This is an engaging piece of writing, however, it is fairly descriptive, and a lot of detail is dedicated to background elements while little is given around the main plot or purpose of the story. The characterization of the main character is strong, but I would recommend providing more depth in terms of interactions and dialogue between other characters and the main protagonist. Also, the story feels more like a retelling of something that happened than a full narrative. This is fine, but consider adding some stakes and an end goal for the protagonist to work towards.So grey I'm going to suggest some edits. Feel free to use them I f you find them suitable.
The story is great with best description ever. But to make it more perfect. Write dialogues seperately with quotation marks and make it bold. In this way it would be easier to read. Overall... Imma loving how the story is proceeding. 👍
But to make it more perfect. Write dialogues seperately with quotation marks and make it bold. In this way it would be easier to read.
Overall... Imma loving how the story is proceeding. 👍