Just thought I'd let you know, she tells him that she's not a 'little miss' and that she's 19 and then later he asks how old she is and she says 17. Other than that this sounds like an interesting start to a story. Keep it up
Ah that's been pointed out to me. I was originally going to have her be 19 but changed the age to 17. I've revised that since then thank you for pointing that out here though, I haven't changed that yet