Lovely and dark, I feel as if it was a cinnamon candy, I get the color red here, very deep and warm. But maybe that's just the last story or my current picture doing this. Peppermint? Maybe? There is a long run-on sentence in the first paragraph that need to be split up though i do understand the cadence of the piece and would suggest semi-colons where you would like a soft pause rather than a comma when dealing with long sentences. Keep at it!
Keep at it!