Man, Wren! That was cold. But, I guess I do see her point. This keeps reeling me in and like, the more I read it, the more I needed to know just what is she? Or if she's somehow linked to the dragons or Lorca. Anyways, I'm sure you've got some things planned XD
There's some grammar mistakes, I know that at this point it's probably annoying of me to point it out. But fear not! It's not unbearable, just some small and not too noticeable ones, but ones that could cause a little confusion still. At least to me, it kinda did - but I did catch up so that's fine. But your writing and storytelling is good and flowed nicely so keep it up!! :D
There's some grammar mistakes, I know that at this point it's probably annoying of me to point it out. But fear not! It's not unbearable, just some small and not too noticeable ones, but ones that could cause a little confusion still. At least to me, it kinda did - but I did catch up so that's fine. But your writing and storytelling is good and flowed nicely so keep it up!! :D