One thing I would like to note is the dialogue punctuation. When a character does an action in the middle of speaking, the dialogue can be ended with a period.
EX:
”[Dialogue].” She held up a hand. “[Dialogue.].”
I also caught an “I” somewhere even though the book is told in 3rd person. Or at least I think it is.
Aside from that, you do a great job of building suspense and keeping the plot moving without giving a dissertation as to what’s going on. So keep writing ^-^ These were just some light critiques.
Thank you so much! I'm just so used to writing in the first person I just thought I needed to expand a bit. Again, thank you for catching those small problems, I'll fix them right away!
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One thing I would like to note is the dialogue punctuation. When a character does an action in the middle of speaking, the dialogue can be ended with a period.
EX:
”[Dialogue].” She held up a hand. “[Dialogue.].”
I also caught an “I” somewhere even though the book is told in 3rd person. Or at least I think it is.
Aside from that, you do a great job of building suspense and keeping the plot moving without giving a dissertation as to what’s going on. So keep writing ^-^ These were just some light critiques.