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星野維
這開頭很不錯呢。有簡單介紹背景以及塑造人物。

我沒有先看整理好的背景故事，因為我喜歡探索的感覺。
17 hours agoReply
晶月
我現在需要學習的是克制不要一次丟太多資訊出來，怕造成讀者疲勞，但是能在後面慢慢串成一條線
18 hours agoReply
比冥
嚶嚶嚶我一口氣丟超多，直接爛掉……
17 hours agoReply
星野維
這是很多設定類型作品的課題。
17 hours agoReply
大秦書說人
西蒙也太強了，能一個人挑掉黑幫家族曼德斯家族
能從血污判斷推理，厲害聰明
18 hours agoReply
晶月
謝謝，要自己想個梗還不能讓人覺得線索太直白，不然會顯得很蠢
18 hours agoReply
比冥
文筆好好！我也是新手卻完全寫不出這種感覺！
19 hours agoReply
晶月
多看多寫，就會奧力給。文筆都可以磨練！
18 hours agoReply
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