I think its an interesting beginning. Im should be I'm. Titles and Relations are capitalized. None of the characters are given any real trait? I wish they were because as of the first chapter none of them seem memorable which could cause trouble for the reader as they progress in the story. I'll continue on.
My apologies for that, however that's my style of writing. I don't mean it as a threat of any sort, I'm just stating it so sorry if I caused an offense