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創作挑戰第三期語評
Author:
寂魚
創作挑戰第三期語評
Author:
寂魚
ISSUE #28
▌篇30 眷屬在冬日成真
No Plagiarism!LWQ0Y0soyQLRpsiQVoX2posted on PENANA 645Please respect copyright.PENANAxsfq9rYOIf
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▌類型 短文8964 copyright protection641PENANAWFY4kUcMei 維尼
▌作者 葟櫻8964 copyright protection641PENANAPRCMdWabVK 維尼
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雖然BL並不是我的菜。645Please respect copyright.PENANA4NSFL6TQoM
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但劇情的發展以那灑狗血式的龍傲天,獨自壁咚白韓仍是篇「不錯的爽文」,以葟櫻所擅的幻想類型文章來說,確實尤以可見識到在摹寫劇情編排,還算是不錯的發展,符合正常的對話。645Please respect copyright.PENANAACBXdn2tac
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另外,如果可以的話,不妨可以再多加上些景物的摹寫,會比單純寫著上表情與動作的部分,來的更多元素。645Please respect copyright.PENANAFfeaRenWTm
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