短短的小說,首先稱讚的是動態感十足!109Please respect copyright.PENANAMv6Py7B3QV
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整篇也不需要記人名,只要知道這是發生在一處公園的事件即可,減低了我的腦容量,也讓我能更輕易地記住每個角色的特徵──畢竟就是他們名字嘛。109Please respect copyright.PENANAVZMogz8eTK
接著,整個作品真的很像特攝片。在閱讀時腦子裡滿滿的都是穿著戰衣的傢伙在戰鬥的場面。再加上顏色飛來飛去,七彩斑斕的特效便自腦海中奔馳出來,很酷炫,我很喜歡。109Please respect copyright.PENANAFG0vEZPT5s
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最後大夥一同出動的畫面則是讓我想到《復仇者聯盟:終局之戰》最後的集結場面,所有人齊聚一心只為對抗病毒的場面,讀來不免覺得有些激動!109Please respect copyright.PENANA4a9zwhsg52
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然後是些小小建議。109Please respect copyright.PENANAjlpnkLjOCc
每個動作都描寫的好處是很細膩,能隨著文句觀賞劇情進展。但看久了很容易疲勞,當從文句中的氛圍脫離後,便覺得有些拖沓。109Please respect copyright.PENANAEgJHQ43JqH
如果能稍微把字句精煉一些,考慮給讀者想像空間的話可能會更好?抑或把一些章節刪減結合,閱讀起來會更流暢。109Please respect copyright.PENANAWBF5WZALmi
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再承上面齊聚一心的場面,雖說讀起來有些激動,但也僅是有些而已,如果要表現出「大夥一同對抗病毒」的激昂感,前期的鋪陳可能稍嫌不足。109Please respect copyright.PENANAomFUuI7eHu
前段可以再添加更多當時多麼人聲鼎沸,現今卻是空無一人的對比感。或是些人們因病毒而受苦的剪影之類。讓最後的大高潮能更有團結齊心的氣氛。109Please respect copyright.PENANAhiFmqhsktu
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在打書評時也想著,或許這能當份防疫的廣告文案,作成小短片拿去當防疫宣傳,可能還比打成小說好些。109Please respect copyright.PENANAF7UxkMVa4y
可以參考像是HowHow的影片,那種一本正經說幹話的調性跟《抗體戰記》有些神似。109Please respect copyright.PENANA2irbLAdngd
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哎,最後扯到短片上了。109Please respect copyright.PENANApkjEgVFJCN
總之《抗體戰記》對時事關注、疫苗科普等有所涉及,整篇打打打也相當輕鬆有趣。109Please respect copyright.PENANAqMETojht5T
如果恰逢有人喜歡看特攝片,又對時事小說有興趣,我便會推薦給他。109Please respect copyright.PENANAPQHVIC8bdl
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以上。109Please respect copyright.PENANALPnb7QAm4C
短短評論,不喜便刪。109Please respect copyright.PENANAajNrw1RyYu
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原文連結:109Please respect copyright.PENANAbOmS1wL1oP
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【是評論】《抗體戰記》──眾人齊心對抗病毒的特攝風短文
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