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一直不敢在penana碰長篇小說,是因為一讀下去,時間就亂了。8964 copyright protection446PENANAuSpIRvXHdu 維尼
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我啊,一部已完結的小說若一天讀不完,是不想睡也睡不著的。有時有些大作,一天真讀不完,就算睡著了,三兩小時後還是會醒過來然後想繼續讀。8964 copyright protection446PENANAGkeiEhIJtV 維尼
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第一次發現自己這壞習慣,是小時候讀三國演義,不小心把身體累壞了。所以,我只好配合生活規劃來讀小說呢!有些長篇的,只待放假才會碰。剛好這星期較為空閒,終於有機會碰長篇了。所以讀了penana名作家「楓成」的著名長篇《遊戲之道》。8964 copyright protection446PENANAyIn5k3IodH 維尼
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最初有想過,寫名作的讀後感,會面對怎樣的壓力?8964 copyright protection446PENANAjHWsQbRIO0 維尼
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後來想想,中文老師不也叫我寫過《紅樓夢》的讀後感?就當是差不多的東西去寫吧!8964 copyright protection446PENANAsc9srcjov9 維尼
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讀後感.讀者代入感篇8964 copyright protection446PENANA6cNdliL7ar 維尼
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全浸沉式VRMMORPG,一直是日本輕小說界的大熱門之一。像《刀劍神域》、《怕痛點滿防禦力》等,只要基本功做得好,這類主題都會很好看。原因是,太多人有MMORPG遊戲的經驗了!這些遊戲,畫面越做越迫真,就是為了提升玩家的代入感。而我們玩家,也會幻想自己是遊戲內的那隻角色。可以說,我們本來就有投入這種世界的欲望。8964 copyright protection446PENANAAUPd9rn2Es 維尼
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因此,像《刀》的桐人,《怕》的梅普露等,都是年輕又可愛/帥氣的角色,讓讀者代入。至少,我看到不少十來歲的少年能代入桐人。但廿來歲的人,或者會覺得桐人雖然帥,但有點幼稚。8964 copyright protection446PENANAyvr8SalqUQ 維尼
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《遊戲之道》與《刀》和《怕》,在讀者代入主角方面,有異曲同工之妙,但更進一步。《遊》的主角遊龍,明明是成熟、細心而且深思熟慮的人,但是,「如果耍帥可以解決的問題,遊龍一定會一本正經地耍帥」 。這樣的《遊》,可以令代入遊龍的讀者的年齡範圍提升了。至少,我雖是「覺得桐人有點幼稚」的年紀,但還是覺得遊戲很帥。8964 copyright protection446PENANAl5TYmo4SV2 維尼
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當讀者認為「自己就是主角」,或對某個角色有投入感,那麼主角遇上多少奇遇也會覺得很合理。所以,這個代入感很重要。像遊龍最終的官配女主角,她的性格和角色設定,我不太熟悉,所以讀著她的奇遇總有種不對勁的感覺。而遊龍他啊,成功讓我這讀者代入了,那麼他的奇遇有多奇,感情上都是能接受的。8964 copyright protection446PENANAcdrOw68JAY 維尼
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讀後感.長篇奇幻寫作技巧篇8964 copyright protection446PENANAoc5uTDPpAX 維尼
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對於《遊》的鏡頭焦點,一直都是遊龍。但遊龍身處的世界與格局,就像鑽頭一樣,螺旋式的,從低到高;從只看到一面的風景,到最後看到世界的全部。8964 copyright protection446PENANArZQx6YWzOI 維尼
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像鑽頭一樣。8964 copyright protection446PENANAWaEHDyB6aj 維尼
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在動漫界,鑽頭的聯想是甚麼?8964 copyright protection446PENANA5m2tnR5Te9 維尼
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《天元突破》8964 copyright protection446PENANADtK5A8mH7b 維尼
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當然,《天》與《遊》的設定、格局、內容等等都完全不同。但兩部作品,處理「主角與世界」的技巧上,卻是英雄所見略同。當然,不是每一個讀者都看過天元突破。所以,我畫了數張示意圖並貼出來。8964 copyright protection446PENANAbLIbxMd7iT 維尼
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這個處理手法,有好處也有局限性。8964 copyright protection446PENANArDNYphWWLw 維尼
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好處是只要每一層的故事鋪排都很好看,讀者的忠誠度會很高,而且人物和伏筆的螺旋重用下,讀者對作品的每個角色都會有深刻的記憶與感情。8964 copyright protection446PENANA38GAJScEn9 維尼
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局限性是,作者最大也只可以玩掉整個世界,而且這類作品的確有「結局是玩掉那個世界」的趨勢。8964 copyright protection446PENANAaVKBrrCNmV 維尼
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最後,《天》是這個宇宙的對決,而《遊》,主角最終跳出那個世界,走進「萬千世界」裡。8964 copyright protection446PENANAxaMSgSFQBD 維尼
