可惜文中太多「我」了,如果可以換寫法會更好。最後一句的處理比較好,不然就只是普通的夢境。對於怪物沒有比較深入描繪,所以感覺不恐怖。繼續加油吧,希望潛水中~生活順利。78Please respect copyright.PENANAGkmeE84uzz
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我想在其他平台發,我嘗試不要用創挑。78Please respect copyright.PENANAqHDQjWA3g3
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哪裡?那裡?78Please respect copyright.PENANA6Mg7XTdNF1
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生命,越拖越短,越拖越乏。78Please respect copyright.PENANAhvMKKT3YMV
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