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ENTRY #196
評 195
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◉ 最重要的一點:其實他是想自殺才衝出馬路的!335Please respect copyright.PENANAxqcPxBR9gl
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◉ 故事中不應出現遺書。335Please respect copyright.PENANAEJ0Dl0MF0F
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