Wow... I can't believe I just read this whole thing in one sitting. I haven't been able to do that in a VERY long time, but I guess that's a testament to how well you tell a story.
First off, I just want to say hats off to you. This was phenomenal. PHENOMENAL! You kept everything that made the last two stories great, and then just nailed that formula with this one. I am honestly just blown away by how invested you were able to keep me with this story. It was extremely long, not going to lie, but the characters were just so well written, and there was just so much emotion in this. I just couldn't stop reading. Amazing work. Truly, just amazing.
I will say, I'm torn on the ending. It's extremely bittersweet, and completely took me off guard. With how wholesome these stories are, I honestly thought you were going to go with a much more happy ending. I won't lie, a part of me kind of wishes that you had, but at the same time, the ending you chose also makes sense. In other words, I like it but I also hate it (in a loving way, of course 😉).
Now, I would be remiss if I didn't bring up a couple of things. First things first, this story is way too long to post as one big chunk. I think this could be classified as a novella or novelette. As such, I would highly, highly recommend that you split this story into chapters. There are plenty of proper points to do this in that would make sense. I think you could snag more readers if you did this, as seeing a 122 minute reading time can be a turn off for a lot of people. Splitting the story into smaller, more digestible chapters would help people be more willing to invest time into this wonderful story.
The other point is the same one I have mentioned in your other stories. Grammar and misspellings. You write amazing descriptions, memorable characters, and intriguing plots. If you could edit your stories, and fix the grammatical and spelling errors, you would have a masterpiece on your hands. These three stories (in my own personal opinion) are worth putting that time into. I really do believe you have something special here.
All in all, this was a wild ride. I am just so impressed right now. Fantastic job! I can't believe this story doesn't have any other comments. That feels like a crime. However, that may have more to do with the 122 minute reading time. Either way, I just wanted to make sure you knew that you did well. You did VERY well. Bravo. 😊
Hey thank you so much for giving Casserole a read over! Im so glad the ending tortured you so much 😂
I wanted to go with one that was more open and not as expected. The initial was going to have Soup and Stew visiting Missy with Stew's child Missy called Casserole, but i opted for the one you read instead since i wanted Soup to be the sort of creature who was there for whoever needed him. Im just glad you got through it all!
I will have to go back and fix the edits and length. Honestly, i didn't check the read time, but i should have 😅 I will break it into chapters and try to withhold from making another story while doing that! I'll have to do the same with Soup and Stew too.
Again, grammer does need doing. I write these on my phone and forget to go back and proofread in my excitement to get it out there.
Again, thank you so much! I really look forward to your thoughts and it makes me really happy when you read my works 😁
@Lamington , Your welcome. You really do have a talent for writing wholesome stories. I know you like to write horror as well (me too), but I feel you really shine with stories like these. I'm glad to see that you broke this one up into chapters. I really do think this will help other readers stick with it. :)
First off, I just want to say hats off to you. This was phenomenal. PHENOMENAL! You kept everything that made the last two stories great, and then just nailed that formula with this one. I am honestly just blown away by how invested you were able to keep me with this story. It was extremely long, not going to lie, but the characters were just so well written, and there was just so much emotion in this. I just couldn't stop reading. Amazing work. Truly, just amazing.
I will say, I'm torn on the ending. It's extremely bittersweet, and completely took me off guard. With how wholesome these stories are, I honestly thought you were going to go with a much more happy ending. I won't lie, a part of me kind of wishes that you had, but at the same time, the ending you chose also makes sense. In other words, I like it but I also hate it (in a loving way, of course 😉).
Now, I would be remiss if I didn't bring up a couple of things. First things first, this story is way too long to post as one big chunk. I think this could be classified as a novella or novelette. As such, I would highly, highly recommend that you split this story into chapters. There are plenty of proper points to do this in that would make sense. I think you could snag more readers if you did this, as seeing a 122 minute reading time can be a turn off for a lot of people. Splitting the story into smaller, more digestible chapters would help people be more willing to invest time into this wonderful story.
The other point is the same one I have mentioned in your other stories. Grammar and misspellings. You write amazing descriptions, memorable characters, and intriguing plots. If you could edit your stories, and fix the grammatical and spelling errors, you would have a masterpiece on your hands. These three stories (in my own personal opinion) are worth putting that time into. I really do believe you have something special here.
All in all, this was a wild ride. I am just so impressed right now. Fantastic job! I can't believe this story doesn't have any other comments. That feels like a crime. However, that may have more to do with the 122 minute reading time. Either way, I just wanted to make sure you knew that you did well. You did VERY well. Bravo. 😊
Im so glad the ending tortured you so much 😂
I wanted to go with one that was more open and not as expected. The initial was going to have Soup and Stew visiting Missy with Stew's child Missy called Casserole, but i opted for the one you read instead since i wanted Soup to be the sort of creature who was there for whoever needed him.
Im just glad you got through it all!
I will have to go back and fix the edits and length.
Honestly, i didn't check the read time, but i should have 😅
I will break it into chapters and try to withhold from making another story while doing that!
I'll have to do the same with Soup and Stew too.
Again, grammer does need doing. I write these on my phone and forget to go back and proofread in my excitement to get it out there.
Again, thank you so much! I really look forward to your thoughts and it makes me really happy when you read my works 😁