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猴子李
哇靠... 真的變得很殘酷阿 該殺就真的一刀捅進去阿...

這兩個年輕人雖然成長速度迅速 但面對比自己層級高太多的對手還是沒輒呢..(雖然我相信經歷這生死關頭兩人肯定會有大成長)

不過後來林允龍救場又感受到...一山還有一山高阿
1 week agoReply
墨消然
是不是 跟我們年輕出社會一樣 現實不會因為我們年輕就開始退一步 反而更是殘酷 
1 week agoReply
小白
打戲越來越棒。
2 weeks agoReply
墨消然
校園跟外面的打鬥就不一樣了 這一章有沒有嚇到你
2 weeks agoReply
墨消然
謝謝提醒！短句這部分我確實有刻意用在打戲節奏上，想讓動作感明顯一點。不過你說滑下來會覺得有點長，這點我會注意，之後日常跟說明段會試著讓句子更順一些，打戲再保留比較短、比較快的節奏。感謝你看得這麼細！
1 month agoReply
星野維
有時候真的會感覺太長，要一直滑
2 weeks agoReply
墨消然
@星野維,好哦！我再注意 不要過長 
2 weeks agoReply
北海沙丁魚
大哥寫文的速度遠超我看文的速度啊。
發現用好多短句，滑下來感覺有點長（？
但因為打戲多所以稍微能理解。
1 month agoReply
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