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Blondemaverick
Better late than never, I say! I really liked this introduction chapter, but I feel its focus is very much on the characters, when it might benefit from some more world building on top of everything. [PROS] I love how you introduce the existence of each race--the fact that this universe is so varied and complex is just a delight! I also enjoyed your description of Ophelia's weapons--it really made me empathize with her quiet affections for her tools-of-trade. [CONS] Despite all that praise, I think that an explanation of the Tuatha de Dannan might be in order. Just a quick paragraph maybe--perhaps also a blurb on how significant her mother and father really are to their respective peoples. As I'm already familiar with contemporary history on the Seidh and de Dannon, I really enjoyed this story, but my friend reading with me was a little confused until I explained who and what they were as far as I knew. [VERDICT] I'm off to read some more! You've got me hooked, darn you!
6 年前回覆
thankyou for such a lovely isssue
6 年前回覆
Lunassandra Hughes
Thank you for commenting 😀
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