使閱讀來能有另一種味道,而不止是品詩這麼簡單448Please respect copyright.PENANAgeoQoZYvFT
而是是人在食用時能入口即化448Please respect copyright.PENANAVa3ubdZfKs
448Please respect copyright.PENANAks82iMLOCe
448Please respect copyright.PENANA85uUPcN6xK
「嘗試把心臟調慢」448Please respect copyright.PENANARTsxXtbpN7
我尤以喜歡這句,心臟當然不會跳動變慢,但內心(精神)的感覺卻可以,慢而持久448Please respect copyright.PENANAqPevjXxFHT
使人不會因為時間的洪流448Please respect copyright.PENANAGfzFQmQgaz
失去了炙熱448Please respect copyright.PENANAn6KB4zaL2E
448Please respect copyright.PENANAuKM07qXIpU
448Please respect copyright.PENANAPo4Ken4SL5
詩名為《夏,冬眠》448Please respect copyright.PENANAaNiHDRQtcV
但夏季怎麼會有雪448Please respect copyright.PENANAhW1uMfgvf9
令人加以反思448Please respect copyright.PENANAIqPlpegs9e
雪季不該有的畫面448Please respect copyright.PENANAjXWP1PN3hm
卻如那噠噠的馬蹄聲,走過歲月的容顏448Please respect copyright.PENANAoPXXU2m8qe
448Please respect copyright.PENANAHhIW6yvBhm
或許448Please respect copyright.PENANAwgv6PfohO0
不只這個夏季呼吸充滿著冰凍的雪氣448Please respect copyright.PENANADpnPSItmC4
即便是來年448Please respect copyright.PENANACJHgCYgUWU
之後的每一年都依然如此
448Please respect copyright.PENANAGp5uv8hryu
【2】 Nølav 挪拉夫 $3000
▶#102 戀夏
▶語評
情有幾分、愛有幾分,情愛一生只不過是貪戀癡嗔。448Please respect copyright.PENANAWNCAqnfdNn
如那鄭少秋歌詞裡的悲傷優柔,我仍沐浴在這片刻的悸夏蕩漾之間,正如首段那句夜星彌留著如你的容顏,這會令人更加拌佐孤寂的味道,與憶起漸行漸遠的那伊人。448Please respect copyright.PENANAzvWCogOTFu
448Please respect copyright.PENANAF8vGVobZ1X
我打江南走過,卻仍等候的是你季節裡的容顏如島國般夏風。448Please respect copyright.PENANAY4ByATszZX
猶如鹹濕海風,亦如她漆黑雙眸之間是否仍容下有你的一隅。448Please respect copyright.PENANARfRgzXKVoP
又如我吱吱的淺吻聲是美麗的衝動。448Please respect copyright.PENANAbkPiurFI9O
我不是歸人,是個過客。夏季仍舊是夏季。448Please respect copyright.PENANA2XWTLpQSqb
448Please respect copyright.PENANAbhWatgZiLT
景物依然,妳卻不然。448Please respect copyright.PENANAsotMBmzpVw
多年已逝,歲月靜好不在。448Please respect copyright.PENANAdtQoCalSte
更多的是此刻的情殤。448Please respect copyright.PENANARL6S7DMbfZ
448Please respect copyright.PENANAbwMHGuPSe2
而長生殿上楊玉環,幽怨了千年至今仍迴盪那長恨歌。448Please respect copyright.PENANAazQzH2Vbtu
又是否譬如我此時的心思呢?448Please respect copyright.PENANAfuwEjuFgZ0
春霧與東嶺再臨我又是否安然平靜呢?448Please respect copyright.PENANAVOv6CctFTH
448Please respect copyright.PENANAiFP04ZsNKo
448Please respect copyright.PENANAdCaJUMgEFR
夏季,這絢麗。448Please respect copyright.PENANASAqlTc6Don
如曇花一現的煙花。448Please respect copyright.PENANAtrLIQaRh63
就讓今夜重燃內心那苗火吧!
