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南嶺笑笑生
你說的對，我剛問了蕉園前輩，現在用分隔線分開了，或許會好一點點......
8 months agoReply
燈凜
嗯……我想問這一章，前半部的「我」是指里花，後半部的「我」是指正季對嗎？
若是如此，一點小建議：用第三人稱視角敘述較不會搞混（例如前半部的「我說」改成「里花說」，後半部的「我說」改成「正季說」）
8 months agoReply
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