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Emoddess
It's a nice beginning which describes how the world came to what they are in the story. I imagine the world after the outbreak 9 years later in the story is like some dystopia land but if I'm wrong so I'm sorry. There's a minor error that I noticed like 'there' which I think is 'their' and 'to' - too. It occurred a few times in some sentences but I think the rest of it is fine and clear. A catching prologue :)
6 年前
A.C thompson
yeah im still going through some minor edits thanks for pointing them out :) and yes it is like a dystopia land it is a small community but a very strict one and then they get stranded and put into yet another dystopia land only this time isolated so again they will be tested and they are force to fend for themselves.
6 年前
Emoddess
@A.C thompson, Oh I see! Well I'm thinking of getting back to reading the rest of it when I can though so I'll be letting you know what my thoughts are on them :)
6 年前
A.C thompson
@Emoddess,thanks I hope you do and enjoy. :) I update as soon as I can, I am curently editing chapter 2 and it's really suspenseful.I find it really cool to write about theses people who been to one bad place to another and how they overcome their circumstances. But it's not all bad for some surviours lean on eachoter because relationships form and loyalties shift as time goes on.
6 年前
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