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Monos Alba
So this is what attraction is like!
Anyway, I think this was a good chapter. There are some repetitive words, I suggest changing up the diction a bit. Also, I agree that, if there's more character introductions, give us more info on them. I'm wondering how her prescriptions will play a part in this story. That's it for now.
10 years agoReply
EnnaStark
Ooh getting interesting. I enjoy the plot development. The descriptions are growing in style as the story progresses. Nicely done with this chapter, it was quite enjoyable. A few little grammatical errors, and maybe a little more expanding on the very beginning sentence about her friends. Maybe more about who they are and how they met or background or something if they're going to play a role in the story.
11 years agoReply
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