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Not to bad. I was already confused in the first two issues though, and I saw a decent amount of grammar issues that didn’t help much with my confusion. Transitioning between speakers, and places were also hard to follow. The last thing is it felt to fast paced for me, and didn’t have enough world setting detail.
However, don’t take this to hard. It’s your first book. It’s not that bad either. Just the main points that need work in future pieces is, speaking transitions, better detailing of the surrounding place(s), and grammar work. Otherwise you have the fundamentals for making great books down. Keep it up. 

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