Hello? Is this the psychiatrist? Yes, you see, I have a friend that needs help. Lots of it.
Wow, George! (I'm going to keep trying to guess your name.) I did not see that coming! Quite intriguing. I feel like we have the next Stephen King on our hands.
There are a couple grammatical errors in here, just so you know.
@Bengolong,I meant the overall storyline is done well.
The mistakes are kind of all over. When quoting someone, you need to make sure you have a comma/period/exclamation point/question mark after the quote, but before the closing quotation marks. Examples-
"He told me to do it," I said. "Can you believe that?" I asked. "He did it!" I exclaimed. "Now we are in for it." I took my phone out of my purse.
Also, just to have correct grammar, (and someone can correct me on this if I am wrong) when a personal pronoun is the subject of the sentence, it is "I" not "me" and is used last if there are other subjects.
@Bengolong, Well, Jason, I don't actually know. Why do we say "grab" and "grabbed" but not "spin" and "spinned". Don't ask me about the English language. It is what it is.
@Mia Flame, Yes. But they never show Trevor doing cannibalistic things. Its just implied. There's a scene where he's throwing up and he goes "Aughh! Never eat Indian... People"
Then there's a scene where someone turns down a bowl of his stew because there's an eyelid in it and he goes. "What's wrong with you? Its just an eyelid. Probably not even human"
@Mia Flame, There's a lot more to his character than being a cannibalistic, drug abusing, violent madman. He's loyal. He rarely if ever lies. And he cares about his friends.
@Bengolong,I was completely kidding. I don't know who either of those guys are. I looked them up and literally saw the first picture that came up. and yes, I have no problem judging fictional character.
Wow, George! (I'm going to keep trying to guess your name.) I did not see that coming! Quite intriguing. I feel like we have the next Stephen King on our hands.
There are a couple grammatical errors in here, just so you know.
But seriously, well done!
The mistakes are kind of all over. When quoting someone, you need to make sure you have a comma/period/exclamation point/question mark after the quote, but before the closing quotation marks. Examples-
"He told me to do it," I said.
"Can you believe that?" I asked.
"He did it!" I exclaimed.
"Now we are in for it." I took my phone out of my purse.
Also, just to have correct grammar, (and someone can correct me on this if I am wrong) when a personal pronoun is the subject of the sentence, it is "I" not "me" and is used last if there are other subjects.
CORRECT- I went to the beach.
WRONG- Me and John went to the beach.
CORRECT- John and I went to the beach.
Does that help?
And it is good to meet you, James Morgan Mcgill. I’m Florence Pugh.
And yes. I am that type of person. I stalk people every chance I get.
Why didn't I think of this before- Johnny!
Mr. Trevor, it's a pleasure. I'm Bella Swan.
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Then there's a scene where someone turns down a bowl of his stew because there's an eyelid in it and he goes. "What's wrong with you? Its just an eyelid. Probably not even human"
Then he eagerly starts chowing down on the stew.