448Please respect copyright.PENANAJGblwl9Lmg
【3】霧散、秋殘 $2000
▶#12 夏
▶語評
詩詞中區分為序、插、終。448Please respect copyright.PENANAxbzuTiMUZd
同如起、轉、合三處意境。448Please respect copyright.PENANAlIRNoBkPsv
448Please respect copyright.PENANADn95jENT9P
以古詩破題,新詩釋義自己情意。448Please respect copyright.PENANAFbqSLHGnpF
448Please respect copyright.PENANAyfBcJF5FQc
六月、七月的芒夏荷香四溢,令人心曠神怡流連忘返。448Please respect copyright.PENANAvr2mr6aCQN
448Please respect copyright.PENANA3ZoVxtsUK0
卻不知這竟是否為大夢誰先覺,夢醒一場空呢?
448Please respect copyright.PENANARPOHOPx8kd
【4】宅米蟲子 $1500
▶#157 殘夏中秋(樂府詩)
▶語評
三生三世皆躲不過命運的輪迴448Please respect copyright.PENANAi9Uf9QGqIc
夢裡百花卻也沒妳的笑顏盛開448Please respect copyright.PENANAb4TWYrEgWC
448Please respect copyright.PENANAHIj7EHnbiI
細雨紛飛絕情綿綿448Please respect copyright.PENANA0UR3FaxsES
句中江畔相隨448Please respect copyright.PENANANTHIx2SpJQ
卻又未知天意是何在448Please respect copyright.PENANAQUPrVwQoF8
448Please respect copyright.PENANAEbgD9laDl3
即便是狂嘯 悲歌448Please respect copyright.PENANA6nr0ldV3kD
天上繁星 銀河448Please respect copyright.PENANALyOG3x8X2z
也僅是萬千世界的一粟448Please respect copyright.PENANAujiXMyGtB4
卻找不出能取掉你的其一448Please respect copyright.PENANAMPw05OAdXp
448Please respect copyright.PENANAX7k2A6Vqys
從回到閣樓448Please respect copyright.PENANA7zAKXkg4Lc
又再次漫步獨醉448Please respect copyright.PENANA4iiaIj6EsD
是心裡的牽掛令人陶醉448Please respect copyright.PENANA8FW8aMgLBM
還是物理的酒精使人沉醉448Please respect copyright.PENANAkKyFELwvpy
早已在你染塵衣袖分不清了448Please respect copyright.PENANAvQzqhHyxl0
448Please respect copyright.PENANAX0rHOmRzAj
黃泉彼岸花開,所引出的火照之路448Please respect copyright.PENANA0a0KQaejfa
也不過只是再次三世448Please respect copyright.PENANAAhOhm3zQOG
與妳再相逢的一場作戲罷了
448Please respect copyright.PENANAuqV4CdzecG
【5】 艾米莉 $1500
▶#3 仲夏夢華
▶語評
《仲夏夜之夢》A Midsummer Night's Dream源自於文藝復興文豪莎士比亞創作的浪漫喜劇。448Please respect copyright.PENANAX0GLP1cRTg
「仲夏夜」指的是一年之中白晝最長的夏至前後,相傳這一天晚上是精靈活躍的時刻,會有許多不可思議的奇幻事情發生。448Please respect copyright.PENANABrrSqt41wF
在PENANA的賴群組中求教 #闇夜星河 #星秤 兩位,得知原是精靈的惡作劇進而造成了這場愛恨糾葛的多角關係。448Please respect copyright.PENANAz9bJlHxYOf
(感謝科普。)448Please respect copyright.PENANAm2f7OgTRRb
448Please respect copyright.PENANAjd1AQrADMb
