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「後山的小門也未關緊，門縫處灑進些許晨光，地面滿是濕漉漉的水漬與散亂的泥沙」，這個細節很關鍵，暗示了兇手（或野獸）的來去路徑，是個重要的線索。「雙手緊緊抓著褲管，聲音有些發抖」，但又堅持「我明明有幫...綁好繩子的」，這孩子的反應很真實，他到底是真的忘了還是被人陷害了？借兒童之口傳遞信息的方式略有風險。雖然逸翔的轉述很關鍵，但這種「小孩偷聽到大人秘密」的情節處理不好容易顯得刻意。
9 months agoReply
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承謙當下聽到別人質疑是他家的狗攻擊元誠致死，他的反應是緊張的，雖然在本作中他的性格善良不太會說謊，但緊張當下腦中的記憶就變得不是非常明確了。
至於小孩聽到大人秘密……逸翔聽到的也只是片段（他也不可能刻意靠近奕辰和心語兩人），他聽到的究竟跟後續劇情有無關係，到後半段就能見真章了。
9 months agoReply
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