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手寫短詩
ENTRY #2
Author: 析潛
Published:
Sep 7, 2018
手寫短詩
Published:
Sep 7, 2018
ENTRY #2
結語
Author: 析潛
Published:
Sep 7, 2018
1 Min Read
229 Words
No Plagiarism!VwbHuJnvjHeZxxfvaMLoposted on PＥNAＮＡ

雖然沒有什麼人參加，有些遺憾，但每一個按喜歡、參加的人我都記住了！！（想幹嘛

因為怕沒人理，我還拉了親友拾韞來假裝有人（#）

經過本人同意後代貼：

591Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡgFsOREqpDK

這裡有一個問題，她在複製網址的時候複製到了分享用的網址，但要貼照片的時候格式必須是https://imgur.com/(亂碼).jpg591Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡJ31trsdAPk

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接下來是我的小小回饋：

此文應是改寫自張繼的《楓橋夜泊》。首句「鄉愁停泊」，讓人感覺飄渺的愁似乎有了實體，接著一句「漁火蔓燒」，蔓燒的，亦是鄉愁。

其他的大家應該看得懂我就不贅述了（突然懶惰）

有一個小建議：這首詩用直式感覺更能凸顯擺盪，雖然理論上船的擺盪是繞圓形，但上下的落差感會大於左右。

172.70.131.187

ns 172.70.131.187da2
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