\ 《鬼地方》這本書就像是駛過河面的小船,在航行的過程中,幾條魚躍出水面,讓乘客嘖嘖稱奇,幾個有備而來的觀光客準確捕捉到那一瞬間按下快門,把這一刻永遠保存。小船靠岸,船過,水無痕,那些照片也被遺忘在記憶卡中,從人們的記憶中淡去。521Please respect copyright.PENANAyH6iSG5KAx
作者想寫一本鬼故事,想寫一本哭小說,想寫一本河馬的小說,想寫永靖,想寫家庭暴力,寫同性戀,寫政治,他想寫的東西好多好多,也成功的將這些雜七雜八的元素融合起來。521Please respect copyright.PENANAPtTCZHlsJM
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如何融合這些元素?521Please respect copyright.PENANAHwPok54GXm
解答就是全部敲碎。521Please respect copyright.PENANAiYGBVHY11r
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全部破碎,元素看起來就統一了。但是,每一篇支線故事分配到的篇幅仍然不多,無法鋪陳出深刻的故事,因此,船過水無痕,難以停駐在人類的記憶中。521Please respect copyright.PENANAbrg8fkXedh
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就連文字都毫不例外的破碎,引用開頭的一段話:「問號扯髮,割膚,很難答,於是不想答。閃避,羅織謊言,編織的身世有許多漏洞,前後矛盾,過往是一本寫壞的小說。」這些逗號與句點嚴重影響句子的節奏和結構,作為一本白話文小說,我認為,文筆有兩個境界,第一個境界是句子文法正確且能讓讀者順暢閱讀,第二個是文字具備吸引人的美感,而只要達到第一個境界,就是合格的文筆,能夠出版。而《鬼地方》前期文字破碎,因此我認定這不是合格的文筆,不過故事後期,文筆有好轉的跡象。521Please respect copyright.PENANAGdC1mAnMe7
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依照我的解讀,《鬼地方》一書呈現的是「那個年代,在那個地方的環境」,故事前期難免水土不服,許多古早比較嚴重的問題被呈現在眼前,這些事不應該發生,讓人感到噁心,這些部分——寫得很好。正是這些令人反胃的內容成功塑造出世界觀,作為一個小說家,噁心讀者正是必須去執行的事,很多情節必須要噁讀者才能完成,比如說劇情反轉時的爽感(舉例:川原礫《刀劍神域》),本書靠著噁讀者完成的就是世界觀的塑造,不過因為文筆不足,氛圍沒有成功營造出來。521Please respect copyright.PENANAZuaXAH5ZQ2
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總結來說,這本書有不少地方待加強。
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全部破碎,看起來就完整了——陳思宏《鬼地方》
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