然而在十多年前求學階段,魚魚第一次聽到仲夏夜這個詞,並不在西洋古典所見到,反而是在《xxxholic》、《TSUBASA翼》這部早期神作中看到一詞;接續再次聽到是在我大學選修一堂《神話英語》的課程再次聽到。448Please respect copyright.PENANAccKHQ9wDsA
在高中時期,熱愛小說、動漫、電玩的我,這些是我課後逐漸成為作家(廢人)的養分來源,這些過往我們就暫且不再說明。448Please respect copyright.PENANAYYyZYg2GSy
448Please respect copyright.PENANAM9vPq7ISJW
AMYS大的新詩中,可以從簡樸日常的景物,如枝頭樹影、街道行人、沙灘繁星再到湖滔漣漪等,想像的到,這對戀人從初視、打傘、相依直至心底的共鳴。448Please respect copyright.PENANAPaPX9XOd92
簡單的美好,竟可以這般簡單。448Please respect copyright.PENANA2L4AJyBh0r
如梁靜茹<為我好>專輯內,像剝橘子這般簡單的幸福,可以唾手可得的滿足,也或許對某些人來說非常的困難。這些取決在於人的內心想法。448Please respect copyright.PENANAYAmCalGKdy
448Please respect copyright.PENANAWwTZGziUNu
仲夏之間少了點的是激情。448Please respect copyright.PENANAFYRtw3Je9g
仲夏之間多出些的是清淡。448Please respect copyright.PENANA6ZBh11iVGK
檯面下的暗流湧動,或許僅只是讀者所看不到的他們內心的洶湧。448Please respect copyright.PENANA1hxJbMsASV
448Please respect copyright.PENANAN4qSbyfPqr
而我只知,仲夏夢宴正演奏著一道清新的情愛。
448Please respect copyright.PENANAvyCkoLV2tI
【6】紫小絢 $1000
▶#51 花夢之無聲
▶語評
無語的花瓣,自小嚮往著自由綻放的藍天白雲,夏蟬與飛鳥的佐伴。曾經多麼遙想著那份追逐的渴望。
448Please respect copyright.PENANA8ZUSmOjpPA
與其說是羨慕,倒是幾分憤世嫉俗的意味所在。448Please respect copyright.PENANAPfe9lq9lbH
448Please respect copyright.PENANAl01Jd0jYIU
直至,雨過天青,才發覺原來自己仍舊擁有著雨滴的相擁。448Please respect copyright.PENANAwWdw0zUwc8
而我們又何必在意那天空藍呢?
448Please respect copyright.PENANAoFRskwjAAF
【7】宅米蟲子 $1000
▶#78 兩世笙花
▶語評
五月成熟的梅樹,透過初夏將其青梅韻開酒香該是多麼令人陶醉的畫面,而再多上幾株該採下的花枝,豈不樂乎?448Please respect copyright.PENANAqwq4kmZAo3
448Please respect copyright.PENANApapkUQSTAq
一抹玄龍劃破了淡薄的心防。448Please respect copyright.PENANAXQFQvlP7Nr
美景再好都無法平息,我倆的已然造成的誤解。448Please respect copyright.PENANAtnFrr5hwxX
白華如是一道流星墜落,墜落於重生與你的羈絆。448Please respect copyright.PENANADyutH3LzPy
448Please respect copyright.PENANAelITsCTAL1
而在反覆讀完了宅米蟲子<兩世笙花>後,想起了兩世輪迴的仙履奇緣,其中經典的一段台詞:「曾經有一段真摯的愛情在我面前,但我沒有去珍惜,直到失去了以後才後悔莫及,塵世間最痛苦的莫過於此......」448Please respect copyright.PENANApnOislTCxx
448Please respect copyright.PENANA96hT0NWZtf
造物弄人,倆世為人而今生卻與你交杯喝上壺合丞酒,可為多少輩子所修來的福分。448Please respect copyright.PENANAITskkOWY53
448Please respect copyright.PENANASQH9M80830
前世,已放下。448Please respect copyright.PENANAB4F4a3d1eR
