Well, first thank you for that beautiful journey you lead us all in and thank you for the happy ending. I'm so glad that they ended up together, yet now I'm realising that this story is totally about you. I mean, there are too much coincidences for it to be a random choice.
The age gap, the fact that Jason is college student, that he's so nice and thoughtful (just like you), that he finally became a testing Engineer of the quality control section. All those elements are related to you. The only difference is that in the reality, the ending wasn't so happy... (Maybe was it the way you wanted things to end up with her?)
I think it's a beautiful things that you share such personal and intimate thing with your readers.
NEGATIVE POINTS :
The only fly in the ointment is the chaos. It's just my opinion, I want to underline that before going on.
The chaotic parts were not enough for me. I would've enjoy more wickedness from Kelly and Janet (even though I started loving Janet for her kindness) to make things more dramatic.
I think you should have make the issue between Emmett and Jason bigger so it could match Emmett's hatred for Jason. Like The ending was nice, but a bit cheesy especially between Carrie and Clarke (too quick for me) as well as for Janet and George.
OTHER THAN THESE, CONGRATULATIONS AND THANK YOU AGAIN! Did I tell you that I'm proud of you? (Yeah I think I did lol)
Anyway, I'm now looking forward to your next work, but you have to know that I'll be expecting a lot from you then.
Well, I did base bits and pieces of Jason off myself but not totally though lol Yeah, I would've loved it if things happened like that :) Well, thank you. I now know that it has made many people smile :)))
As much as I wanted to, I wanted it to be a precisely timed story. Not too long, not too short either; twists where you'd least expect them; occasional sprinkles of real-life humour. On the whole, I wanted it to be no more, no less :) I will elaborate the Clarrie and Geornet parts though :)) As for Emmett, I could've but I didn't want to keep J and Em apart anymore :P
Alright, alright. I'll try my best to make you all happy there too :D
@weirdguy96, I told it was long XD Only pieces? Pfff...Jason = Brian in so many aspects. Yeah, yeah I see. Yeah, but when I'm talking about Emmett, I was talking about the reason of his hatred for Jason. I just felt like the reason why he hated Jason so much was a bit...superficial. (I'm not sure if I make myself clearer here)
@Lavinia Scott, Well, you see, that may actually seem superficial but when you look into it, Emmett's a gangster so he values his pride and stuff too much to accept defeat in the hands of someone he didn't even know. So he was dying to get his revenge. Plus when I say gangster, I don't mean your average street thug. I mean more of an armed, dangerous criminal :))
(says the person that all her finnished loved stories end pretty crappily. Then again, I'm only talking about the ones written down. Mifia, Aridow and Charae all ended up happily).
Well, first thank you for that beautiful journey you lead us all in and thank you for the happy ending. I'm so glad that they ended up together, yet now I'm realising that this story is totally about you. I mean, there are too much coincidences for it to be a random choice.
The age gap, the fact that Jason is college student, that he's so nice and thoughtful (just like you), that he finally became a testing Engineer of the quality control section. All those elements are related to you. The only difference is that in the reality, the ending wasn't so happy... (Maybe was it the way you wanted things to end up with her?)
I think it's a beautiful things that you share such personal and intimate thing with your readers.
NEGATIVE POINTS :
The only fly in the ointment is the chaos. It's just my opinion, I want to underline that before going on.
The chaotic parts were not enough for me. I would've enjoy more wickedness from Kelly and Janet (even though I started loving Janet for her kindness) to make things more dramatic.
I think you should have make the issue between Emmett and Jason bigger so it could match Emmett's hatred for Jason. Like
The ending was nice, but a bit cheesy especially between Carrie and Clarke (too quick for me) as well as for Janet and George.
OTHER THAN THESE, CONGRATULATIONS AND THANK YOU AGAIN!
Did I tell you that I'm proud of you? (Yeah I think I did lol)
Anyway, I'm now looking forward to your next work, but you have to know that I'll be expecting a lot from you then.
Well, I did base bits and pieces of Jason off myself but not totally though lol
Yeah, I would've loved it if things happened like that :)
Well, thank you. I now know that it has made many people smile :)))
As much as I wanted to, I wanted it to be a precisely timed story. Not too long, not too short either; twists where you'd least expect them; occasional sprinkles of real-life humour. On the whole, I wanted it to be no more, no less :)
I will elaborate the Clarrie and Geornet parts though :))
As for Emmett, I could've but I didn't want to keep J and Em apart anymore :P
Alright, alright. I'll try my best to make you all happy there too :D
Only pieces? Pfff...Jason = Brian in so many aspects.
Yeah, yeah I see.
Yeah, but when I'm talking about Emmett, I was talking about the reason of his hatred for Jason. I just felt like the reason why he hated Jason so much was a bit...superficial. (I'm not sure if I make myself clearer here)
(says the person that all her finnished loved stories end pretty crappily. Then again, I'm only talking about the ones written down. Mifia, Aridow and Charae all ended up happily).
I am calm, just too happy at the ending. I have a HUGE smile on my face right now.
I would say they are OTP, but I already have Aridow, Charae and Klance
I would really the sequel, you know...