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佚雨
感覺這篇與上一篇的「青年」可以直接以「捌」稱呼就好，不然會稍微有點混亂，以為還有捌以外的青年。
4 months agoReply
寧織
好的，謝謝佚雨的建議
4 months agoReply
佚雨
不客氣
文筆很不錯喔，有種既專業又不失真實感的氛圍。
不過文章中有一些多斷句或是漏字的地方，如果改一下的話會更好~
4 months agoReply
寧織
@佚雨,好的謝謝建議!會馬上改
4 months agoReply
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