短短的小說,首先稱讚的是動態感十足!116Please respect copyright.PENANAm8adxPeboV
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整篇也不需要記人名,只要知道這是發生在一處公園的事件即可,減低了我的腦容量,也讓我能更輕易地記住每個角色的特徵──畢竟就是他們名字嘛。116Please respect copyright.PENANADaKVp0Z7mo
接著,整個作品真的很像特攝片。在閱讀時腦子裡滿滿的都是穿著戰衣的傢伙在戰鬥的場面。再加上顏色飛來飛去,七彩斑斕的特效便自腦海中奔馳出來,很酷炫,我很喜歡。116Please respect copyright.PENANAUAw0gZujhJ
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最後大夥一同出動的畫面則是讓我想到《復仇者聯盟:終局之戰》最後的集結場面,所有人齊聚一心只為對抗病毒的場面,讀來不免覺得有些激動!116Please respect copyright.PENANAUrhHzN0kKy
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然後是些小小建議。116Please respect copyright.PENANAcUljJOzMPn
每個動作都描寫的好處是很細膩,能隨著文句觀賞劇情進展。但看久了很容易疲勞,當從文句中的氛圍脫離後,便覺得有些拖沓。116Please respect copyright.PENANAR2tU0FtpmI
如果能稍微把字句精煉一些,考慮給讀者想像空間的話可能會更好?抑或把一些章節刪減結合,閱讀起來會更流暢。116Please respect copyright.PENANAYNAlxI3Fej
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再承上面齊聚一心的場面,雖說讀起來有些激動,但也僅是有些而已,如果要表現出「大夥一同對抗病毒」的激昂感,前期的鋪陳可能稍嫌不足。116Please respect copyright.PENANAyhGUPfPaGw
前段可以再添加更多當時多麼人聲鼎沸,現今卻是空無一人的對比感。或是些人們因病毒而受苦的剪影之類。讓最後的大高潮能更有團結齊心的氣氛。116Please respect copyright.PENANADCKxPs5XP5
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在打書評時也想著,或許這能當份防疫的廣告文案,作成小短片拿去當防疫宣傳,可能還比打成小說好些。116Please respect copyright.PENANAvFwXmnyiMv
可以參考像是HowHow的影片,那種一本正經說幹話的調性跟《抗體戰記》有些神似。116Please respect copyright.PENANAuqtHYZ8rMv
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哎,最後扯到短片上了。116Please respect copyright.PENANACA1GZmuPRI
總之《抗體戰記》對時事關注、疫苗科普等有所涉及,整篇打打打也相當輕鬆有趣。116Please respect copyright.PENANAkOwvdP4PUD
如果恰逢有人喜歡看特攝片,又對時事小說有興趣,我便會推薦給他。116Please respect copyright.PENANA67h3TTdzB4
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以上。116Please respect copyright.PENANAdEggCYMqGX
短短評論,不喜便刪。116Please respect copyright.PENANAK9PwXyxX9E
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原文連結:116Please respect copyright.PENANAdFJr3c3cFf
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ISSUE #3
【是評論】《抗體戰記》──眾人齊心對抗病毒的特攝風短文
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