Really really good. It is getting suspenseful. The grammar and flow is a lot better in this chapter. I love your story, had gotten a bit busy and couldn't read but glad to be back at it. I really think you should look into grammarly, a free app that helps with writing on the internet. It does spell check and basic grammar. You can pay for more services if you want. I just started using it, so I am recommending it to writers. Also , after you edit your book, you should enter it into one of the writer's digest contest. Or you can enter a work you already have. Deadlines start in September, but they have alot of competitions annually with cash prizes so check it out! Google writers digest and grammarly :)