讀完了吞雲雀的《色彩戰爭》。131Please respect copyright.PENANAoSS4aRHKjQ
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簡單講一下我的想法。131Please respect copyright.PENANAaMaUypdArM
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首先是世界觀,本作融合了色彩與遊戲這兩項元素,光是第一個要素就顯得十分特別了,加上後者則更顯得獨樹一格,感覺挺有巧思的。131Please respect copyright.PENANAlBqIJ0yDIR
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而在色彩相關的敘述和設定上,也能感覺十分紮實,有一定的厚度,我挺喜歡這種感覺的。131Please respect copyright.PENANAyFn4Y7dBaE
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然後是角色。個人認為主要人物的描述顯得有些單薄,雖然能看見行文中加了表情、動作,但缺乏記憶點。131Please respect copyright.PENANAQKK1Q81DPa
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除了在設定上,可以構思某個角色的特別之處、反差,也能多講述一點角色的背景、想法,以便凸顯人物。131Please respect copyright.PENANAEBlCJeI8xu
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接著是行文。131Please respect copyright.PENANAbB3NXPPVMI
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本作的行文相當不錯,不過由於是第三人稱呈現,文字會顯得疏離。因此,可以多注意一下「主要視點」。131Please respect copyright.PENANAikOVq8oIe3
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設定某位角色(應該蠻多時候是安苒)作為中心,並且描述他內心的想法,並且觀察其他角色的行動,並推測他們各自的想法。131Please respect copyright.PENANAquGnuNG5QK
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如此一來,也會比較拉進角色跟讀者的距離。131Please respect copyright.PENANA66XNCqIMME
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另外,雲雀擅長描寫場景中的「物件」,我覺得很不錯,而相形之下,背景有時便顯得模糊,或許可以針對這點再多加描述。131Please respect copyright.PENANAQS9M0EYBsc
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至於臺詞方面,感覺蠻活潑且充滿幽默的,這點我覺得挺好的。131Please respect copyright.PENANAFN2SoVg6CZ
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大概是這樣。131Please respect copyright.PENANAfVifIsqdR9
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如果有興趣的話,歡迎各位朋友來讀讀看。131Please respect copyright.PENANA0ybofpInpV
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夜臨的書評區(不開放報名,我想寫才寫)
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【書評】《色彩戰爭》──色彩與遊戲交織的奇幻世界 原作:吞雲雀
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