I really love this chapter, by the way. The emotions are tangible and raw. It felt like it was literally exuding from the computer screen. I like it when you described Pa - you made him so alive even when he is dead. I like that about authors. You give that extra nudge in our imaginations to keep imagining things you are describing, to keep feeling the things you are making us feel.
Lizzy is really a teen and I could see that. She all has this teen angst that is really a commonplace among us teens (even when I am already 22 :D). You are bringing us into two different time eras, two different locations, two different dimensions of feeling. You also keeps the readers grounded in the sense that though the story is set on the early decades, I could still connect with it from the present. Also, the touch of jazz was genius. It was a small part but it brought more color to the chapter.
I think that the mansion and those folk that were sitting beside Lizzy was connected. If I'm wrong, correct me please. But I really hope they are somehow. And if that's the case, I would love to find out the connection. It's such a thrill, yeah?
A few verb tenses were amiss but it was fine. It sure is still a great piece of read. Hope that you won't get tired of me commenting. Kudos!
I loved the part where Elizabeth looks up at the sky and thinks about the moments with Pa during her childhood..and how Elizabeth hoped to bake some bread for the children and mother at the church:-) I love the story :')
I really love this chapter, by the way. The emotions are tangible and raw. It felt like it was literally exuding from the computer screen. I like it when you described Pa - you made him so alive even when he is dead. I like that about authors. You give that extra nudge in our imaginations to keep imagining things you are describing, to keep feeling the things you are making us feel.
Lizzy is really a teen and I could see that. She all has this teen angst that is really a commonplace among us teens (even when I am already 22 :D). You are bringing us into two different time eras, two different locations, two different dimensions of feeling. You also keeps the readers grounded in the sense that though the story is set on the early decades, I could still connect with it from the present. Also, the touch of jazz was genius. It was a small part but it brought more color to the chapter.
I think that the mansion and those folk that were sitting beside Lizzy was connected. If I'm wrong, correct me please. But I really hope they are somehow. And if that's the case, I would love to find out the connection. It's such a thrill, yeah?
A few verb tenses were amiss but it was fine. It sure is still a great piece of read. Hope that you won't get tired of me commenting. Kudos!