今來,是泛起了一水漣漪。448Please respect copyright.PENANArKukLiatWw
448Please respect copyright.PENANA57GPUh9QG4
如不是身分所牽絆,我便放棄了所有與你共赴天崖海角。
448Please respect copyright.PENANAwVyC9XfYH1
【8】Nicolea $1000
▶#121 夏
▶語評
夏季田園的美好景色,映襯著一片祥和的欣欣向榮。448Please respect copyright.PENANAAN2oLe4N32
如同中學時期讀過了一首宋代曾做《頌》詩:448Please respect copyright.PENANAEPrRzVtpTV
「春有百花秋有月,夏有涼風冬有雪。若無閒事掛心頭,便是人間好時節。」448Please respect copyright.PENANAnfpNvSPbrr
448Please respect copyright.PENANAODeS3Zz1xQ
而這份難得的清幽,確實隨著年齡的增長。448Please respect copyright.PENANAPeyRY3O4mJ
越是得來不易。448Please respect copyright.PENANATRoqFPTyqV
448Please respect copyright.PENANApWlYFcus9T
田中牧童的玉笛繚繞著蟬聲裊裊。448Please respect copyright.PENANACzLUDoG3q3
這該是人生如何的片刻煙花璀璨。448Please respect copyright.PENANAXuRxObLDLD
只得盼望,人生還能再得這般閒情逸致。
448Please respect copyright.PENANAFx7hKsOhLG
【9】胡殷 $1000
▶#137 鳳凰花
▶語評
夏季雖為離別時節,卻也是人生成長的必經道路。448Please respect copyright.PENANAEzBLQuVKUb
眼淚是曖昧的催化劑,也是愛情的火藥。448Please respect copyright.PENANAR6HSqnAQ4i
人走茶未涼卻為下一次再相遇時而香。448Please respect copyright.PENANAWS7MK9XUSa
如我們未盡的緣分這般。448Please respect copyright.PENANABf9mcAr9JN
448Please respect copyright.PENANASwNlmKnJbg
448Please respect copyright.PENANAzfavagLr2U
相親相見知何日,此時此夜難為情。448Please respect copyright.PENANAjLFX19Z1bI
而我卻因這片花落,這道蟬聲所困惑。448Please respect copyright.PENANAbFLhEEMCLD
即便歷經了離別後夏風的迎撫,也無法抽離曾經的嬉戲。448Please respect copyright.PENANAzFQHE9v5WV
448Please respect copyright.PENANAr2tLWk9M5Q
448Please respect copyright.PENANAITMez1IUGi
妳與我是否曾有探險過那道友誼塹壁後的道路。448Please respect copyright.PENANAZdrwqgwxYS
我並不知情。448Please respect copyright.PENANAikyY7nUBkg
也不再無從得知。448Please respect copyright.PENANAUhQbMvZwFd
448Please respect copyright.PENANACpno3aWn4C
448Please respect copyright.PENANAtelZ9SlXrY
「隻身回望太匆匆,此生多少情與仇。448Please respect copyright.PENANA27xfPY2iz9
無邊絲雨細如愁,朝來寒雨幾回眸。」448Please respect copyright.PENANAhg2xMY5die
只得對空一嘆,老天給予了我們太短的夢醒時分。448Please respect copyright.PENANAyTLGt0CMJ8
此刻,我只擁著憶起最後鳳凰花下,妳牽起我的悸動,約定未忘的誓言罷了。448Please respect copyright.PENANAz3TJpJdcAf
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未來,我們還會有機會再見嗎?來世,我們還會續緣嗎?還是,我只個過客?
