Okay. So this update was totally unexpected so my first reaction was Yay!!! Then that turned to WHAAATTT? I was highly anticipating the confrontation with Emily and i have to say that you pulled it off really well. But the breakup, seriously? I think i'll save the rage for the later chapters and let it all out at once. Sound good? Good job, though. I mean i can see where this is leading up to and how everything's gonna unfold. And frankly, i don't like it one bit.
So, that's it? They broke up, just like that? For Kelly? Pfff...poppycock! (I didn't swear ;) )
Kelly doesn't need to be healed, she deserves to be slapped and oh Jesus-Christ knows how much I'm willing to give her a very good one if she was real.
@weirdguy96, His aunt? She's as stupid as Emily is. Honestly, what kind of advice was that? Take care and heal Kelly? Is she crazy? Since when Jason is a doctor?
@weirdguy96, Honestly (nobody cares, I know it's just my point of view) if I was Jason's aunt, I would've told him to give his heart a break. He had a recent heartbreak (Kelly), Emily came into his life and healed his heart and now, his heart is broken again and the only way she found to "help" him was to tell him to go back to his former lover who had blown his heart to smithereens? It's clearly masochism.
@Lavinia Scott, I can't blindly argue back in favour of his aunt because you're kinda right :) But the thing is, that's what Jason would've done anyway, right?
@weirdguy96, I'm not sure (yet you're the writer so you know your character better than I do) but I noticed that Jason is quite a sensitive guy, a bit like you I must say ;) If Emily had cried in front of him, I'm not certain that he would've been able to handle her tears.
Anyway, the real matter is to know which woman is more important to him, is it Kelly or is it Emily. He can surely feel sorry for Kelly and stuff, but if he really does love Emily, he would've chose her not matter what.
Actually, the more I read your story the more I like Jason. I love his kindness and teh way he cares about his friends and family. He's not selfish even when he should be. It can be annoying sometimes, but somehow, I understand him 'cause I used to act the same way sometimes.
@Lavinia Scott, He should've chosen the one he loves but as far as everyone knows, that'd endanger Kelly's life and Jason can't afford that, right? Honestly this part was a bit tricky to write because I had to think from multiple perspectives of the readers and had to come up with the most realistic write up possible.
@weirdguy96, How could this endanger Kelly's life? Nobody cares about her so he shouldn't care either lol But I get what you mean.
Indeed, it was very tricky. I have to admit that I was a bit scared at first, that's why I said in my previous comments that I wasn't convinced by Kelly's acting skills. I mean, pretending to suffer from a very bad heartkbreak that leads you to have a temporary loss of memory or something like that sounded quite unrealistic, but the way you managed this part is very good. Yet, I need to read more to see exactly how you weave the web around the issue and give you a more complete critic regarding this particular part of the story.
@Lavinia Scott, Nobody cares? Let's see. Kelly's workaholic parents maybe out of the list. Emmett Jason Janet Emily (she's that naïve) Another boy who'll come later. (Suspense again? lol)
Hehe, guess I did a nice job then :D Yeah sure. The next chapter will be an equal to this one :D
I was highly anticipating the confrontation with Emily and i have to say that you pulled it off really well. But the breakup, seriously? I think i'll save the rage for the later chapters and let it all out at once. Sound good?
Good job, though. I mean i can see where this is leading up to and how everything's gonna unfold. And frankly, i don't like it one bit.
"I need to find a wall to bang my head on" ;)
The next update will be on my birthday. I will expect I'll get many bruises on my head that day. And the wall will be demolished
Oh no then, I'll have to be careful cause I don't wanna be responsible for broken walls lol.
Thank you,
*Mimicking Arnold Schwarzennegar's voice* I'll be back with an update :P
Pfff...poppycock! (I didn't swear ;) )
Kelly doesn't need to be healed, she deserves to be slapped and oh Jesus-Christ knows how much I'm willing to give her a very good one if she was real.
And Emily *rolling eyes* an idiot like I've never seen before. She didn't even let him enough time to talk.
Guess, it's partly her mistake that they've broken up, eh?
Yeah, she could've at least heard him out. *sigh* At least Jason has his aunt :)
If Emily had cried in front of him, I'm not certain that he would've been able to handle her tears.
Anyway, the real matter is to know which woman is more important to him, is it Kelly or is it Emily. He can surely feel sorry for Kelly and stuff, but if he really does love Emily, he would've chose her not matter what.
Actually, the more I read your story the more I like Jason. I love his kindness and teh way he cares about his friends and family. He's not selfish even when he should be. It can be annoying sometimes, but somehow, I understand him 'cause I used to act the same way sometimes.
But I get what you mean.
Indeed, it was very tricky. I have to admit that I was a bit scared at first, that's why I said in my previous comments that I wasn't convinced by Kelly's acting skills. I mean, pretending to suffer from a very bad heartkbreak that leads you to have a temporary loss of memory or something like that sounded quite unrealistic, but the way you managed this part is very good. Yet, I need to read more to see exactly how you weave the web around the issue and give you a more complete critic regarding this particular part of the story.
Emmett
Jason
Janet
Emily (she's that naïve)
Another boy who'll come later. (Suspense again? lol)
Hehe, guess I did a nice job then :D Yeah sure. The next chapter will be an equal to this one :D
I'm sure it's her ex-boyfriend or something.
You did a great job, indeed.
I would like to see more of Kelly's acting by the way (if you planned it for the next chapter of course, otherwise I'll wait)
Of course the readers will only get angry at her :D
Theory 1 by Lavinia Scott: Her ex-boyfriend. He comes only in the last chapter though XD
Last chapter? Are we so close to the end?