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ENTRY #196
評 195
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◉ 最重要的一點:其實他是想自殺才衝出馬路的!484Please respect copyright.PENANAgBo0Zudx4c
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◉ 第一句的說話流於平淡,並不能突出主角的性格及其心理狀態。484Please respect copyright.PENANAB1z0lFzBRo
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