Nice opening, I'd say. I noticed some minor grammar mistakes (but then again, don't we all do them?) but it's not too apparent where it's unbearable to read so you're fine.
Also, the scenes where you described about students and the disciplinary stuff kinda reminded me back in high school where things like that certainly happened. It's almost eerily similar haha but it's also good because it's pretty relatable. I also like those last sentences because it seemed like the focal point of the story where you brought the readers to the main point of the beginning of your piece. I thought that was good.
Haha. Actually that 'disciplinary' scenes is based on my experience. Except that I was one of the disciplinary committee students back in my school days. We could find many things a student normally don't bring to school. Tbh, I kinda enjoyed ransacking them bags.
Actuallu, this is my first (serious) story ever published on the net. So, would you point out where I did the grammar errors? I'd like to learn it for my future writing.
Also, the scenes where you described about students and the disciplinary stuff kinda reminded me back in high school where things like that certainly happened. It's almost eerily similar haha but it's also good because it's pretty relatable. I also like those last sentences because it seemed like the focal point of the story where you brought the readers to the main point of the beginning of your piece. I thought that was good.
Haha. Actually that 'disciplinary' scenes is based on my experience. Except that I was one of the disciplinary committee students back in my school days. We could find many things a student normally don't bring to school. Tbh, I kinda enjoyed ransacking them bags.
Actuallu, this is my first (serious) story ever published on the net. So, would you point out where I did the grammar errors? I'd like to learn it for my future writing.
And no problem, I'll try my best to help you out on it if I can :)