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孤蒼寰
我以為諾索斯成功逃走了ww竟然被抓住了嗎～

光是利亞倫隸屬於索爾就已經夠詭異了……雖然線索還沒有連上。話說，前面說的王族背景裡有4個名字老皇帝羅伊，奈爾侯爵，小公主梅利爾，可憐的瓦爾斯特侯爵。其實你的意思是奈爾的封地是奈爾斯特吧？但這樣讀起來卻有點混亂呢
3 days agoReply
K.Versifier
我在去看一下，可能打錯字了。奈爾就是瓦爾斯特侯爵（前後設定出問題了，謝謝點出來，他後面被設定成親王了），瓦爾斯特是封地地名，麥沙利文在瓦爾斯特。利亞姆聽奈爾的命令和是因為他們兩個人的教會背景，但這個關係在這個故事里沒那麼重要（後面應該暗示過利亞姆和奈爾是同信仰），是我筆力不行，不知道怎麼潤物細無聲地穿插進去。
3 days agoReply
孤蒼寰
@K.Versifier,其實你已很好地用囚犯的對話來交代背景了，只是沒講清楚瓦爾斯特是封地而已
其他的背景和線索讓讀者隨著諾索斯的眼一起去看就好
15 hours agoReply
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