The touch of reality by discussing his after school job and classes is a nice touch; especially since you discuss in the same ethereal tone, makes their meeting sound more fated than happenstance which I'm guessing is the tone you are looking for. I only wish the entries were a tad longer
Thank you for noticing the tone of the story! The narrator is a bit of a romantic (to say the least), hence the tone. As for the length, it depended on how I was feeling while I was writing it because this style was a struggle for me. I know there are longer parts later on, however.