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【10】林賾流 $1000
▶#83 烈陽之影
▶語評
開篇以豔陽不可直視448Please respect copyright.PENANAwFeIIRG9Rf
寫出了真實的太陽給予人的強盛448Please respect copyright.PENANAm39e8qeQmY
並以柔和手法,側寫隨著時間經過,很快又能再見到的期待448Please respect copyright.PENANAe8Eqj1kulK
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而在萬里無雲的日常448Please respect copyright.PENANApakhOCx35E
大地照耀出了你的光芒448Please respect copyright.PENANAp4OcqDww5k
只想著短暫沒有你的存在448Please respect copyright.PENANAlaF0oSBrbe
與緬懷影子的並行448Please respect copyright.PENANAiRESfXQgSo
448Please respect copyright.PENANAyC2D6XwBMW
而東升初陽如一雙碩壯的大手448Please respect copyright.PENANA3VcLgavqX4
敲響了人群一日的序幕448Please respect copyright.PENANAbwsckOzND7
島與海448Please respect copyright.PENANApgLG5YaUe3
又為何區分你、我呢448Please respect copyright.PENANAGbjmbajbYL
如同我仰望著巍峨的山峰山鋒也正仰望著你448Please respect copyright.PENANAbEQYGd0EbW
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隨著四季的變化448Please respect copyright.PENANA7Jte8olm7L
夏季卻是此刻我影跡糾纏最久時448Please respect copyright.PENANAqjNmMJsLq5
直至,我忘卻了
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那個我
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【佳作1】 宅米蟲子 $1000
▶#170 夏祈杳杳
▶語評
本篇相對於前兩篇樂府詩448Please respect copyright.PENANA2yrbp8y3pz
詩意要較為薄弱448Please respect copyright.PENANAmpnLm7XgJS
但仍是一首很棒的古詩
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之所以我認為相對較弱的部分448Please respect copyright.PENANADsO75JmuCv
是其意境 與用詞的閱讀感448Please respect copyright.PENANAwZo4e5Pv8f
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【兩世笙花】、【殘夏中秋】中皆有一個顯眼的主題,但在【夏祈杳杳】中以花鋪景,望卻天上星闕流露出了一絲孤寂與深沉的感受。448Please respect copyright.PENANAaPk8zhaojW
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或許是【兩世笙花】的一抹玄龍劃破淡薄心防,思念太深。448Please respect copyright.PENANA8C1osMv2FA
也許是【殘夏中秋】的細雨紛飛絕情綿綿,景色太美。448Please respect copyright.PENANA8xQ7AUqkfp
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再嗑完了兩份深沉的憂愁後,重回到了【夏祈杳杳】,別有另外一種,希望來年梧桐花開,伊人會再來的期望。448Please respect copyright.PENANAjgPWF1Uhgp
更多是抱持著,能夠等待,並且那人是可以等得到的感受。448Please respect copyright.PENANAxgmwShZDLd
故此,以其作為比較下,兩者意境高低立判。448Please respect copyright.PENANAEpdrWuw2kg
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當然,宅米的詩無庸置疑放在蕉園上都是罕有敵手,皆為佳作。448Please respect copyright.PENANAaaSMdz9nzH
詩的優缺,僅憑讀者當下的心境去解讀。448Please respect copyright.PENANAdjlXKe2s64
每個人的角度皆為不同。448Please respect copyright.PENANAK1JtNVEC4u
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有人感受深刻,448Please respect copyright.PENANAcU1PXkly4d
有人無感,448Please respect copyright.PENANA79Y4rXE5UP
各有差異。448Please respect copyright.PENANAmXOhmlOwKc
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而我僅是那茫茫人海中,448Please respect copyright.PENANAurj4CMo77i
因其而感受到詩中情摯所渲染一名騷客。
