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ENTRY #196
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◉ 最重要的一點:其實他是想自殺才衝出馬路的!338Please respect copyright.PENANAZVWmITtejN
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◉ 故事中不應出現遺書。338Please respect copyright.PENANAkNkAMAtt9p
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◉ 第一句的說話流於平淡,並不能突出主角的性格及其心理狀態。338Please respect copyright.PENANAaZeeqBWy02
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◉ 最後一句卻將太多內容集於一句,不過幸好最後用了一個省略號,使焦點放在了為書上。338Please respect copyright.PENANAUK2zpjjwz8
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