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《狂亂文字》互評挑戰！- 第七回 - 簡評2020-06#12＜弒鷞＞ BY  欠我一粒甘栗 | Penana
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《狂亂文字》互評挑戰！- 第七回
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Author: 兀心
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Jul 17, 2020
《狂亂文字》互評挑戰！- 第七回
Published:
Jul 17, 2020
ENTRY #4
簡評2020-06#12＜弒鷞＞ BY  欠我一粒甘栗
Author: 兀心
Published:
Jul 17, 2020
1 Min Read
190 Words
No Plagiarism!8H3rfbeCC4eNy5RGvuHnposted on PＥNAＮＡ

開頭順暢地帶起了小說中慣見的時空背景。

查了一些資料，馬伕是「養馬」的人，車伕是「做粗活」的人，馬車伕是「駕駛馬車」的人。

所以扛轎子的人，可能是「車伕」吧？

選了諧音的「鷞」來延伸成傳說中的「鷫鷞」蠻不錯的。

最後暴君之舉點題「弒鷞」，不過比起讓兩隻擬人鳥聚在一起拌嘴賣萌（鷫鷞是傲嬌對吧ＸＤ），可能直接寫暴君妄想一手遮天反得報應來彰顯「弒鷞」的後果更切合主題？

雖然說這類故事的收法大抵如此，可能多半讀者從開頭就會預期暴君的下場，就算合理也難令人意外了。

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