One thing to note --- repetition. To be fair, journal entries aren't the most properly written, though there are some moments where it says, "beside me" too much (perhaps shorten it to "I felt someone beside me, and when I looked over, there was Daffodil" -- something in that vein). Or the word "usual," which is used a bit too closely in the same paragraph (perhaps instead of 'as usual' you can say 'as always' just to switch up the word choice.)
A long-term tip -- read over the letters and just see if there are any words that repeat too much. If so, find some synonyms as replacement. :)
Oh okay! I normally don't do a bunch of proofreading but thank you! Repetition seems to be an issue with some of these. Thank you though! I will look out for it! I think I've sort of fixed it for this issue
A long-term tip -- read over the letters and just see if there are any words that repeat too much. If so, find some synonyms as replacement. :)