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ENTRY #196
評 195
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◉ 最重要的一點:其實他是想自殺才衝出馬路的!331Please respect copyright.PENANAtWpNhTH5nu
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◉ 故事中不應出現遺書。331Please respect copyright.PENANA7N5SRc5OmC
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◉ 第一句的說話流於平淡,並不能突出主角的性格及其心理狀態。331Please respect copyright.PENANAZ727fDlYfQ
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◉ 最後一句卻將太多內容集於一句,不過幸好最後用了一個省略號,使焦點放在了為書上。331Please respect copyright.PENANApjC2jqx5XY
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