This is just a tip for you. To make this good story even better, your chapters lively, and easier to read it needs more dialog and paragraph spaces. Doing this will make the story feel more active and alive. So far this is the best fantasy book I've found so far in this app. Keep it up! :D
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I'm new on here and looking to make some friends, if you'd like to chat send a message. ☺