〈好煩躁!〉
「好煩躁!」他打開煙盒「嘖!」一根煙都沒有了!499Please respect copyright.PENANASV3TjWCk7s
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啊啊啊,是她吧!499Please respect copyright.PENANAHXxdLrMr6Y
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「嘖!」煙盒被捏緊,可還是制止不了不知所措的手,「嘖!現在要幹嘛?什麼都不想幹……」499Please respect copyright.PENANAzVopIhWijQ
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他蹲了下來,搔搔後腦,搔搔他那已經沒幾根的頭髮……「唉,回家吧。」499Please respect copyright.PENANAzKnGjID5pN
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「卡嚓!」「你吃了嗎?」從廚房的聲音傳來客廳。499Please respect copyright.PENANAezbTHB6duH
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「怎麼可能吃了?一天才給我十塊錢。」499Please respect copyright.PENANAPD8uYbCPxn
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不滿的眼神瞄了一下,桌上靜靜躺著一根煙。499Please respect copyright.PENANAdo2DSbmMdA
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焦躁的感覺越來越盛,可他始終沒拿起那根煙。499Please respect copyright.PENANAnisqAQ2sYq
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「嘖!幹嘛又把女兒的照片亂放。」499Please respect copyright.PENANAytBKEv1gwt
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注:文中的十塊錢是馬幣499Please respect copyright.PENANAWOFISTx4RM
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〈第一時間〉499Please respect copyright.PENANAVCQg18JyDe
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「巧克力、煙和林雯欣,你選哪一個?」環繞頸脖的手光潔白皙,連指甲都保養護理,閃著健康的光澤。499Please respect copyright.PENANAIst83aDx57
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「那還用說,當然是煙……」499Please respect copyright.PENANAUKQgBxFR0W
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「的隔壁林雯欣。」一口煙味的熱吻,倒增添了放蕩不羈的野性。499Please respect copyright.PENANABx26TOUlH2
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十年後……499Please respect copyright.PENANAJr7LWFUq0D
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「拿去。」有些細紋的手但仍掩不住尚算白皙的肌膚。499Please respect copyright.PENANAQsNRlvNHWu
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「怎麼你買兩包?」男人接下疑惑的兩包煙,不是老叫他戒嗎?499Please respect copyright.PENANA0Bnayfrz96
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「啪!啪!」女人把兩包煙都倒出來還全點上了。499Please respect copyright.PENANAVUJRINYWpV
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「咳!咳!」男人忍不住「太嗆了!」499Please respect copyright.PENANAOhwGqM8BdL
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「咳咳……這就是你的林雯欣,咳咳……」生氣的嘴撅了起來……「對不起。」一下又扁了下去……仍然是十年的一口煙味,仍然是第一時間的選擇,只是第一時間。499Please respect copyright.PENANAwkiPP6PB1E
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100 篇回饋活動創挑鏈接:〈省錢的方法〉499Please respect copyright.PENANAcHwoHqd2QH
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給 綠茶老司機 的話:499Please respect copyright.PENANANtCnCUk2jx
我覺得〈省錢的方法〉 這篇挺好的,有老夫老妻之間的幽默。我記得我看的時候還蠻期待結尾的,結果的確有給到我驚喜啊,也許是因為我懂這個幽默吧,不過這個梗也還挺不錯的,讀者應該很容易領會。499Please respect copyright.PENANAdBfdxEbNkz
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這篇的精髓我覺得是老夫老妻之間的互動,所以我創作的時候本想朝著老夫老妻去寫。可是這兩天我在糾結要不要更新《賣豆腐的阿公》,因為這樣的速度看來,可能我要花將近兩個月才能完成這個創挑回饋,不知道《阿公》的讀者能不能等?然後也不知道這篇該怎麼寫,兩邊都不懂怎麼寫,我就覺得有些煩躁。於是上面第一篇〈好煩躁!〉我就把心情寫下去了,對應戒菸時那種不知所措,做什麼都不對的煩躁。但是我並不滿意,覺得沒什麼特別,於是又想寫一篇有老夫老妻味道的文。499Please respect copyright.PENANA3NjJllKQ93
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因為我在吃著巧克力,就有了那句開頭。這是模擬一句浪漫的話「coffee,tea or me」,所以就描繪了一對情侶還在談戀愛時的浪漫。然後十年後,本來還是想著寫老夫老妻的變化,但是寫著寫著這兩人還是有浪漫的愛情,不過還是有諷刺意味。於是這篇就不像〈省錢的方法〉那樣的老夫老妻了。但我滿意了,所以也就沒再繼續寫「老夫老妻」了。499Please respect copyright.PENANAo0qbDt0zFZ
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謝謝 綠茶老司機 的參與,希望我們的文也像「老夫老妻」一樣幽默。499Please respect copyright.PENANAH3ysTXZMef
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綠茶老司機 現在都是短篇小說的作品,有些短篇裡頭會穿插一些鼓勵人心的話,有些像〈省錢的方法〉 一樣幽默的風格,我這裡列下稍長一點的,喜歡看短篇小說的朋友可以去看看:499Please respect copyright.PENANATFVmQfUE9X
【短篇小說】不快樂小姐499Please respect copyright.PENANA76eHd0K6wM
【短篇小說】花房姑娘499Please respect copyright.PENANAofbEAkWKSj
【短篇小說】陪伴機器人499Please respect copyright.PENANAnXgpZ4kPuf
【短篇小說】渣男養成計劃499Please respect copyright.PENANAbDr7RApvOw
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