Wow! Very good start! I'm already in love with it. I love dark stories in general. I just think they're so much more realistic and they are much more like how real life is. I like this first chapter a lot! It represents something hidden inside of all of us. That feeling that we can never really truly be loved. That we aren't capable of loving someone else. Not even ourselves. It reminds me of one of the main characters in my story. "Matt Walker" Love it so far! I will definitely keep reading. I also like the way you use your words. Very in-depth. Very....dramatic....moody....raw. I know I must sound stupid but when giving my opinions on things I like to go in-depth.