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A.C thompson

thank you :)
im working on chapter two recently an will update soon, I will say It gets intense. The siblings will be tested and strained at some point or another, for new bonds develeop and its not just about them now, She will have to put her brother on one side who she loves dearly and her newfound friendships shes bonded with or depend on yet on the other and figure out whats best for them both, something she hasent done before. I think its really intriging, as it makes her grow as a person.

9 years agoReply

Fenyx DelSol

I think this is a great, catchy start. I can't wait to read more. If you need a hand with the editing, just let me know. I'm curious to see how the siblings' relationship(s) are strained or thriving. Good Luck!

9 years agoReply

It's a nice beginning which describes how the world came to what they are in the story. I imagine the world after the outbreak 9 years later in the story is like some dystopia land but if I'm wrong so I'm sorry. There's a minor error that I noticed like 'there' which I think is 'their' and 'to' - too. It occurred a few times in some sentences but I think the rest of it is fine and clear. A catching prologue :)

9 years agoReply

A.C thompson

yeah im still going through some minor edits thanks for pointing them out :) and yes it is like a dystopia land it is a small community but a very strict one and then they get stranded and put into yet another dystopia land only this time isolated so again they will be tested and they are force to fend for themselves.

9 years agoReply

@A.C thompson, Oh I see! Well I'm thinking of getting back to reading the rest of it when I can though so I'll be letting you know what my thoughts are on them :)

9 years agoReply

A.C thompson

@Emoddess,thanks I hope you do and enjoy. :) I update as soon as I can, I am curently editing chapter 2 and it's really suspenseful.I find it really cool to write about theses people who been to one bad place to another and how they overcome their circumstances. But it's not all bad for some surviours lean on eachoter because relationships form and loyalties shift as time goes on.

9 years agoReply

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