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Really nice story, really had me scared, (I was like ‘whoa!’) the description was nice, and It kept the suspense 
5 years agoReply
BlossomBreeze27
thanks for the suggestions
5 years agoReply
urmom
Just some observations and suggestions:
Spacing and dialogues issues. After each new person speaks, starts a new line. Also, quotation marks should be at the starting and ending point of sentences. I saw a few issues there.
Be more descriptive!
After that, you're good! I'm editing your chapter now.
I liked it, just, errors quickly turn some people off from stories.
5 years agoReply
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