So far I really like this story! Interesting opening; cant wait for the next chapter! A couple times though there are some tense switches from past to present or vice versa, so I would just advise to keep the tense consistent. And dialogue that follows up with “he/she said,” or any other verb should have a comma at the end and he/she should be lowercase.
Other than that though, the story is amazing and you did a good job! Awesome job Dre_young4, keep writing!
A couple times though there are some tense switches from past to present or vice versa, so I would just advise to keep the tense consistent.
And dialogue that follows up with “he/she said,” or any other verb should have a comma at the end and he/she should be lowercase.
Other than that though, the story is amazing and you did a good job! Awesome job Dre_young4, keep writing!
- Cheeto