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白鈴蘤
早餐寫完，午餐就要開始啦！有興趣可以再去參加看看喔。 https://www.penana.com/story/95203/一個關於-午餐-的故事/issue/0
4 years agoReply
白鈴蘤 sponsored 20coins for Issue 6!
參與小獎勵，新年快樂！
4 years agoReply
白鈴蘤
第一段可能稍為有一點點長，可以考慮一下分段喔。然後，故事很自然溫馨，很有家庭味道，阿麻講話也想像得到那個調調，滿好的。

然後，謝謝你提供的食譜。真的有時候上班上課，沒有時間弄很久，這個粉漿也滿簡單的，我找天試試看好了-///-

標點也記得留意一下喔^^
4 years agoReply
夜菡
好，謝謝你的意見也很開心你喜歡
4 years agoReply
白鈴蘤
@夜菡,覺得會煮早餐的都好厲害，你很棒喔！
也祝你寫作順順利利
4 years agoReply
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