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新手第一次寫小說求大大指導~
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崇宮天玥
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第一次寫小說可是都沒有什麼人看過,想知道自己的問題出在哪裡,想更進步!
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清歡
#2
嗨嗨,天玥你好~
剛剛拜讀完您的小說,發現有許多缺漏
1.小說名稱意義都差不多,無法給人新鮮感
2.有些故事內容沒有齊全,像有開頭但結局模糊
3.一直用動漫詞毫無感覺
4.小說題材類似,換換題材
5.格式怪怪的
以上,都是我的建議,如果內容惹到您的話請見諒^o^
7 years ago
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崇宮天玥
@巧克力, 格式應該怎麼寫呢?
7 years ago
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崇宮天玥
#3
其他的則是因為懶的更新在考慮要不要刪掉……
7 years ago
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清歡
#4
我先問一下,您在發佈後有沒有去看過呢?
7 years ago
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崇宮天玥
#5
有喔
7 years ago
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清歡
#6
您是用電腦版還是手機版呢?
7 years ago
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崇宮天玥
#7
手機
7 years ago
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清歡
#8
那就好,因為電腦版我不常用
你不覺得有些“-”符號都有多出來,形成多餘的格式嗎?(抱歉我有點強迫症,所以我格式絕對不會超出)
還有刪節號用太多,讓人覺得有種沮喪的感覺
拿您的小說例如:
我的名字……叫做月念做Light
讓人有種低沉的感覺
但如果改成:
我的名字,叫做月念做Light
就比較簡潔,讓人比較開朗的感覺
7 years ago
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崇宮天玥
#9
----主要是想作為場景的分隔線……是想要傳達緩慢說話的感覺如果不喜歡可以從下一篇改進((謝謝
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清歡
#10
如果是這樣的話,那我就無話可說了
最後跟你說一句:其實小說會越寫越順,寫多了文筆就自然了,最重要的是“多看小說”^ω^
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剛剛拜讀完您的小說,發現有許多缺漏
1.小說名稱意義都差不多,無法給人新鮮感
2.有些故事內容沒有齊全,像有開頭但結局模糊
3.一直用動漫詞毫無感覺
4.小說題材類似,換換題材
5.格式怪怪的
以上,都是我的建議,如果內容惹到您的話請見諒^o^
你不覺得有些“-”符號都有多出來,形成多餘的格式嗎?(抱歉我有點強迫症,所以我格式絕對不會超出)
還有刪節號用太多,讓人覺得有種沮喪的感覺
拿您的小說例如:
我的名字……叫做月念做Light
讓人有種低沉的感覺
但如果改成:
我的名字,叫做月念做Light
就比較簡潔,讓人比較開朗的感覺
最後跟你說一句:其實小說會越寫越順,寫多了文筆就自然了,最重要的是“多看小說”^ω^