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讀後感.角色及感情篇8964 copyright protection446PENANAFJjlbpQpAq 維尼
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首先,這篇的愛情線很弱。8964 copyright protection446PENANAAyLruAYFEh 維尼
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如果必須要說,這篇作品的愛情,是「沒有描寫過程」,「只有結果」的。8964 copyright protection446PENANAVLA6E2YNlv 維尼
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喔,一對獸使結婚了。8964 copyright protection446PENANAlSgAO4Oo6x 維尼
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喔,一對名坦結婚了。8964 copyright protection446PENANAP42Zxap3l9 維尼
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喔,誰跟誰結婚了。8964 copyright protection446PENANAB0h2ZnkNyF 維尼
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他們的婚後相處,戰場上的情感交流,婚後的生活,都是有的。但為甚麼他們會走在一起?不知道。8964 copyright protection446PENANAcufdAshlhY 維尼
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若果有描述,至少還能評論說好或不好。但若是「完全跳過不寫」,「一字不提」,那應該是作者的選擇了。8964 copyright protection446PENANAj6eUd2iJsc 維尼
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其次,這篇的人物交流線,借用了大量「名稱梗」。8964 copyright protection446PENANAYpLDX5Or1h 維尼
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由於《遊》是mmorpg,角色都是要改名的。因此,有些梗在角色名稱上已破了梗,或者讀者能預視「作者應該會寫一段小故事給TA」。8964 copyright protection446PENANAfO1BfDJOKR 維尼
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而且,你看到某些名字,便能猜到TA的性格。例如,你覺得《遊》裡的「周瑜」是怎樣的性格?8964 copyright protection446PENANACZHjkR0Lyu 維尼
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你是不會猜錯的!8964 copyright protection446PENANAUzFaYGIrsn 維尼
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這做法的好處,是極大量,極大幅度地節省了角色塑造的時間。要知道一個網遊,著名公會十數個,角色一大把。假設我今天要寫個橋上壂後的劇情,與其塑造一個角色,又要花時間描述,不如索性叫他「張飛」?8964 copyright protection446PENANAeyGkVcen5i 維尼
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這種做法,有利有弊。利處是快,弊處自是不深刻。8964 copyright protection446PENANA8ZtmgXytRv 維尼
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但由於劇情架構上,《遊》的角色重覆又重覆的出現,也有現實的部分。這做法的弊處,可以減到最低。8964 copyright protection446PENANACrJvTwURE2 維尼
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讀後感.綜合負面感想篇8964 copyright protection446PENANAkkno1LZERS 維尼
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我很真誠地寫,希望別收到刀片。8964 copyright protection446PENANAxaPp77oq48 維尼
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有些支線伏筆沒有收好。8964 copyright protection446PENANAzPTBbwJljQ 維尼
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我對女主角的感情變化黑人問號。8964 copyright protection446PENANAEtbyG9g5Pg 維尼
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結尾某些角色的結局與《天元突破》類近,但那些位置個人感覺不喜歡。8964 copyright protection446PENANAsllYrZqDeE 維尼
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最後的世界篇,戰力控制與解說有點馬虎啊。8964 copyright protection446PENANAl9TS9cK3C4 維尼
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整體而言,讀《遊戲之道》讓我度過了非常非常愉快的20小時!8964 copyright protection446PENANAIc0wQnaOJD 維尼
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再讀下去,就沒時間更文了。不行不行,除了讀者我也是作者,要努力寫小說呢!8964 copyright protection446PENANATcJ8Ouclok 維尼
下一篇,將會優先填其他坑,然後再回來寫讀後感。8964 copyright protection446PENANAcCtE5A0ZIV 維尼
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