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【佳作2】柏木桐柊 $1000
▶#58 也許我還會夢見你
▶語評
或許,她的影跡已成過往。窗櫺映入柔情似水,而匯聚成今夜的輾轉難眠。448Please respect copyright.PENANADdLfF77mZ8
我望不及妳眼底的星空漫步,而夏季裡還仍猶存妳餘溫。妳說的那些在我的世界又算得是什麼,留下的不過是在保險櫃裡的一抹笑意。我早已分不清,夏日我倆是否曾約定過,而捧上手中代表著祝福的黃玫瑰。448Please respect copyright.PENANA8s41dO4ADF
這不代表著我倆有過曾經。夏夜裡。獨自釀著夢中還偶然遇見的妳。448Please respect copyright.PENANAZ4z70fNjqC
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柏木桐柊文筆能力在短短數筆之下,運用了大量的暗喻及景色來比擬離情的傷感。醪、櫺兩字都是極其罕見的同義字,在詩句之間也靈活運用自己的特色
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【佳作3】 余軍 $1000
▶#139 七夕夜茫茫
▶語評
銀燭秋光冷畫屏,輕羅小扇撲流螢。448Please respect copyright.PENANAtcMpeGVJDH
天階夜色涼如水,臥看牽牛織女星。448Please respect copyright.PENANALAumnKsKgc
即便過了一千兩百年,我們仍可想見在宮中拿著圓扇揮舞著螢火蟲的宮女,是幾般哀愁著,在涼意襲人的季夏中,孤獨賞月。448Please respect copyright.PENANAB6YA56H7IF
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每每七夕時分總是容易遭受羨煞旁人的眷侶炸眼球。448Please respect copyright.PENANAulBFuEKL81
而這對於此刻孤寂的人,將變得更加孤寂萬分。448Please respect copyright.PENANASDN5FKCkMJ
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也許,他仍等待著茫茫人中那個她。448Please respect copyright.PENANAdMpv1KmmYJ
也許,他只不過是她生命中的過客。448Please respect copyright.PENANA3VNpHcuPXp
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偷偷遙望著,她的限時動態。448Please respect copyright.PENANA8wsaLLDDOY
悄悄祝福著,她的喜訊分享。448Please respect copyright.PENANAKsr25XhkMa
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七夕。448Please respect copyright.PENANApiwgDWJR00
是個情感放大百倍的敏感時節。448Please respect copyright.PENANAAd7fLS92gL
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在銀河伴隨著夜幕,總是能不經意地想起了某個她。448Please respect copyright.PENANAuzPzdDx6DY
或許,這才是那年盛夏,最難忘的約定了吧。
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【佳作4】虛冲 $1000
▶#228 仲夏夜之詩
▶語評
道長這首寫實敘事的打油詩448Please respect copyright.PENANASOGgYCqqRC
用道地口吻方式呈現448Please respect copyright.PENANABcC6L0VBmI
別有一番令人感同身受的味道448Please respect copyright.PENANA98gqD9CSSS
448Please respect copyright.PENANAOTaZjn34Iv
華麗的新詩固然有深沈448Please respect copyright.PENANA9cPFK630Wj
反覆咀嚼的口感448Please respect copyright.PENANAeZu3bImf6Q
但相較於打油詩448Please respect copyright.PENANAEClNVZ05j5
卻更能反映生活上的記趣448Please respect copyright.PENANACb9PbURogm
又或者應該說是上班藍領族的無奈吧!448Please respect copyright.PENANAC81kPyBhJj
448Please respect copyright.PENANAT1KQ3QyzXp
夏季沉悶、炙熱448Please respect copyright.PENANA3yRq8yBcA3
而很難讓人能對於煩躁事情448Please respect copyright.PENANAZZrVRBWbog
保持理性與忍耐448Please respect copyright.PENANAehMtXvsWzg
故此,我們應該適時調整自己步伐
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抬起頭來448Please respect copyright.PENANAa0xwCBjiwO
深深吸一口氣448Please respect copyright.PENANAmkUZ3I0lhs
靜下來看一下周遭的事物448Please respect copyright.PENANAqD6wEi0MZw
仍舊有著許多美好的細節
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【佳作5】胤宸 $1000
