This is a good one. I like the way it was being narrated and the comments here and there made the walls of text quite enjoyable. I see that this story is heavily appointed for females, but that isn't the issue. The issue is that you put in side-characters that are quite complex for a one-shot but decided to never show them again. You could've prevented this by writihg their conversation in the part where they begin to suspect the MC. Also the thing that was bugging me was the lack of flags that made the MC fall for Bloody Cedric (that's what I decided on calling him if you don't mind). I mean, yeah he has some charming points but it doesn't give that much impact. Plus, the part where the MC was reading a novel in the book store, I thought she was itching for him to scurry off but instead /she/ asked him about where he came from etc.
nevertheless, it's a good and quite solid oneshot. Keep up the good work!
nevertheless, it's a good and quite solid oneshot. Keep up the good work!