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藏在酒裡的檸檬
先謝謝閱讀(▰˘◡˘▰)
先說楔子好了，其實當初寫這篇時只是覺得這樣好像很有爆點（？）就寫了。至於女主為什麼會對小女孩說那句話，其實有一部分妳說對了XD小語確實有點腹黑哈哈哈，加上當時她心情也不怎麼好，雖然女孩很可愛但當時的惡趣味蓋過了良心，就這麼脫口而出了ㅋㅋㅋㅋ

這篇確實是主打慢熱！！！畢竟還有家庭因素，加上故事前期小語的內心一直是處於封閉狀態，感覺如果強行曖昧也不太好。謝斯南本人也是很紳士（？）的類型，所以就導致了這種情況發生ㅎㅎ後面等小語的心打開後應該會快一點！

然後好開心能看出謝斯南嘴硬心軟的特質🥹🥹🥹重新修稿把男主角跟男主媽媽感情刻劃得細膩一點也是我的目標之一😚

然後我可以問問故事邏輯有沒有什麼不通順的地方嘛哈哈哈哈
5 months agoReply
小魚一尾
其實事件邏輯不通順的地方我個人認為沒有ww或者說我目前是感覺不到的，所以應該沒有（？）沒想到小語是腹黑XD
5 months agoReply
小魚一尾

@藏在酒裡的檸檬
5 months agoReply
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