My reactions thus far since the beginning of this chapter:
1. Oh, Amon :/ (but at least it makes sense now how he is still wandering around and appearing before Fay and all - because of Persephone's help, which speaking of her, I like the friendship she has with Andromeda)
2. Cool, things are starting to make sense, with these vision appearing before Fay (and that conversation Andromeda had with Persephone)
3. Wow Eris has a son.
4. Nebiru. Yay, a conversation with his sister, Andromeda except...
5. What???? JUST WHO IS THIS PERSON THAT SUDDENLY TOOK OVER NEBIRU? Like, I'm just confused.
Is this a new character related to Andromeda (because he did mention sister, although I had doubts that maybe he was mocking her because he did just took over Nebiru's self). And then, she was aghast and infuriated at how he just did that because according to her, he was born in the family. I don't think he is Hades. Also, he mentioned he was reborn as a mortal unfortunately so unless I'm sorely under the wrong impression, isn't this the Andromeda in her human life, since the one who was in love with Cerberus was a Goddess, in the mysterious and translucent form as she was?
On another note, I have this sense that your writing is different that the previous chapter, perhaps because of influences from other writers cause that happens too. It's not a bad thing, just something that I noticed. And nothing wrong with the other chapters as well, I just thought it's nice because I think it feels right in certain places ( such as dialogues). The conversation and words used have that feel like they were in the right time period and I like how it alternates depending on who the characters are (the conversation of Andromeda with Cerberus, Persephone, and Nebiru).
That aside, some of the descriptions felt a bit unusual like your previous chapters (for example, just this paragraph of 'Inside, just one room..."). I'm not sure if this is a new influence or a tiny bit of grammatical error which I noticed a couple of it in this one. Nevertheless, lovely chapter as usual :)
1. Oh, Amon :/ (but at least it makes sense now how he is still wandering around and appearing before Fay and all - because of Persephone's help, which speaking of her, I like the friendship she has with Andromeda)
2. Cool, things are starting to make sense, with these vision appearing before Fay (and that conversation Andromeda had with Persephone)
3. Wow Eris has a son.
4. Nebiru. Yay, a conversation with his sister, Andromeda except...
5. What???? JUST WHO IS THIS PERSON THAT SUDDENLY TOOK OVER NEBIRU? Like, I'm just confused.
Is this a new character related to Andromeda (because he did mention sister, although I had doubts that maybe he was mocking her because he did just took over Nebiru's self). And then, she was aghast and infuriated at how he just did that because according to her, he was born in the family. I don't think he is Hades. Also, he mentioned he was reborn as a mortal unfortunately so unless I'm sorely under the wrong impression, isn't this the Andromeda in her human life, since the one who was in love with Cerberus was a Goddess, in the mysterious and translucent form as she was?
On another note, I have this sense that your writing is different that the previous chapter, perhaps because of influences from other writers cause that happens too. It's not a bad thing, just something that I noticed. And nothing wrong with the other chapters as well, I just thought it's nice because I think it feels right in certain places ( such as dialogues). The conversation and words used have that feel like they were in the right time period and I like how it alternates depending on who the characters are (the conversation of Andromeda with Cerberus, Persephone, and Nebiru).
That aside, some of the descriptions felt a bit unusual like your previous chapters (for example, just this paragraph of 'Inside, just one room..."). I'm not sure if this is a new influence or a tiny bit of grammatical error which I noticed a couple of it in this one. Nevertheless, lovely chapter as usual :)