▶#53 那時風若來
▶語評
花自飄零水自流。448Please respect copyright.PENANALjmx0ag18H
一種相思,兩處閒愁。448Please respect copyright.PENANAIwugH1HpFi
此情無計可消除,才下眉頭,卻上心頭。448Please respect copyright.PENANAfhtCbNsdLU
同如<<李清照>>的一剪梅,而這西湖庭院盈滿的荷風又與易安居士筆下那殘荷,抽象暨不易捉摸的思想感情相較,誰更勝一籌呢?448Please respect copyright.PENANAnKG4QJI8ro
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獨賞荷葉,飄蕩於塘邊,一抹光照滑過一池漣漪。448Please respect copyright.PENANAjw3lsA6VI0
卻無心這番閒情逸致,內心仍未那尚未赴約的風而風,掛記了心頭,酒、荷、影皆為而動,卻因那三缺一的風美中不足。448Please respect copyright.PENANAhpMUpyGDG6
慧開禪師那經典一句「春有百花秋有月,夏有涼風冬有雪,若無閒事掛心頭,便是人間好時節。」 448Please respect copyright.PENANAsNDZwGfgL8
而其中「若無閒事在心頭」更是把心中沒有掛慮,便是好時節詮釋的淋漓盡致。448Please respect copyright.PENANAGYqv04Se7O
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人生在世,總為數不清的事情苦惱、煩躁,如果可真心放下了這些東西,簡直美麗得太過不要了。448Please respect copyright.PENANAUL4zq9hnnX
風,是否能在夏日再次吹拂。448Please respect copyright.PENANAW8cLFdXZL1
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我們仍未可知。448Please respect copyright.PENANA5RkL9jDw5z
但卻明白另一事,眼前這番美酒,如果可以那便今朝有酒今朝醉吧。
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【複評未上榜】
▶#55 薰夏誓約,詩綺永存 ▶#176 逃夏 ▶#194 致逝去的夏
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特殊獎項
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【最佳電腦繪畫獎】LiCh 阿立 $3000
▶#195 Sunny Come Back
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【最佳創作金曲獎】W.H. $3000
▶#212 夏之熱力學
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感謝贊助本場創作挑戰的各路金主
Penana小熊 15500P!!!!!!
伍拾陸 5600P!!
月亮熊 5000P!!
夏坂Moonight 5000P!!
InDeeeer 4000P!!
容霜 3000P!
谷映塵(員外) 2000P!
W.H. 2000P!
笑具 1500P!
知閒言炎 1000P!
筆墨談兵 1000P!
Sandy 1000P!
悲艾 1000P!
月月 800P!
宅米蟲子 起源 Nicolea 葉月晉久HS 墨云 巫尚益 100-200P
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本期創挑心得
(1)是的,由於這個評比斷斷續續,歷經了接近一年的時間,在時效性上早已失去了觀眾的熱誠,途中發現有些人已經退出PENANA。
其中我感到最惋惜的是夏坂Moonight老師,他在本期的3篇作品都是上乘的好文,由於我的拖延症,讓大家失去了能讀上更好作品的機會。
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(2)排名評比,是我的閱讀程度與個人感觀去排序,或許,你會覺得為何他的作品比我好呢?
這邊,我歡迎大家都能提出討論。
不希望反而因為排名,引發筆戰,那就失去了開心創作本身的意義了。
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(3)本期在#195樓LiCh 阿立大大的「Sunny Come Back」,是我開始創作挑戰以來,收到最大得驚喜了,我萬萬想不到竟然會有這麼精彩的投稿,讓我當下受寵若驚,太幸福了吧。
各位,如果喜歡歡迎到LICH大的粉絲專頁,拜讀他的作品。
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(4)分數上,本次我並沒有參用到「閱讀數」或是「喜歡數」這個數據,因為我怕會對於文筆上的排名失準,不過我還是先將我初評、複評的經過都貼上來給各位看看。
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(5)好啦,廢話有點多。
這邊希望大家都能去我得其他幾個創作挑戰看看。
如果你們喜歡的話,都幫我書籤起來吧!
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另外
已經開始,各位準備磨拳擦掌吧!!!!!!!!
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如果可以幫我打賞本篇(會當作下期獎金)
為下期創挑添上一份心力XD
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謝謝~448Please respect copyright.PENANARIyZvlPLoP